Moon Struck

Moon Struck

A Poem by Frieda P
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For the Crimson diavolo, you know who you are...let it be me.

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Celestial skies were brilliantly bursting that night
       my eyes were open wide
             when I tripped into you
swiftly fell to the rhythm of your heat
          sweet was the fluid dance
                   of merging hearts
like moonbeams that pranced on twilight lit seas
         i believed in you  as the promised religion
    got lost in the nirvana of your touch
         i surrendered my soul in lush tones of oleander
luscious poison, so enthralling, it hurt so good
            this caged freedom of flight clipped
                                  my wayward gypsy wings
i wantonly entrusted them to your care
 you inspired me to captivate the moon
                              in reckless abandon
i wished upon an imploding stellar star 
          that this crash commune in divine reality






© 2013 Frieda P


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This is absolutely stunning, Frieda. I love the words you chose for this piece.....the images of white oleander, the gypsy wings, the stellar star......mesmerizing. This is perhaps my favorite yet. Such a vivid imagination you portray in your writings. I'm enthralled.

Posted 11 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

I'm enthralled by your review Amber, thanks so much, really appreciate it, love the oleander myself... read more
Avocations of Amber

11 Years Ago

Just hurry up and write some more! haha.... :) can't wait to read them.....



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This is absolutely stunning, Frieda. I love the words you chose for this piece.....the images of white oleander, the gypsy wings, the stellar star......mesmerizing. This is perhaps my favorite yet. Such a vivid imagination you portray in your writings. I'm enthralled.

Posted 11 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

I'm enthralled by your review Amber, thanks so much, really appreciate it, love the oleander myself... read more
Avocations of Amber

11 Years Ago

Just hurry up and write some more! haha.... :) can't wait to read them.....
Your words are ethereal they leave me breathless. Love is perfectly conveyed and I felt it, here, in my heart. I especially liked the "moonbeams that pranced on twilight lit seas" line. Very romantitc.


Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Breathless eh? Thanks, so good of you to say Maryanne, Steven gagged on that same line, ha...men. s.. read more
Amazing

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

So nice of you to say Wolflover, thanks.
Hatchling

11 Years Ago

You're welcome
Another greatly written poem, is it just me or you seem to create wonderful pieces everyday. It seems like you never lack inspiration either (:
Great job and continue working wonders

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Thanks Rhianne, much appreciate your kind words, it's like therapy for me, so yeah I HAVE to write e.. read more
Rhianne Ney

11 Years Ago

That's alright and that's discipline~
Can I take what you`re taking, Frieda? Another smashing.I can hear the heavenly applause. P.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Thank you kind sir. x
Nice. You must really like that person

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Thanks Mark.
Holy synesthesia! My favorite literary device, used to great effect in these lines. This poem is a wonderful assault on the senses. It's so physical, so grounded, and so otherworldly.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Wow, what a great review, thanks for stopping by, much appreciated tamsen.
Ache Frieda...when you want to write pretty...it is so nauseating...all the warm good fuzzy feelings it inspires. This was a beautiful example of being moon struck. Cher would be proud of you. xo

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Oi she's back in all her gooey goodness! Thanks Muse, sometimes you just gotta go there, even if yo.. read more
'like moonbeams that pranced on twilight lit seas'

oh god that's gushy... god...

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

You better mean 'gushy' in a gooey good way buster. ;-P thanks Steven...
Steven

11 Years Ago

ha.. you can always count on my honesty, eh?
Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Yeah you're brutal ;-)
F-Fanstastic write as always

R-Realisitic and resonates volumes of metaphor and imagery

I-Intimate writes splendid with her rich sensuality

E-Exquisites writer always attracts and influence readers

D-Divalicious words expressed in any of her art piece

A-Artistic woman with a rich imaginations



Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

You're looking at a big sloppy kiss coming your way! mwah! ;-P
Marc Marlon Villaflor

11 Years Ago

lol :)
Frieda P

11 Years Ago

:-)

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