~Is That All There Is?

If happiness is a warm gun, 

            where's my ammunition

you were locked and loaded 

           before I had a chance to breathe

shot me through the heart,

               then right between the eyes

the music was blaring,

       the dance all a frenzy

my pulse was rocking to your beat

next thing I knew

 you swept me off my feet

you changed your tune

          faster than the steps

listening to old sad songs now

          whilst the needle skips

stuck in that groove of

         ~ is that all there is? 

Author's Note

Reviews

[redflutterby]

Ahhhh....is that all there is?? Sometimes my wonderful friend I'm afraid so. You're left with that lingering residue of dissatisfaction. But there's always more music and if you dare another dance to be had. Next time frisk them good first for any weapons. Ha!! ;-)

[Frieda P]

So not the answer I was looking for big mouth, must you always speak the truth?! Thanks, glad you came up with a solution! :-)

[redflutterby]

Lol... sorry my mouth has a mind of its own. And I said sometimes ...s**t!! Love ya... ;-

[Frieda P]

Lol, do I look deaf to you, heard you first time! ;-P

[redflutterby]

Ha..I commented and it didn't show up so i commented again!! Man you are tough today!!! Pfftt... ;-p

[Frieda P]

Hahah somebody tied my knickers in a knot! ;-P

[redflutterby]

Who dared mess with your knickers?? Someone needs an arse kicking?? Haha...

[Frieda P]

Aliens, they didn't know any better. ;-P

[redflutterby]

Must have a death wish...lol!!! ;-)

[Frieda P]

Ha, I think you're on to something there Red! ;-)

[Holly Mason]

wonderful work
I really enjoyed reading this
if happiness is a warm gun-who couldn't want to read after that...
shooters beware we are watching and this time our eyes are open*)
thank you for sharing

[Frieda P]

Wide open, hopefully they remain in that position, thanks Holly!

[Tai Ryens]

Though it seems a little strained to begin with, you complete the end gracious as a musician adding last touches to his symphony. Just the thought of the lullaby makes me woozy, and "is that all there is" poetry (which I call because of their often pitfall endings) always entices me, to see where your mind goes before falling off the brink.

[Frieda P]

Thanks for your honest critique Tai, glad you came around at the end.

[Michael G.]

Good song lyrics.
Great poem.
Did you try and put a penny or a nickle on the needle? Sometimes it got the record to stop sticking. Sadly, it never changed the lyrics.

[Frieda P]

Ha does everyone use that old trick, unfortunately my son confiscated my record player, it's now getting enjoying CA. Thanks Mike.

[Michael G.]

It was the only way to get some of them working right. The fancy ones you could "dial" in the extra weight from the back of the arm. LOL. The things we sometimes remember.

[Frieda P]

I know right, still no beats it!

[Frieda P]

*sound*, I type too fast for my own good!

[Yellow Butterfly]

You set a wonderful scene here Fp, a frenzy of emotions taken to the dizzy heights of ecstasy. A build up of lust filled desires about to combust....and....and... and then
..... nothing... how frustrating.. lol!

Another fab one from the great lady herself... :O)

[Frieda P]

Ha glad you got a kick out of it YB..'combust' oh yeah....!

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

Bette Midler...Freida...face so similar..
could it just be now...no
but maybe it could be...

[Frieda P]

What are you talking about kiddo? lol

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

are u bette midler?

[Frieda P]

No I'm actually Audrey Hepburn, why?

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

its ok...
you are a god singer...

[Frieda P]

god singer, is that like good?

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

gospel is good they tell me:)

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

its like...the king and i...the queen and you

[Frieda P]

I can sing about as good as I can be Audrey.

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

if u really r audrey than ...u r a ghost using modulated cosmic beams to tap into the www

[Frieda P]

I would have thought you knew that by now....

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

i said a pretty ghost:)

[Frieda P]

Must have been that dark shadow you tapped into.

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

ahhh...lol...i had almost forgotten

[Frieda P]

I never forget ;-P

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

u must be sands of time

[Frieda P]

Do I look like an hourglass to you??

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

no i meant princess of persia

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

http://www.writerscafe.org/Desertdreamer

[Frieda P]

You're on the wrong thread, now you're just trying to confuzzle me!

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

no she is treading the Arizona plains

[s y e]

This was a great piece, I love how you left off on a question. Sometimes that is all there is, you're left wondering or waiting or whatever. Sometimes you can be unsatisfied.

"If happiness is a warm gun,
where's my ammunition"

I loved these lines, you hooked me from the moment I started reading, I love how you worded it, it was great. The song is very fitting, it's a great song too.

Nice job Frieda.

[Frieda P]

Thanks farfalle, so formal today, where's the flips flops? ;-P I mean thanks hunni!

[s y e]

Welcome.

[rubie]

So relevant, meaningful and universally applicable. But it occurred to me as I read this, that once the right person comes along, the question "Is that all there is" need not ever be asked.....

Terrific write!

[Frieda P]

If one should be so lucky I guess so, there always those other than love though, thanks rubie.

[Barbara Walker]

This is great Freida! It tells a story that is universal. Many people can identify. i love the way you used the music analogy.

[Frieda P]

So happy you enjoyed it Barbara.

[Sami Khalil]

"where's my ammunition

you were locked and loaded

before I had a chance to breathe

shot me through the heart,

then right between the eyes."
The question that you asked in the beginning of the poem is so relevant to all of us and then you answered it marvelously with your own unique argument as if you are talking to your inner self or heaven of sorts. This is a deep write , a debate fo the meaning of happiness and the way to achieve. Is immature happiness that at all if we don't have all the info and all the right ingredients.
I think people on this site need to stop looking at your writes as a surface of an ocean without going to swim into your ocean of thoughts. Some will drown for lack of understanding and some will regain so much energy and enthusiasm after reading them...
Pen on and keep that light on the hill...:)

[Frieda P]

Holy Sami, I'm speechless after reading your comments here, I love that you read me with such conviction and always go deeper than the surface. Much appreciated my dear friend, you blew me away with this one. x :-)

[Sami Khalil]

I do. It went into my faves... I wish others can see the depth...:)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Still asking? lol hahaha nice work Frie, you are genius. Always amazed me with your write. Thanks for sharing?

[Frieda P]

Ha never stop asking Marc, my mother always said she should have named me 'Why', thanks so much!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

lol : hhhaha great

[Frieda P]

true story ;-)