In Silent Words

In Silent Words

A Poem by Frieda P
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Collaboration with Jack, the Master of rhyme & romance. Thank you so much my dear friend, you raise me up. ♥

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In Silent Words

 

I sat upon a cool zephyr waiting for my true love

seasons passed without a tug upon my heartstrings

winter took a fall, within summer's heated grip

spring’s poppies never sprouted their happy essence

 

Here within this day dream my heart it breathes the air

Finding but an empty scene within this prism’d view

Colors bathe my body as so I am much aware

Loneliness my constant friend now waiting here for you

 

i tried  to rise above the sun

the moon kept calling out my name in chant

only darkness danced in the pale of night

i lay my head upon the shoulder of surrender

 

Tears now form the mist a’ drench of all that I do see

Weeping fluent as the moon which falls on me this night

Star light open canopies of gemstones shining free

Blur beneath the vision as my heart does hold this sight

 

to find a sweetness in my own name

Of every season lone of dreaming

love shed a crimson tear in a whisper

In silent words which have no meaning

© 2013 Frieda P


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Oh my, wow! This was so..... beautiful! There is so many beautiful, passionate lines in this write guys. For some bizarre reason while I was reading this, the song, You Raise Me Up was playing in my head, haha. I dunno why though.

"Star light open canopies of gemstones shining free
Blur beneath the vision as my heart does hold this sight"

The imagery in this piece was amazing, there was so much. It was a like story came alive on the screen. You guys really aced this piece. The collaboration was great!

Going in my favorites. 100/100

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

John Alexander McFadyen

11 Years Ago

well answer because you are blonde!
s y e

11 Years Ago

I haven't a scooby what you mean John...
beautiful dreamer

11 Years Ago

it not the orignal scooooby its the fake inflatible scooooby! lol i'll explain myself in pm's



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Your thoughts and emotions are both perfectly interwoven into a superb write. It is flawless..xo

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Wow Lily, thrilled you think so, thanks so much. xo
"winter took a fall, within summer's heated grip" in my opinion, the best line, well, a tie with "I tried to rise above the sun" Trying to reach beyond what we can see, what is offered us.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

You got it in one, unlike Pete's puzzle ;-) Thanks so much eglantine...
This is so lovely...it has sadness, it has sweetness...it glitters with jewels and flows with tears...

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Wow Marie, that means a lot coming from you, thanks.
Well, I must say you and Jack write well together. This is a lovely poem. So many great lines including "I tried to rise above the sun the moon kept calling out my name in chant." Kudos to you both!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

This was our first time collaborating, we have totally different styles but it worked as a whole, so.. read more
Great Collab ! Well Done & nicely woven you two !!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Thanks Renee, it wasn't too hard with a great poet like Jack!
Renée

11 Years Ago

Collabs are so fun... Glad you two enjoyed and shared !
holy s**t. wowsers times like a million. put two amazing writers together i swear... this is amazing. just wow. amazing. i'm speechless. i feel like i'm babbling like an awestruck teenager. probably cause i am but this is amazing!

Posted 11 Years Ago


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Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Lol Jen! So you are, and thanks you crazy teenager! :-)
beautiful dreamer

11 Years Ago

i am too what?
I don't know what to say.. Well here it goes. This piece of art is simply Beautiful, The word choices that you used i this poem really brought it to life. Outstanding, it kept me hooked from the very beginning until the last sentence.

"Finding but an empty scene within this prism’d view"

That sentence stood out to me, i loved how you used the word prism'd in here it is lovely. Great job.
~Res

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Thanks so much Res, those were Jack's lovely words, so happy you enjoyed this one.
I liked the first and third verses and two lines of the last verse the best. :)>

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

redflutterby

11 Years Ago

Hell no..I'm naturally high!! Its a redhead thing.....;-p
Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Ha so that's the problem, I have one ginger brother & sister,that explains a lot!!
redflutterby

11 Years Ago

Haha.... ;-)
That is an awesome collaboration of two great minds...A song of two hearts in silent words...:)

Posted 11 Years Ago


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Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Thanks so much Sami, it was fun to write too. ;-)
Sami Khalil

11 Years Ago

Good to know... You are welcome...:)
Poignant write felt the ache of the loss of love great word choice and imagery !lovely collobaration!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Glad you enjoyed it MOON.

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