Tethered Darkly

Tethered Darkly

A Poem by Frieda P

crush me with a morning sunsmile
tipsy on the perfume of mushroom wine
disrobe your heart to sophomoric cries
lessons learned from naked souls
convoluted with screams for clemency
softly sways the voice of discernment 
tethered to the teetered backlash,
pivoting on a quiver of echoed bumbles
of spasm'd arrows flung in poison offense
lip service on silver platters hold no purpose
rephrase the resplendence forgotten
sans promise, enchantment falls on fire

© 2013 Frieda P


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I love the imagery and the wording here-- "tipsy on the perfume of mushroom wine" and "convoluted with screams for clemency". There is pleasure here, but also pain...and I get the sense that this is a bit of a love unrequited piece. Pleasure is not as beautiful "sans promise"; I enjoyed this feel. Well done, as always.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Thanks Friday, I always enjoy your reviews so much.



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A beautiful and enchanting piece

Posted 11 Years Ago


Amazing imagery. :) Superbly done!!

Posted 11 Years Ago


"sans promise, enchantment falls on fire" oh yeh, i know too well. so...are you in the business of slaying already broken hearts here, or is this a fantasy piece? somewhere in that beautiful, gifted, calculating mind of yours...there beats the heart of a true romantic, and she is screaming for release from that "dark tether"....oh, i get you....sometimes it is scary how much i get you. but then, you slay me with your poetry on a regular basis....i love your twisted heart...and your silver tongued mind.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

You are a true romantic huckleberry....haha 'twisted heart & silver tongue', you say the nicest thin.. read more
That's my girl

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Thanks Mark.
Wow, loving the metaphor and the couplets in this one .. "mushroom wine, teetered backlash, echoed bumbles, " Interesting piece and provoked thought and wonder.. thank you, shallimar (Rose)

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Thanks so much shalimar, so happy you liked this one.
No fun without sincerity and the right deeds to prove it.
The message is awesomely done up in brilliant metaphors and stunning imagery.
Love perfume of mushroom wine.
As always, this was a unique poem to read.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Thanks Divya, always an interesting take from you, much appreciated.
Ayvid N

11 Years Ago

:)
If this had gotten any deeper I would have fallen
into the abyss...Loved these lines:
"lessons learned from naked souls
convoluted with screams for clemency"...

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Ha, thanks Joe, next time I'll provide a lifeline, we all one....
Such is why I so enjoy erotic poetry. I read this mostly with the thought of erotica in mind, and the disrobing of souls is quite intriguing that I'm surprised I have yet to hear of them until now. Well done, Frieda!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Always an intriguing response from you Tai, disrobing of the soul takes immense trust, thanks for yo.. read more
Your crocheting needle went mad on this one, love, but I think I worked it out. Having worked it out, I`ll keep my own counsel, letting the enchantment fall on the fire, then rise again like the phoenix. Superb crocheting, Frieda. P.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Ha purl 1 knit 1, wait that's not crocheting, I don't know much about either, thanks for the sweet r.. read more
Well, after 5 reads, my addled brain still doesn't know what it's telling me. Guess I'll have to sleep on it and maybe come back later.

j.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Don't feel bad j, I never know what it's telling me either, thanks.

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If you want to know me, read my poetry, it's all in there. I am a mother of three sons (my finest moments) a sister, a survivor and a little bit crazy. I lost my beloved sister to suicide, so you'll.. more..

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