Reverse Posture

what is this gaping memory

vivid past recklessly crashing 

posturing recondite & shrill

in the recesses of spent blood

crushing the backbone of resolve

moments on the clock that haunt

beckons formidable  to dare a revival

driving insanity as dusky metallic chaser

stuck in reverse on breakneck speed pursuit

esoteric wisps of darkly emotive triggers

shooting the psyche with high caliber ammunition 

head on collision with fatally smoky consequences

survival hermetically sealed ripe within noxious, lethal fumes

dawn reveres the moon's pulse within further contemplation

prescribed elixir dressing wounds for temporary compensation

complications pronounced dead upon arrival...rest in peace

Reviews

[AYVID N]

"dawn reveres the moon's pulse within further contemplation
prescribed elixir dressing wounds for temporary compensation"

- Very impressive. Frieda, you are poetess unmatched here.

This poetry has some great and incredible phrases and lines...

"esoteric wisps of darkly emotive triggers
shooting the psyche with high caliber ammunition " - So intense the agony...


Then...

"survival hermetically sealed ripe within noxious, lethal fumes" - Such suffering to live on...

One of your masterpieces Frieda.

[Frieda P]

Wow Divya, I'm overwhelmed and humbled by your words here, thanks so much, glad you like my crazy rantings! ;-)

[AYVID N]

You are welcome Frieda. The lines were just out of the world, this time. I had to say it. :)

[AYVID N]

And if this is crazy ranting, then I would love to be crazy anytime! :)

[Frieda P]

You made my weekend! :-) x

[InsanityWriter]

Amazing. Very well done. :)

[Tai Ryens]

Poetry at its finest.. Structure wise, I find it is quite readable backwards, which you probably didn't intend.. Enticing nonetheless.

[Frieda P]

I was hoping you'd read this one Tai, always eager to hear your opinion, someone else said the same thing, it was not intended but I'm so glad you've found it as such.

[Tai Ryens]

I do try to read most of what's in my RR box, late as I may be, aha.~

[beautiful dreamer]

wowsers frieda peta this is amazing wowsers

[Frieda P]

Glad you liked it Jen :-)

[beautiful dreamer]

it got TWO wowsers yes i liked it alot!

[Frieda P]

xD

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

I had to read a couple of times, the layout threw me a little but I love you guage on the emotional deliberance of situation, well done, good read.

[Frieda P]

That's what I was hoping for so yay...thanks Thomas.

[Sam Gregory]

shooting the psyche with high caliber ammunition

[Sam Gregory]

F**k, it didn't post the rest of my review... the second time that's happened *Flips life*. Anyway, I said it's one of the most emotive pieces I've read by u, powerful, vivid, intelligent use of vocabulary. I didn't like the font altho it does suit the poem, my eyes just cant do their job properly haha. Good stuffshdfernwfv :)

[Frieda P]

Wow, thanks Sam...ha 'flips life' a lot of that going around lately ;-)

[Sam Gregory]

Haha, tis a good read

[luviva]

this is eye ctaching and totallya reverse posture.. (just from the structure)
uhmmmmmm RIP .. bt wasnt for that, was still flowing with the flow.
you know how to get me going and this is a great write nice work FRIEDA.
your writing is truly unique.

[Frieda P]

Oh thanks so much luviva you're much too kind, appreciate it!

[Pete Langley]

If this is what I think it is supposed to be, Frieda, I sincerely hope it works for you, love. It reads like a retinue of your woes being recited as a cant at an exorcism or burial of them. I hope the cathartic exercise works as well as the poetry, because the poetry works very well. The need to reverse the spiral of despair is implicit in every line of this piece. P.

[Frieda P]

Let's hope Pete, or a wee step at least, thanks so much x

[icelandicblue]

I love the construct of this. I like that you used all lower-case letters. Sometimes it takes longer for the psyche to heal than any corporeal injuries. I always enjoy your extensive vocabulary.

[Frieda P]

Always appreciate your kind words blue, thanks.

[Chloe]

Yay! Thanks for depriving me of sleep for the next year or two! This was quite a bit creepy, though I've come to that expect from you. Like I said on your other poem, in my opinion, it is just so lovely when a poet of your caliber doesn't choose to write the same namby-pamby over and over and over just so you are ensured that everyone will always like. I know you've heard this before from me, but it is kind of hard to describe how good your poems are because you can't just say, "Wow! How cute!", or "I love it!", so the end result is me ranting forever about how creative you are, and how inspiring you are, but I just want you to know, I'm not just saying that to be nice or whatever you might think. You truly are a creative and talented poet, and you have probably been the greatest inspiration to me on this site. I'm glad I found you on here. Write on! (pun intended)

[Frieda P]

Haha why should I be the only one that doesn't sleep?! That made me laugh, you expect 'creepy' from moi! Thank you so much for your extensive review...much appreciated Chloe.

[N!LoC]

if only i could pick your brain lol !

[Frieda P]

I think that might hurt N!LoC, thanks.