Oh my, wow! This was so..... beautiful! There is so many beautiful, passionate lines in this write guys. For some bizarre reason while I was reading this, the song, You Raise Me Up was playing in my head, haha. I dunno why though.
"Star light open canopies of gemstones shining free
Blur beneath the vision as my heart does hold this sight"
The imagery in this piece was amazing, there was so much. It was a like story came alive on the screen. You guys really aced this piece. The collaboration was great!
Going in my favorites. 100/100
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11 Years Ago
So jazzed you liked it farfalle, it's not hard to look good when Jack's got your back. I agree with.. read moreSo jazzed you liked it farfalle, it's not hard to look good when Jack's got your back. I agree with the line you picked, of course it belongs to the master!
11 Years Ago
Oh yeah, featured review! Woohoo! :)
Haha, does it? Aaaaah, definitely the master then.. read moreOh yeah, featured review! Woohoo! :)
Haha, does it? Aaaaah, definitely the master then! :P
"winter took a fall, within summer's heated grip" in my opinion, the best line, well, a tie with "I tried to rise above the sun" Trying to reach beyond what we can see, what is offered us.
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11 Years Ago
You got it in one, unlike Pete's puzzle ;-) Thanks so much eglantine...
Well, I must say you and Jack write well together. This is a lovely poem. So many great lines including "I tried to rise above the sun the moon kept calling out my name in chant." Kudos to you both!
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11 Years Ago
This was our first time collaborating, we have totally different styles but it worked as a whole, so.. read moreThis was our first time collaborating, we have totally different styles but it worked as a whole, so jazzed you liked it Brie.
holy s**t. wowsers times like a million. put two amazing writers together i swear... this is amazing. just wow. amazing. i'm speechless. i feel like i'm babbling like an awestruck teenager. probably cause i am but this is amazing!
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11 Years Ago
Lol Jen! So you are, and thanks you crazy teenager! :-)
I don't know what to say.. Well here it goes. This piece of art is simply Beautiful, The word choices that you used i this poem really brought it to life. Outstanding, it kept me hooked from the very beginning until the last sentence.
"Finding but an empty scene within this prism’d view"
That sentence stood out to me, i loved how you used the word prism'd in here it is lovely. Great job.
~Res
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Thanks so much Res, those were Jack's lovely words, so happy you enjoyed this one.
If you want to know me, read my poetry, it's all in there. I am a mother of three sons (my finest moments) a sister, a survivor and a little bit crazy. I lost my beloved sister to suicide, so you'll.. more..