Swallowed Darkly

A black orchid placed upon the heart

 pricks the skin darkly

 bleeding it somber shades of inky sorrow

raining torrents of spent injustice

gardens wilt under grey metallic thunder

drowning  in scarlet's bloody wash of tears 

swallowed by a vast ocean of remorse

phases of the dimly lit moon

 stir an assault of crashing waves

 metered blitzes of melancholy 

 roll with the undertow of reflection

overcome by the sweetness of sad lullaby's proffer

 it's siren call to sleep

Author's Note

Reviews

[redflutterby]

Since I'm on my phone I couldn't listen to Evanescence while reading this. You're painting in dark tones today my friend. Sending you butterflies to carry you to that beach Nirvana for some positive restoration. This poem packs an emotional punch... another signature piece. :-)

[Frieda P]

Yes my lights got mixed in the with darks and now we have shades of grey, thanks so much Red!

[Blue Ivory]

My pick: 3rd line

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Exquisite write, love the dark tone in this lovely poem. Hmm can't say anything it is perfect Frie, the emotions burst like a volcano. :) thanks a lot for sharing this stunning piece.

[Frieda P]

You say the nicest things Marc, I love that notion 'burst like a volcano'....! Thanks so much :-)

[Ayvid N]

A very original and novel choice of words to convey anger and rage at past injustice. I could see just scarlet and black. The last line is gripping! Great!

[Frieda P]

Such sweet words coming from you dear friend, much appreciated...x

[Ahmad Cox]

I love how you seem to write so vividly and beautifully even if its from a place of sadness.

[Frieda P]

Such a sweet thing to say Ahmad, thanks so much.

[stephen dillon]

nice language,as in the certain words chosen good job

[Frieda P]

Thanks stephen

[Baby Ricochet]

Whenever I see the word skin and ink near each other I think Tattoos so I got an image of a bloody black orchid tattoo in my head from this, which is a good thing.

[Frieda P]

Not exactly but I like that idea, thanks Mark....

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

Very Scarey...

[Frieda P]

More sad I'd say....

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

so sad it sacres

[Frieda P]

Ahhhh yes it does in that way....

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

it did for a minute minit

[Faffy]

we seem to think alike frieda =P "screaming silence" was inspired by this very song!

you bend the idea of darkness around your pen with such grace it makes me want cry with jealousy (compliment!)

anyways i love you imagery, its stunning, flawless, godly... drat ! I'm running out of synonyms

A black orchid placed upon the heart
pricks the skin darkly
bleeding it somber shades of inky sorrow

that stanza caught my eye and slowly glued it to the screen. i love the way you make such darkness seem so beautiful and euphoric.

"overcome by the sweetness of sad lullaby's proffer
it's siren call to sleep"

that line is pure money, love it 100%

sorry for the rant =/

-Roshan

[Frieda P]

What rant Roshan, that was music to my ears! Humbled by your review, this one is close to my heart, thrilled that you enjoyed it. Many thanks!

[Tai Ryens]

This, right here, is Edgar level writing. I particularly admire your longing for retribution as a justification to harm inflicted, only to dance with death and never have inflicted pain at all.

[Frieda P]

Woo, that made my day, if not my entire week, thanks so much Tai!

[Barbara Walker]

Great imagery in this piece. The metaphors and similes just flow with the negative emotions. Great write!

[Frieda P]

Thanks Barbara, sometimes we just have to purge it, glad you enjoyed it.