Pea Soup

the sun lost its memory

we picnicked on the moon

with laughter from long ago

i brought my pillow for dreaming

you fell asleep without gravity,

specifying the appetizer was cold

our intermezzo drowned in deep pea soup

              ...we opted against leftovers

Reviews

[Relic]

Where do you come up with this stuff, I don't get it. Is there a guru inside you somewhere telling you all this. You really are uncanny. Is prophetic your middle name? Hmm. Very strange how you can come up with such interesting poetry. Hmm again. Yeah, hmm. haha

[Frieda P]

You make me laugh Relic hmmmm. Thanks, I'm really humbled by your review, appreciate it so much!

[Relic]

My pleasure.

[YouoweYoupay]

I liked this alot! I could spend many minutes finding different interpretations, but the emotions conveyed through word choice and brevity reached me deliciously. Thanks for posting,

-Rain

[Frieda P]

Thanks for your visit and reviewing Rain, I'm really happy you like this one.

[The 13th Eros]

Tis a bittersweet blessing in this moonlit darkness to know that pea soup is an aphrodisiac... But how the rains dampen the feast...

[Frieda P]

Ha, no I didn't but why do I get the feeling most 'anything' is an aphrodisiac to you?! xo

[The 13th Eros]

Well, perhaps... Do realize how arousing every breath is? Hmmm... ;)

[Frieda P]

Ha I must be doing it wrong ;-)

[kmf]

this is lovely
so glad site presented this jewel to me on sign-in
but, it's "its," when possessive (I do that all the time, and wouldn't mention, either, except that typos make me stop uneccesarily in reading)

[Frieda P]

My Achilles heel, I do it all the time, thanks for the review and letting me know.

[BlackRose]

Interesting, but I really like this. With a sort of comical side to it. Get's you thinking a bit about whatever or things in the past that pop in the head.

[Ees]

Very interesting and surreal poem. I enjoyed the anti-gravity feeling of this piece. It is strange and light, but executed well and easy to envision pieces of what you have written.
Great job!

[Tate Morgan]

Save me a seat on that ride i want to go along. i want to look back on the little blue marble of Earth and realize how insignificant we are. Everything that we hold as history happened here. Everyone we ever loved cared about or admired lived and died on a floating marble out in the endless vacuum of space

[Frieda P]

Hmm Tate is you're seeing blue marbles floating, there's a problem hun ;-P What I meant to say was thanks...

[Tate Morgan]

lol no i was remembering the day i saw the earth from the cameras of Apollo 8 .It was Christmas eve 1968 and i remember seeing my mother cry when they read from genesis .At that moment every one of us felt akin to one another and everyone stopped to watch in awe at what the Americans had done

[Frieda P]

Ha gotcha, I thought maybe you needed meds lol

[Tate Morgan]

no but ill take em if you got em Im a hippy from the 60s

[Frieda P]

I missed sharing 101 in pre-k, no can do ;-)

[Tate Morgan]

Dont be Bogartin

[Frieda P]

Hey I should pass it around this site, maybe people would chill out!

[Tate Morgan]

lol Yeah let em get their smoke on!

[Androglossia]

There is something about this poem that's telling me to put it into my favorites. Your use of words here is simple and classic enough to keep me bedazzled. These are fragments of many memories skillfully crafted into fine verse light enough to be loved.

[Frieda P]

Haha then you should listen Maryanne. Thanks so much for such a strangely stirring review... ;-)

[kublakhan27]

There is no dark side of the moon really...matter of fact it's all dark...

[Frieda P]

You're going to argue with Pink Floyd....what? :-P

[kublakhan27]

Haha That's the last voice you hear on that album, but you have to turn the volume up to hear it ;P If the setting was a forest instead of the moon, I probably would have opted for Stairway :P

[Frieda P]

I don't think I've ever hear it...will have to pay close attention next time...

[kublakhan27]

I didn't hear it till I read about it, and I listened to the record a million times before that...but after you hear it once, you never miss it...

[Frieda P]

It's 2 AM so I can't turn up the volume right now or I might get my butt kicked, but I'll check it out tomorrow....

[kublakhan27]

It's right after the female singers fade out and the heartbeat comes in ;P

[beautiful dreamer]

i love this Free, amazing as always! :) great write

[Frieda P]

Thanks Jen :-)

[beautiful dreamer]

welcome love :)

[Emerald Seas]

I was joking about the twilight zone. This seems like it's been plucked from the land of Oz. I picture all things unusual, bold colors, and deep hues of the rainbow shadowed by the moon.
What, pea soup? very unusual piece

[Frieda P]

Ha yea, and I'm the scarecrow! Thanks..I love peas but hate pea soup so that should splain it Lucy. ;-P

[Emerald Seas]

You haven't had my pea soup. My kids have loved it since they were little. Of course, I put so much ham in it, who could hate it ;)

[Frieda P]

Send me the recipe, I love ham & peas, I don't know why I can't stand it...

[Emerald Seas]

I'll send when I get home. Of course, I doctor it up quite a bit from the basic recipe. I'm one of those cooks that can throw stuff together and it turns out pretty good. I hardly follow a recipe for anything anymore, unless it is something I am completely unfamilar, or I can't taste it... such as shellfish since I'm allergic!

[Frieda P]

I can't recall the last time I used a recipe, only baking but I hardly ever do that...thanks.