Pea Soup

the sun lost its memory

we picnicked on the moon

with laughter from long ago

i brought my pillow for dreaming

you fell asleep without gravity,

specifying the appetizer was cold

our intermezzo drowned in deep pea soup

              ...we opted against leftovers

Reviews

[Relic]

Where do you come up with this stuff, I don't get it. Is there a guru inside you somewhere telling you all this. You really are uncanny. Is prophetic your middle name? Hmm. Very strange how you can come up with such interesting poetry. Hmm again. Yeah, hmm. haha

[Frieda P]

You make me laugh Relic hmmmm. Thanks, I'm really humbled by your review, appreciate it so much!

[Relic]

My pleasure.

[s y e]

Woohoo girl! I've officially been blown away! Dayuum!

Loved it as always

[Frieda P]

Dayuum...I'm so thrilled!

[s y e]

Oh I know ;) I can hear you from Scotland. ..... lol

[Jack...]

Amazing...as usual.

[Frieda P]

Thanks always Jack.

[Pete Langley]

Thanks but no thanks, eh? I love the gentle relaxed mood of this piece - the unhurried, gentle acceptance of what will be or not, though I can`t help noticing just a smidgeon of irony. Enjoyable and successful. Frieda. P.

[Frieda P]

A smidge you say kind sir? Perhaps a helping more than a modicum ha ;-)

[Rita L. Sev]

That first line is beautiful - the sun lost its memory - so many direction this line could take. And then you take it to a completely original place - a relationship that falls flat, told in the metaphor of this strange picnic. I bow to you!

[Frieda P]

Oh thanks so much Rita, that one just popped into my head and I flew with it, so glad you enjoyed it. No bows. ;-P

[Blue Ivory]

Starting from the first line, you continue to blow me away with every word. Each line contains a lot of meaning. No elaboration, just pinpointed implications.

[Frieda P]

As you always blow me away with your kind words Siren.

[Robbie~xoxo~]

LOL Sounds like my dinner tonight!...Loved this... very creative, original, and entertaining... Nicely done! ~xo~:D

[Frieda P]

Hahaha oopsie! Thanks muchly Robbie, personally I hate the stuff. xo ;-P

[Deuces]

I have to agree with the below... with each new piece brings new brilliance from you. You're a constant shining light here on WC. Thoroughly enjoyed.

[Frieda P]

Much appreciated Cyn...grazie.

[Sami Khalil]

Brilliant write from a brilliant lady. I like the most:
"i brought my pillow for dreaming
you fell asleep without gravity"
I hope it is Ostrich feathers...Just kidding...:)

[Frieda P]

Ha @ Ostrich feathers, nice...thanks Sami ;-)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)