...do you want to know a secret?

you looked into my eyes

said you read a secret there

i blinked and you were gone

secrets destroy more than one...

"Nothing weighs on us so heavily as a secret."

Jean de La Fontaine

Author's Note

Reviews

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

"I blinked and you were gone
secrets destroy more than one..."

Nice poem, Ms. F.
For me, it depends upon the secret to be shared. If it is about yourself, I'm going to listen because you just want to make your burden lighter. But if it is about someone's story, I will be gone in a blink of your eye because it is gossip. Lol :)

[Frieda P]

Different kind of secret yes, and gossip can be just as damaging at times, thanks for your thoughts here dhaye... :-)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

You're welcome :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Those secrets must be scary and powerful. A very entertaining short poem. Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Frieda P]

Thanks John glad you enjoyed it.

[kublakhan27]

This one is a thinker for sure...it's also a worrier...

[Frieda P]

Isn't that we're usually doing when we're thinking? ;-)

[kublakhan27]

It is when I am, I suppose ;P

[Frieda P]

That's what I meant, wasn't going to point a finger, now that you've done it yourself lol

[kublakhan27]

Haha predictable answer from me? ;P

[Frieda P]

Now do you want me to start on that beige stuff again? ;-P

[kublakhan27]

Beige is a very neutral colour, but you're not a neutral person ;P

[Frieda P]

haha are you trying to pick a fight with moi too? ;-P

[kublakhan27]

Haha no, I'm no match for the incomparable Mrs. R ;P

[marie]

secrets can destroy so quickly.... must say I know this pain, wonderful piece, great job:)

[Frieda P]

sorry to hear that marie, it's certainly a life changer, thanks

[marie]

i'm over it, though the friendship has yet to be restored, still hop and still pray that i can regain that, but yes it has forever changed my life

[jwesley]

Now this, I think, is my favorite of yours thus far . . . but then you knew it would catch me, didn't you?

[Frieda P]

Thanks j, I see you like simple...much appreciate your pause on my page...

[jwesley]

Ah, there you're somewhat wrong, my friend. I like, above all, a piece that leads me from one line, one stanza to the next without me needing a leap of faith that the next will be there . . . this piece and other, longer pieces you've written has done that. I also like well done emotion. This accomplished that also. The picture actually makes it a much longer, though sparsely worded (simple) piece, than you actually see on the page . . . and that's also a sign of excellence, and skillful use of the readers vulnerabilities (emotions, expectations, wants, needs).

Simple. Simple has nothing to do with this piece, my friend. Maybe to you the writer, but there's so much depth in the piece that we as writers sometimes don't see, but as readers, of another's "simple" work, do.

Simple --- not this piece, my friend.

enjoy you...

j.

[Frieda P]

Holy j, I'm bathing in this response of yours, it has made me smile and dance, you've made my day, no...my week!

[KeeD]

Hah.. Well written :P I guess I was your secret after all :P

[Frieda P]

Shhhhhhh!!

[Rita L. Sev]

Your simplicity says it all here, Frieda. Secrets can destroy the one who holds them, the one who keeps them and the one who never hears them. Well penned.

[Frieda P]

You got it in one, exactly Rita, thanks so much for your thoughts here.

[anne p. murray- LadeeAn..]

Frieda, I'm glad you posted this poignant piece. It relates to Sami's latest poem "Elephants in Secret Rooms". Nothing weighs on us so heavily as a secret.” Jean De La Fontaine

[Frieda P]

That dang Sami was in my room again?! I meant, thanks so much Jean....

[anne p. murray- LadeeAnne]

Chuckle, Chuckle. "Nothing weighs on us so heavily as a secret.” was a Jean De La Fontaine quote...
Luv' ya' I'm Anne ;-)

[Frieda P]

The elephant stepped on my head, sorry Anne! Nice to meet ya! ;-)

[Sir Joseph]

Short write with a ton of meaning and emotion. Bravo

[Frieda P]

Grazie Sir Joseph.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Oh a rather cold and empty chill felt in this descriptive short piece. Nicely conveyed.

[Frieda P]

So thrilled you 'felt' it John, thanks.

[Lily Mae]

Secrets destroyed my family...the truth gets so distorted that no one can function. Short yet powerful words..xo

[Frieda P]

Happens more often than we realize, thanks Lily. xo