Swallowed Darkly

Swallowed Darkly

A Poem by Frieda P

A black orchid placed upon the heart
 pricks the skin darkly
 bleeding it somber shades of inky sorrow

raining torrents of spent injustice
gardens wilt under grey metallic thunder

drowning  in scarlet's bloody wash of tears 
swallowed by a vast ocean of remorse

phases of the dimly lit moon
 stir an assault of crashing waves
 metered blitzes of melancholy 
 roll with the undertow of reflection

overcome by the sweetness of sad lullaby's proffer
 it's siren call to sleep

© 2013 Frieda P


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Frieda P

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Since I'm on my phone I couldn't listen to Evanescence while reading this. You're painting in dark tones today my friend. Sending you butterflies to carry you to that beach Nirvana for some positive restoration. This poem packs an emotional punch... another signature piece. :-)

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Yes my lights got mixed in the with darks and now we have shades of grey, thanks so much Red!



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My pick: 3rd line

Posted 11 Years Ago


Exquisite write, love the dark tone in this lovely poem. Hmm can't say anything it is perfect Frie, the emotions burst like a volcano. :) thanks a lot for sharing this stunning piece.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

You say the nicest things Marc, I love that notion 'burst like a volcano'....! Thanks so much :-)
A very original and novel choice of words to convey anger and rage at past injustice. I could see just scarlet and black. The last line is gripping! Great!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Such sweet words coming from you dear friend, much appreciated...x
I love how you seem to write so vividly and beautifully even if its from a place of sadness.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Such a sweet thing to say Ahmad, thanks so much.
nice language,as in the certain words chosen good job

Posted 11 Years Ago


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Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Thanks stephen
Whenever I see the word skin and ink near each other I think Tattoos so I got an image of a bloody black orchid tattoo in my head from this, which is a good thing.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Not exactly but I like that idea, thanks Mark....
Very Scarey...


Posted 11 Years Ago


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poetry-kiddo alienbaba

11 Years Ago

so sad it sacres
Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Ahhhh yes it does in that way....
poetry-kiddo alienbaba

11 Years Ago

it did for a minute minit
we seem to think alike frieda =P "screaming silence" was inspired by this very song!

you bend the idea of darkness around your pen with such grace it makes me want cry with jealousy (compliment!)

anyways i love you imagery, its stunning, flawless, godly... drat ! I'm running out of synonyms

A black orchid placed upon the heart
pricks the skin darkly
bleeding it somber shades of inky sorrow

that stanza caught my eye and slowly glued it to the screen. i love the way you make such darkness seem so beautiful and euphoric.

"overcome by the sweetness of sad lullaby's proffer
it's siren call to sleep"

that line is pure money, love it 100%

sorry for the rant =/

-Roshan




Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

What rant Roshan, that was music to my ears! Humbled by your review, this one is close to my heart,.. read more
This, right here, is Edgar level writing. I particularly admire your longing for retribution as a justification to harm inflicted, only to dance with death and never have inflicted pain at all.

Posted 11 Years Ago


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Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Woo, that made my day, if not my entire week, thanks so much Tai!
Great imagery in this piece. The metaphors and similes just flow with the negative emotions. Great write!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Thanks Barbara, sometimes we just have to purge it, glad you enjoyed it.

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Added on April 7, 2013
Last Updated on April 7, 2013
Tags: loss, grief, depression, sorrow, remorse, sleep, eternal sleep

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Frieda P
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If you want to know me, read my poetry, it's all in there. I am a mother of three sons (my finest moments) a sister, a survivor and a little bit crazy. I lost my beloved sister to suicide, so you'll.. more..

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