Tethered Darkly

crush me with a morning sunsmile

tipsy on the perfume of mushroom wine

disrobe your heart to sophomoric cries

lessons learned from naked souls

convoluted with screams for clemency

softly sways the voice of discernment 

tethered to the teetered backlash,

pivoting on a quiver of echoed bumbles

of spasm'd arrows flung in poison offense

lip service on silver platters hold no purpose

rephrase the resplendence forgotten

sans promise, enchantment falls on fire

Reviews

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

I love the imagery and the wording here-- "tipsy on the perfume of mushroom wine" and "convoluted with screams for clemency". There is pleasure here, but also pain...and I get the sense that this is a bit of a love unrequited piece. Pleasure is not as beautiful "sans promise"; I enjoyed this feel. Well done, as always.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Friday, I always enjoy your reviews so much.

[Deuces]

Sounds like the enchanter has met her match? What a fiery piece here. I had to read this around three times. Almost seems like an erotic exorcism taking place. Your writes as of late are taken to new levels. Whatever you do, don't stop.

[Frieda P]

Ha, 'erotic exorcism' I like that, thanks my friend.

[Monster ^.^]

Wow, it's been a long time since I've read your works, and I should say, not a least did your skill depreciate! it's otherwise!

Now, this is some read. The first line made me smile. I don't know why, but I think it has that devilish tone or whatever. And I brought that with me till I ended the piece. Meaning? It was so good ;)

[Frieda P]

If I can bring a smile to your face Monster, I'm happy, thanks ;-)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

BOOM! nothing can replace the Queen! Brilliant write always!

[Frieda P]

Woo you flatter me so Marc...I'm going to have start paying you my friend ;-)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Lol no need I enjoy your writing :) no pressure, just watered your bonsai lol and drink coffee.

[beautiful dreamer]

wowers free this is amazing!

[Frieda P]

I got a wowsers, I'm happy, thanks Jen :-)

[beautiful dreamer]

welcome :)

[Rita L. Sev]

tethered to the teetered backlash, pivoting on a quiver of echoed bumbles
of spasm'd arrows flung in poison offense - lip service on silver platters hold no purpose

Hmmm... those poison arrows certainly can fly, can't they? Brilliant write! Though, the idea of mushroom wine... can't say I'd imbibe on that! :)

[Frieda P]

Oh I love mushrooms, there actually is one made from Shitakes I think, thanks so much Rita.

[icelandicblue]

Mushroom wine sounds dangerous- as does holding on to anger. As Confucius said: If you embark upon a journey of revenge, dig two graves.

[Marie]

I did not know Confucius said this...it sure sounds like him...

[Frieda P]

Guess it depends on the mushrooms, thanks so much.

[kublakhan27]

I really need to work more mushrooms into my diet...this piece appeals to all the senses...an imaginative feast ;)

[Frieda P]

Just be careful if you're picking them yourself Steve :-P

[kublakhan27]

Haha yeah no kidding ;P

[s y e]

Woweeeee! I loved this, it was very metaphorical.

"tipsy on the perfume of mushroom wine" - Loved the imagery. I can sense the pleasure here but I can tell there is also pain.

I had to read it a couple of times to get my spaghetti brain around it but wow, you always amazing hun, it was amazing.

[Frieda P]

Ha spaghetti brain, no way....and thanks farfalle! ;-P

[s y e]

Lol, yes way ;-)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I wish I was clever enough to work this one out. an interesting collection of metaphors. A convoluted mind me thinks!

[Frieda P]

Ha you just figured that one out John, thanks. :-)

[Jack...]

Lip service on silver platters hold no purpose.

I believe this one line says it all.

Your creative juices are flowing (must be the mushroom wine). The undercurrent of this piece floats bouyantly to the top and crashes to the shore like an determined wave. very nicely penned my friend.

[Frieda P]

Oh I love this review Jack, ha, everyone is into that mushroom wine....