Swallowed Darkly

A black orchid placed upon the heart

 pricks the skin darkly

 bleeding it somber shades of inky sorrow

raining torrents of spent injustice

gardens wilt under grey metallic thunder

drowning  in scarlet's bloody wash of tears 

swallowed by a vast ocean of remorse

phases of the dimly lit moon

 stir an assault of crashing waves

 metered blitzes of melancholy 

 roll with the undertow of reflection

overcome by the sweetness of sad lullaby's proffer

 it's siren call to sleep

Author's Note

Reviews

[redflutterby]

Since I'm on my phone I couldn't listen to Evanescence while reading this. You're painting in dark tones today my friend. Sending you butterflies to carry you to that beach Nirvana for some positive restoration. This poem packs an emotional punch... another signature piece. :-)

[Frieda P]

Yes my lights got mixed in the with darks and now we have shades of grey, thanks so much Red!

[Jack...]

So dark and so breathtaking. I matters not, dark light or vibrant colors, you always know the direct pathway into my soul. Your words are my breath, it comes to take me home. Nice Frieda. But what else would I expect?

[Frieda P]

And this review took my breath away, literally Jack. I can't tell you how much that affects me, from the bottom of my heart, thank you.

[Sam Gregory]

So descriptive, beautifully penned, dark. Darkness truly is a wound. Good work :) Btw, I love Evenescence :) Currently addicted to Bring Me The Horizon tho

[Frieda P]

Thanks Same, oh, they give me a headache but I understand why you like them, dark and raw!

[Sam Gregory]

haha a headache? I see what u mean I guess, their newest album is a bit mellower, a perfect belnd of their 2 styles tbh :) Sounds kinda refreshing to me

[Sam Gregory]

I have this stuck in my head :) http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=lir3dzYIhz0

[Frieda P]

Thanks Sam, but that's not available in this country for some reason, I hate when they do that!

[Sam Gregory]

GODAMITT! lolol

[Frieda P]

Which song is it, sometimes it'll come up with a different link.....

[Frieda P]

doh, forget it I got it, the name is still there...

[Sam Gregory]

lolol

[Frieda P]

ha you think that's more subdued, I must be getting old! Woe is me....ha

[Sam Gregory]

It is compared to their earlier stuff haha, more melodic. Idk lol

[David Scott]

Pick the black petals and let them wilt. Water and feed the colorful blossoms in your heart and the siren will harmonize to a different tune. This is a sad music, but it is only one song of many.
From an artistic view, you nailed the thought! I actually think this is one of your best laments... Bravo on the write!
Love to the heart that can write of this color and felt the ink stain her lovely soul.

[Frieda P]

I might just have that last line tattooed on my body David, or at least framed, such a lovely review, thanks so much.

[Chloe]

Watch out!!! Frieda is going gothic! Just kidding.... :) I really did like your poem though; one of your darker ones. It's quite refreshing to see poems like yours, poems that say something people might think is weird, or scary, or crazy. I'm glad you write pieces like this. Wonderful work.

[Frieda P]

Refreshingly dark, I like that! It's hardly weird, it's real life! Thanks Chloe.

[KeeD]

The music invites the reader in as he goes on a journey of self reflection and discovery. Beautifully walking the overwhelming path of what it is to be human. I like this poem a lot one of the best i've read lately. So much depth to it.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Kee, glad you felt the refection in this one, nice to see you grace my page again, I've missed you. :-)

[Rob Santana]

(sigh),This is beautifully sad. I was gonna hold off on reading this cuz I've been so depressed lately, but I'm glad I read it. I needed a good release. My anger and sadness builds up to over whelming levels where I hold everything in and it hurts even more. I haven't cried since my best friend, my right hand man was murdered in front of me when I was 18 years old. I didn't even cry when my father comitted suicide because I was so angry with him. But today it was meant for me to read this piece and cry.....release

[Frieda P]

Sometimes that release is what keeps us afloat, I know full well you come from this same place of grief & pain, this one is close to my heart. Thanks Rob.

[kublakhan27]

I'm not sure which element of despair I relate to most in this one...I think you've covered all the bases here...the second-to-last sounds a lot like me from yesterday ;P Vivid and intense, which is par for the course when it comes to your writing :)

[Frieda P]

You're too kind Steve, despair comes in many colors, all meld into grey, thanks xo

[quinfinn]

someone is feeling a little low today.....i thought i was on the mound right now...so, you though you could steal my depression thunder with this morose and pensive montage? i guess you do know how...you wear it too well though. even though i hate what this means i love it, because it is an awesome write....now, deep breath.....let's see that charming and fearless joisey goil.... oh, btw.....amy lee could have the marshmallows off my cocoa any time!

[Frieda P]

Could never steal your thunder dear quin, sometimes it's just better to let it out. You know Amy lost her sister at a very young age. I can relate.

[quinfinn]

how well i know....i have all their albums, but my fave is the one with the dvd of them live in paris....i have never seen an audience pour out so much love as they did for this band, especially amy....she is a formidable talent with a survivor heart and a gentle spirit....kind of like ......frieda posies!

[Frieda P]

Wow hon, that's the nicest thing anyone has ever said to me! Holy cats, even to be in the same breath as Amy...you've made my day quin! x

[Rita L. Sev]

I can feel the sorrow of life oozing into that vast ocean of remorse... A dark, beautiful and honest write.

[Frieda P]

Muchly appreciated Rita.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I see you only now send me your happy face my lady? As always such deep pathos in words of magic that paint in pallets of black on black. Amy Lee cannot fail to move me.

[Frieda P]

Ha, you're quick! Glad you hear you were moved by this one John. ;-)