~Castles Crumble

Castle walls in the skies kept me safe

   until you crept up behind me out of sight

you broke into the vault of chained melodies

   music of the heart written in braille

you pierced the outer membrane 

   it oozed a sudden aubergine recognition

bejeweled crystallization of this vessel's tune

   i felt an ancient nagging dance within my soul

old heated tempos tangled in my toes

   let me waltz the passage before a tango

crumbling walls desire avowal to prance

   upon flooded fortified fortress chambers

Reviews

[Holly Mason]

so many lines in here that have amazed my mind this morning-and there was a sleep over here last night after a big teenie bop concert-Phillip Phillips late night for us!!!!
I had to have another cup of our special wake up friend read this over until my eyes were connecting to my brain....and I adore it
prance I love that word!you have not and flooding chambers let's us know-
who will sink and who will float!
thank you fine lady...but please can we do this on a non sleep over concert morning*)

[Frieda P]

Ha, you need to tell me when then Holly....thanks for this glowing review my friend. :-)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Brilliant!... castles are magical for me, and the crumbling of the wall is rather a pleasant one, of exquisite musical enchantment...to have been taken by surprise crumbling the walls...so LOVELY!

[Frieda P]

Your review is lovely Robbie, thanks so much! xo

[Robbie~xoxo~]

My pleasure!... always...~xo~:)

[Frieda P]

Mwah! ;-) xo

[quinfinn]

this is gorgeous....sounds like hope to me. again, we have stepped out of the dark to embrace a little self worth and some much needed imagination from your fiery pen...you wax sublime beautifully. some memories are worth holding on to...n'est pas?

[Frieda P]

Ha why do I feel as though I've been theraperizied quin? ;-P Thanks love x

[lee von cleef]

Cast Iron skillet , crack the egg,
No, not on the edge
Crack the egg on the flat,
Bust the shell,
Not the membrane,
Safe there...
Bacon fat,
Making lace,
Beauty ....

Freida Fabuloso....

[Frieda P]

Ha how you got to eggs I'll never know but I love it, thanks lee!

[lee von cleef]

I try to educate, you know I am older then dirt, and think most would know how to crack a egg, but you see them knock em on some edge all the time.....

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

There will always be negative things that happen in our life but it don't mean they have to bring us down to their level. I found such a wonderful positive message in this piece.

[Frieda P]

Look at me, being all positive again? :-)

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Yeah no kidding... where you at? Why is your account closed?

[Rita L. Sev]

"You broke into the vault of chained melodies..." I could write a review in praise of this line alone - and every line before and after it in this amazing poem. Perhaps castle walls are not all they are cracked up to be, and sturdy little brick houses, though not as beautiful, keep one much safer.

[Frieda P]

Always love to hear your reviews Rita, thanks so much!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Flood warning! This poem may get you a tad excited!
Why can you not write a complete bummer woman; I am beginning to think you are only capable of gems!?

[Frieda P]

Oi, are you trying to put a curse on me my dear friend?! ;-P

[Emerald Seas]

Music of the heart written in braille
What a great line among many. I wish I were inspired to write a fifth of what you manage to create! My creative jig is up, I'm afraid. I'll have to settle for reading your finely crafted words :)
Another tantalizing poem, my friend.

[Frieda P]

Nah, it's never up, sometimes it goes on location to an unbeknownst spot but it always comes back, thanks Sera

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

I discover a lot of new words it's helpful lol :) thanks for sharing this brilliant Frie. Enjoy reading this piece.

[Frieda P]

Ha, don't you love when that happens, I crave learning a new word, thanks Marc.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

:) welcome.

[Frieda P]

Like the new avatar by the way. :-)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

heheh that's the cover of my digital music album in soundcloud :) thanks.

[Corset]

you broke into the vault of chained melodies
music of the heart written in braille
you pierced the outer membrane
it oozed a sudden aubergine recognition
bejeweled crystallization of this vessel's tune

damn those are some deep purple amazing kinds of whispers you have going on in there, I like yours better, mine where borderline rude all night, and he thinks I don't get his jokes giggles...Frieda you are beautiful, I'd be fed by such beauty every day :)

[Frieda P]

Awh, thank so much Corset, most days it just a purple haze really... ;-)

[Corset]

Purple is my favorite color ;)

[Frieda P]

Ha good choice, purple It is the color of spiritual fulfillment. It is said if you surround yourself with purple you will have peace of mind, I'm not sure it works but ftw...ha, also supposed to help imagination, hey, if it worked for Prince, it can't be all bad. lol ;-)

[Corset]

lol, really? I knew it was a cool color!