Chance Crash

wrapped the night in white silk 

reciting poetry by dusky subterfuge,

so it'd be easier to swallow whole

tousled hair on the pillow curled in satin

you crashed the gates of reveling crazy

sensibilities were caught between the sheets

unattainable read the intrigue alluring

i breathe you in like a heroin addict

smoke rose to the ceiling in morning light

etchings on my skin of thrashing insanity

you cast your spell from the prototype

i dubiously drank down the adulteration

watched as the sun assaulted the moon's senses

zephyrs lost their memory in the afterglow

opening the book of detached, broken liaison

you crushed my heart between random pages

bookmarked leather, with a heather feather

nothing rhymed quite right after the feint

Reviews

[ms. barrie]

the imagery you conveyed in this poem, as well as again, blah blah blah your choice of words, falling into their proper order in each stanza is nothing short being brilliant. this is breath-taking and a very enjoyable read that has taken me away. i am sorry for always being so redundant with my reviews upon your lovely art, Frieda, i've run out of words!
thank you for sharing the beauty of your words with us all. i have a lot of catching up to regarding your writings, apologizes. pen on :) - xox

[Frieda P]

Blah Blah Blah...I love your review! lol Thanks so much Barrie! xo

[ms. barrie]

you welcome Frieda...what can i say...yous the Poetess. take care, and pen on - xoxo!

[Frieda P]

Ha you know I can hear you in my head when I read your reviews! ;-P xox

[ms. barrie]

egads, sorry about that LOL! i hope you've been well. :) - oxox

[Frieda P]

Lol especially that blah blah blah part, you're so sarcastic! ha ;-P xo

[ms. barrie]

lol well I'm a little redundant in regards to reviewing your poetry, no sarcasm intended! your poetry is positively spellbinding. plus i haven't slept and i have class. :) - xox

[Frieda P]

I know you have class, you don't have to tell me ;-) And sleep, what is that new fangled theory you speak of? xo

[ms. barrie]

i have a theory? i'm questioning if i still have a brain. i have no idea, aw thank you Lovely Frieda, as you do as well! oh i will be passing out after class. 7p.m. you be well and take care - xoxo :)

[Frieda P]

You too Barrie, and try to get some of that 'sleep' stuff...xo :-)

[ms. barrie]

Thank you...sleep stuff Jason Scott Lee...fantasy is nice :) - xox

[s y e]

Wow, this was a deep powerful write, Frieda. Another score from my favorite Pickle ;-P 

"you crushed my heart between random pagesbookmarked leather, with a heather feathernothing rhymed quite right after the feint"

My favorite lines, OMG I loved it all. The journey you took us on..... the imagery, the metaphors, it was all amazing! You certainly know how to blow me away, dontcha!

The regrets after the affair, the emotion, the feelings was all caught! Loved it!

~ Noodle

[Frieda P]

Wow noodlebumble, this is a flip flops review if I ever did read one, thanks so much!!

[Leigh]

There are some really good individual lines that make this into a great poem...

[Frieda P]

Thanks leigh, glad you enjoyed this one, it happens to be one of my favorites, it was that time when it captures a feeling, hardly happens that often.

[Leigh]

....And what a feeling to have captured

[KAOlmsted]

Compelling write. I know you're gone right now, but I'm hoping you'll be back...just need you to know, I'm still reading ;-)

Feel better...xoxo

[Frieda P]

Sorry i missed your lovely review, thanks the kimmer. xoxo

[KAOlmsted]

...seems we all f**k the what every now and again ;-) My pleasure, lady. You are still, and always, my whole entire heart...err...arse...err...liver?? ;-) xoxo

[InsanityWriter]

Excellently written!!

"etchings on my skin of thrashing insanity"

I loved the whole thing, but this ^^^ was probably my favorite line. ;) Such awesome imagery!! Stupendous piece.

100/100

[Frieda P]

Can't thank you enough Skittles! :-)

[Tai Ryens]

Sounds like that "right after an evening of mercilessly intense sex" conversation.

[Frieda P]

Ha I wish! Thanks Tai :-)

[Pete Langley]

Not quite right, eh? He might not have been, but the poem is exquisite as a small compensation. Some lovely lines, sweetie. P.

[Frieda P]

Grazie mille Pete.....

[kublakhan27]

Masterpiece :)

[Frieda P]

Wow how did I ever miss this one? Thanks hon! :-)

[kublakhan27]

Haha I just read it again, I love this one ;) Always a pleasure love :)

[Baby Ricochet]

"I breathed you in like a heroin addict"
"You crushed my heart between random pages"
Great lines

[Frieda P]

Thanks Mark, the second was my favorite line....

[kmf]

just. stunning.

[Frieda P]

Much appreciate the visit & review kmf, thanks.