Distraction~

distractions 

like high beams reflecting off snow

that thunderous clap on a sunny wedding day

the birds in early morn when you've not enough sleep

you distract me

like uninvited ants to a picnic basket

the bees to honey when you're enjoying tea

when time moves too quickly to catch a breather

you distract me

is it attraction, love or an itch to be scratched?

when I try to concentrate, you invade my mind

like a bulldozer tearing down old homes

replacing past memories with a new view

i wonder if I should take a chance on you

like a gypsy with no place to go

frost in the middle of july

poetry with no meaning

music with an off key haunting beat

the dark side of the moon...

you distract me

Reviews

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Oh yes, I feel the distraction... I know this all too well....

"you distract me




is it attraction, love or an itch to be scratched?

when I try to concentrate, you invade my mind

like a bulldozer tearing down old homes

replacing past memories with a new view"~ A Powerful, thunderous distraction can bulldoze any rational thought in process, indeed...

[Frieda P]

Thanks Robbie, glad this one resonated with you.

[KAOlmsted]

Holy cats can I relate to this...I'm supposed to be working right now but my mind is...elsewhere *cough*SIG*cough*) xD I love the repetition of "You distract me"...great stuff.

[Frieda P]

Haha *cough* not a bad distraction! So glad you read this one the kimmer & can relate ;-)

[KAOlmsted]

True true true...a welcome distraction indeed ;-) Always my pleasure.

[Annabelle Lee]

Haha, made me think of this really cute guy my friend and I creep on in science class.

[Barbara Walker]

Good metaphors and structure to this piece. I like it!

[Frieda P]

Thanks Barbara.

[luviva]

wow... loved the last line best.
and i dont know what you had in mind when writing this but if this was a bout some *guy* he truly is a distraction. but who can blame you given the fact that we all do have our own distractions.! NICE ONE MY DEAR F

[Frieda P]

Thanks luviva, and I'll never tell ;-)

[Rhianne Ney]

Yeah, sometimes love proves to be distracting. I agree

[Frieda P]

Thanks Rhianne.

[Rhianne Ney]

You're welcome

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

"I wonder if I should take a chance on you" and "You distract me" are the two most impactful lines in this beautiful piece. I have felt this before...being distracted and disarmed by someone to the point of feeling a little out of my body. Well done, my friend.

[Frieda P]

Ah, you read me well, thanks Friday.

[Zoe Marie Ross]

Love all the metaphors, very imaginative.

[Frieda P]

Thanks for stopping by and your review, much appreciated Zoe.

[Emerald Seas]

I enjoyed your rendition of THAT type of distraction. Anyone that has had their heart tugged knows that distraction. Loved your spin in this poem!

[Frieda P]

Ha glad you enjoyed my little distraction here Sera, yes, those are the best kinds, thanks so much!

[Acucena G.]

as a distracted person I just can that its beautiful and touching

[Frieda P]

Thanks for your visit & review Acucena.

[Acucena G.]

you welcome, you are invited to visit and review my work. Thanks in advance

[Foxemerald]

There is a dark haunting sound near the end of this rendition, with its alluring poetic sound and its mix of light humor. There is such a contrast of elemens that I am taken aback by how deeply you can delve into darker shades . . . it is enchanting.

[Frieda P]

Oh how I love the word 'enchanting' thanks so much Foxemerald.