Butterfly Tears Haiku

gone in an instant

she fluttered by much too soon

 ~butterflies cry tears~

Reviews

[Augustus]

It is perhaps technically a "senryu" and not a haiku, since it deals with emotions (So I was told once). But honestly the distinction doesn't matter to me.

This is an extremely delicate verse. It is obvious that it speaks of a deep loss, but the use of butterflies lends a great tenderness to it. Butterflies are ephemeral creatures. They only live for about a week. And here you speak of one that fluttered by too soon. To me, this signifies that although our life span is short to begin with, most of those handful breaths were taken away from this particular butterfly. Sorrowful and beautiful at the same time. Thank you!

[Frieda P]

Interesting Augustus, I first had it as a Senryu, but then thought because it was butterflies, it'd be considered a Haiku, they confuse me to say the least. Thanks for your lovely thoughts here, much appreciated.

[beautiful dreamer]

beautiful free

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Jen.

[Baby Ricochet]

Bitter sweet.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Mark.

[Marie]

Beautiful...I will think ofyour sister whenever I see a butterfly...

[Frieda P]

That touched my heart Marie, thank you kind lady.

[quinfinn]

look at it this way.....every time you see a butterfly, it is a reminder that Lee will never leave your heart. gorgeous and sad, posies....

[Frieda P]

They say butterflies are free, that's my only hope left at this point, thanks quin.

[Jack...]

And sadly enough, so do their sisters. Frieda...so very sad.

[Frieda P]

Much appreciated Jack, thank you...

[s y e]

This was short, emotional and very powerful.

She's always with you. ♡

[Frieda P]

She's in my heart always, thanks Sye. x

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Short but very powerful... remember she still flutters in your heart.

[Frieda P]

Always, thank you Dale.

[redflutterby]

So sad and sweet.....yes butterflies do cry! ;-(

[Frieda P]

The ones I know, do, thanks Red x

[Sirius King]

beautiful write!

[Frieda P]

Thank you Serenus.