Puppet Master

i melted, you restored me

melded the unhinged parts

taught me how to dance again

colored my view brightly in your inception, then

placed me high on a shelf to dry

there was a permeable crash into me

reanimated by your commanding broadsword

you painted my eyes cobalt blue, they were brown,

my lips a pout'y gothic black

when i asked if I was pretty enough yet

your response added putty to my head

painted strands of golden locks fell into my eyes

i couldn't see what had befallen my stare

when i moaned i was not comfortably real

you proceeded to start all over again

dipped your brush in silver molten pots

drew my lips closed, tracing my eyes wide open

then a design that took me to bed 

abiding pupils dilated wide shut

desecrated your creation, dipping repeatedly 

brush stokes the color of indignant ice water

my facade began to decay,

once your masterpiece was strung perfectly,

dangled directly upon stark mantel

aloft the burnt blue embers to be sculpted 

hung and perfectly molded, 

sparsely dressed and practicable

prepared and ready for aesthetic recesses 

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

"you painted my eyes cobalt blue, they were brown,
my lips a pout'y gothic black
when i asked if I was pretty enough yet
your response added putty to my head
painted strands of golden locks fell into my eyes
i couldn't see what had befallen my stare."
This is some good poetry dear Frieda . It is like you invent the whole concept of poetry in motion all over again.
Quality as usual...:)

[Frieda P]

Oh I'm flattered Sami, 'poetry in motion' what could be better than that? Doing the happy dance...Thanks so much :-)

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure...You are welcome...:)

[Frieda P]

Woo, Featured review ;-)

[Sami Khalil]

Hahaha...:)

[Ken Simm.]

Svengali to your Trilby. Excellent take on the relationship.
I like aesthetic recesses.

[Frieda P]

On a personal level Ken? Thanks ;-)

[Mauricio Montoya]

what attracted me to this write was the title,I've been thinking of writing a piece along those lines, but then I began to read your work I could identify with each word and what they were trying to say even if work goes in a different direction I can see a lot similarity You have to remember poetry is always open interpretation,forgive me if I got lost in thought but this piece help put everything into perspective, like how it comes together and title is everything,
excellent write.

[Frieda P]

It had a few different titles but I thought that worked best, curious to see how yours turns out, send me an RR when you've completed it, and thanks for the glowing review Mauricio.

[Mauricio Montoya]

Yeah sure thing, I'm going to shelve this write in my library,thanx

[Frieda P]

Thanks, much appreciated!

[Pete Langley]

Betcha never spent much time on the shelf with all that work, didja? This is terrific, sweetheart...a wonderful continuous image of reshaping, of melding to another`s whim....oh, I`m getting carried away! You did a great job on this, Frieda. P.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Pete, so thrilled you enjoyed this one, it's a bit different for me...much appreciate you my friend x

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

simply, wow, wow, wow

[Frieda P]

Holy, three wows Neva, thanks so much!

[TL Boehm]

holy frijoles batman. so much I could read into this - depending on "who" the puppet master is. Society, our family, someone we admire, a mix of all of the above. Could be simply the ticking clock itself. A wonderful poem

[Frieda P]

Ha that made me laugh TL...thanks glad you ran with it...

[Jack...]

I think the puppet master just might be you Dear Frieda. Your words wrap themselves around my extremities and move me in ways of great pleasure and vision. You always seem to pull the strings of my mind, causing it to lose focus on everyday life and turn to face your direction. Very cool write here my friend.

[Frieda P]

I wish...if I had control of the strings, I wouldn't have to write this one...thanks Jack, always love your reviews.

[icelandicblue]

I just read a book to my students called Splendors and Glooms where a little girl is turned into a marionette or fantoccino- both words derive from the word doll. A puppetmaster cannot create a real human nor can one person completely change another. It only leads to disaster. I found your poem to be quite Gothic in its descriptions. One should always be leery of perfection because it does not exist in any of us and it most certainly cannot be created. This is a wonderful poem/story. My eyes were glued to the screen as I read this. What a fantastic piece of dark art you have here!

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much blue, I'm thrilled by your review, this is something quite different for me, so happy you enjoyed it!

[Pax]

you stroke your pen in such beautiful manner my friend...
amazing visual thougths...
truly masterful puppet :D

[Frieda P]

Woo thanks so much for your kind words Pax, love this review my friend :-)

[Pax]

a pleasure to read such beauty my friend... :)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

reanimated by your commanding broadsword

you painted my eyes cobalt blue, they were brown,

my lips a pout'y gothic black

Wow! Brilliant this my Fave. :) This is a remarkable write, everything is perfect. I enjoy the reads. Thanks for sharing friend. :)

[Frieda P]

Ha, you prefer the twisted moi! Lol, thanks so much Marc! ;-)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Welcome :) Frie :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Ha, how often people have tried to change me. Sometimes we see people as we want to see them rather than as they are. We try to fit them to our construct. Big mistake. So well set out in flowing earthy verse.

[Frieda P]

Ha women tend to do that, it's flaw in our character John, lol...thanks for the great review my friend, I wouldn't change a thing, well maybe your tude some days. ;-P

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Touche my Lady!

[Frieda P]

mwah

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Don't you mean mwah!

[Frieda P]

Ha bossy aren't we? lol

[John Alexander McFadyen]

With you my Lady someone has to take control!

[Frieda P]

Very funny.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Well I am a mental health nurse by profession (Ok yonks ago) but a straight jacket springs to mind!

[redflutterby]

Lol..... do you have an extra one for me??? ;-)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

H I escaped mine years ago and stayed under the radar just long enough for them to forget me. But you my Lady are suffering unbridaled madness!

[Frieda P]

You have no idea John...lol Also I was trying not to get too overly enthusiastic since I don't want your lady to kick my fat ars!

Of course Red, and you get an exclamation too! Mwah! ;-P

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Fat I doubt!