In Silent Words

Collaboration with Jack, the Master of rhyme & romance. Thank you so much my dear friend, you raise me up. ♥

In Silent Words

 

I sat upon a cool zephyr waiting for my true love

seasons passed without a tug upon my heartstrings

winter took a fall, within summer's heated grip

spring’s poppies never sprouted their happy essence

 

Here within this day dream my heart it breathes the air

Finding but an empty scene within this prism’d view

Colors bathe my body as so I am much aware

Loneliness my constant friend now waiting here for you

 

i tried  to rise above the sun

the moon kept calling out my name in chant

only darkness danced in the pale of night

i lay my head upon the shoulder of surrender

 

Tears now form the mist a’ drench of all that I do see

Weeping fluent as the moon which falls on me this night

Star light open canopies of gemstones shining free

Blur beneath the vision as my heart does hold this sight

 

to find a sweetness in my own name

Of every season lone of dreaming

love shed a crimson tear in a whisper

In silent words which have no meaning

Reviews

[s y e]

Oh my, wow! This was so..... beautiful! There is so many beautiful, passionate lines in this write guys. For some bizarre reason while I was reading this, the song, You Raise Me Up was playing in my head, haha. I dunno why though.

"Star light open canopies of gemstones shining free
Blur beneath the vision as my heart does hold this sight"

The imagery in this piece was amazing, there was so much. It was a like story came alive on the screen. You guys really aced this piece. The collaboration was great!

Going in my favorites. 100/100

[Frieda P]

So jazzed you liked it farfalle, it's not hard to look good when Jack's got your back. I agree with the line you picked, of course it belongs to the master!

[s y e]

Oh yeah, featured review! Woohoo! :)

Haha, does it? Aaaaah, definitely the master then! :P

[Frieda P]

Oh Yay...and yes, the master! ;-)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

well answer because you are blonde!

[s y e]

I haven't a scooby what you mean John...

[beautiful dreamer]

it not the orignal scooooby its the fake inflatible scooooby! lol i'll explain myself in pm's

[HeavenSunArcadez]

I am New here, but i really enjoyed this piece, everything was woven together beautifully where there were two writers but two became one like the perfect fusion... very passionate detail displayed and love the use of words... excellent work and kudos too u both...

[InsanityWriter]

Absolutely beautiful. Amazing, amazing work. :) Well done!! ^_^

[Amy Azra Dean]

Beautiful :)

[Rhianne Ney]

"In silent words which have no meaning"
Great quote~
Nice poem bout love and I think the meaning and the lines and the rhythm fits well (:

[Saumya]

thats...........!!!!!!!1fantabulus

[Salar Majak]

look, your works are amazing,Jack's works are amazing, but combined together they are closer to divine!
the collaboration of two writing souls MUST have an incredible of spring as this one
i love how in the second stanza you make more space between words making us read every word alone and think about it!
this is by far the most beautiful thing i've read on this site and you two have achieved divinity
amazing!

[Frieda P]

Wow Sal, your review has made my evening! Thank you kindly, much appreciated!

[Salar Majak]

:D i'm glad it did!! i really liked this one!

[black.butterfly]

Me likey. Very nice.

[Jack...]

Thanks so very much.

[Just Kim]

Wow I am very imressed, Love the flow alot.
Love the rhyme scheme too.
You two blend inks well,
Keep writing always.

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much for your kind words.

[LostandAlone]

Wow, this is beautiful! I love the way it was so beautiful and passionate. I love this, I have a bit a hopeless romantic side, that most don't know about me, but I love sweet, yet passionate writings. I enjoyed this, thanks for sharing.

[Jack...]

Thank you so much. It is easy when you have a fantastic poet to write with.

[LostandAlone]

You're welcome. :)

[Steven]

Rising above the sun is very hard work.

[Jack...]

And trying to shine like Frieda is even harder. Thanks for reading.