In Silent Words

Collaboration with Jack, the Master of rhyme & romance. Thank you so much my dear friend, you raise me up. ♥

In Silent Words

 

I sat upon a cool zephyr waiting for my true love

seasons passed without a tug upon my heartstrings

winter took a fall, within summer's heated grip

spring’s poppies never sprouted their happy essence

 

Here within this day dream my heart it breathes the air

Finding but an empty scene within this prism’d view

Colors bathe my body as so I am much aware

Loneliness my constant friend now waiting here for you

 

i tried  to rise above the sun

the moon kept calling out my name in chant

only darkness danced in the pale of night

i lay my head upon the shoulder of surrender

 

Tears now form the mist a’ drench of all that I do see

Weeping fluent as the moon which falls on me this night

Star light open canopies of gemstones shining free

Blur beneath the vision as my heart does hold this sight

 

to find a sweetness in my own name

Of every season lone of dreaming

love shed a crimson tear in a whisper

In silent words which have no meaning

Reviews

[s y e]

Oh my, wow! This was so..... beautiful! There is so many beautiful, passionate lines in this write guys. For some bizarre reason while I was reading this, the song, You Raise Me Up was playing in my head, haha. I dunno why though.

"Star light open canopies of gemstones shining free
Blur beneath the vision as my heart does hold this sight"

The imagery in this piece was amazing, there was so much. It was a like story came alive on the screen. You guys really aced this piece. The collaboration was great!

Going in my favorites. 100/100

[Frieda P]

So jazzed you liked it farfalle, it's not hard to look good when Jack's got your back. I agree with the line you picked, of course it belongs to the master!

[s y e]

Oh yeah, featured review! Woohoo! :)

Haha, does it? Aaaaah, definitely the master then! :P

[Frieda P]

Oh Yay...and yes, the master! ;-)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

well answer because you are blonde!

[s y e]

I haven't a scooby what you mean John...

[beautiful dreamer]

it not the orignal scooooby its the fake inflatible scooooby! lol i'll explain myself in pm's

[Frieda P]

Woo we made the big time Jack! ;-)

[Jack...]

What did you expect Frieda, your words are the perfect start to a wonderful collaboration. I am honored to have written with you.

[Frieda P]

You're not getting another red cent out of me to say nice things. ;-)

[Pete Langley]

This is a skilful blending of styles, both reflecting the infinite patience of loneliness and waiting for love to come. I especially enjoyed the middle stanza. Well done, you guys. P.

[Jack...]

Pete, your kind words are a thrill to read today. thanks so much

[Ency Bearis]

Awesome poem with remarkable contents.

[Jack...]

Thanks you so much my Friend. Glad you enjoyed it

[Souladareatease]

to find love after empty seasons, how grateful could we be eh?
A Most lovely write You two have weaved, such a worthy subject penned with Longing!!!
Greatness You Guys!!!

[Jack...]

Frieda's beautiful words were the catalyst to this work of art. Thank you so much Soul

[Steve Downen]

Wonderful collaboration. This poem blends the quintessential styles of the 20th century to form a unique, 21st century one. Great job. I'm certainly going to read this a few more times.

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Steve, happy you enjoyed it and please come back anytime

[Avocations of Amber]

Lovely, chocolate-covered words and deep thoughts of love, passion, and heartbreak.....very soulful collaboration! love it...

[Jack...]

Thanks so very much. I appreciate your kind words.

[Frieda P]

Oh chocolate covered words, like that, thanks Amber.

[Avocations of Amber]

:) you're most welcome......

[Tomás Ó C..]

Until we love ourselves, it will be hard to find others to love us...

[Jack...]

Tomas, thank so much for stopping by and reading our poem.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Tomas, much appreciate the visit.

[Maria ♥]

I really enjoyed this, really really wonderful to read... I'm probably going to go back up and re-read it again and again!

[Frieda P]

Oh a twofer, couldn't be happier,thanks so much Maria, appreciate the visit & review.

[Jack...]

Thank you Maria

[Lori Grace]

Very nicely written!!

[Frieda P]

Thanks Lori, appreciate you dropping in.

[Helen Crutchett]

Oh absolutely stunning collab. you two marvelous poets!

Each stanza blended into the other so sublime and seamlessly. I wouldn't know who wrote what? Some collabs. I've seen you can invariably match the words to the writer. But not this poem.....you write as one.

Bravo!!

Helena

[Jack...]

Thank you so much Helena. I appreciate your kind words

[Helen Crutchett]

Not a prob. You are most welcome Jack and Frieda P.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Helena, much appreciated!