~Is That All There Is?

If happiness is a warm gun, 

            where's my ammunition

you were locked and loaded 

           before I had a chance to breathe

shot me through the heart,

               then right between the eyes

the music was blaring,

       the dance all a frenzy

my pulse was rocking to your beat

next thing I knew

 you swept me off my feet

you changed your tune

          faster than the steps

listening to old sad songs now

          whilst the needle skips

stuck in that groove of

         ~ is that all there is? 

Author's Note

Reviews

[redflutterby]

Ahhhh....is that all there is?? Sometimes my wonderful friend I'm afraid so. You're left with that lingering residue of dissatisfaction. But there's always more music and if you dare another dance to be had. Next time frisk them good first for any weapons. Ha!! ;-)

[Frieda P]

So not the answer I was looking for big mouth, must you always speak the truth?! Thanks, glad you came up with a solution! :-)

[redflutterby]

Lol... sorry my mouth has a mind of its own. And I said sometimes ...s**t!! Love ya... ;-

[Frieda P]

Lol, do I look deaf to you, heard you first time! ;-P

[redflutterby]

Ha..I commented and it didn't show up so i commented again!! Man you are tough today!!! Pfftt... ;-p

[Frieda P]

Hahah somebody tied my knickers in a knot! ;-P

[redflutterby]

Who dared mess with your knickers?? Someone needs an arse kicking?? Haha...

[Frieda P]

Aliens, they didn't know any better. ;-P

[redflutterby]

Must have a death wish...lol!!! ;-)

[Frieda P]

Ha, I think you're on to something there Red! ;-)

[Blue Ivory]

The piercing words have truth and humor. I love your sense of wit! It must suck to get shot twice, lol!

[Simphonia Hale]

Wow, I found myself in the poem! I just hope that people will see how much a person is willing to give to them for love and that if given another chance, they won't blow the last straw so that maybe, the last straw would be all there is. And yes, it's better than nothing. :) A very good piece, thanks Frieda!

[AYVID N]

The last two lines had me....Something that I often ponder over...Is that all there is...Very well asked Frieda!

[Frieda P]

Ha Divya, how did I know you'd so get it?! ;-) xo

[AYVID N]

;) I am still searching for an answer Frieda...

[Frieda P]

Ha I hope you're not holding your breath.....!

[Deuces]

Sometimes it is what it is, indeed. It's what makes a new day so exciting and what makes yesterday so depressing. You always bring the reader into a lively scene. You paint amazing pictures and detailed images that release your emotion. I always appreciate your willingness to bare it all.

Loved: you were locked and loaded
before I had a chance to breathe
shot me through the heart,

Nice!

[Frieda P]

Thanks for your kind words Cyn, always enjoy your visits.

[marie]

sometimes,it is, but we must remember that its all there is only for a while:) a new day comes and with it new opportunities:)

[Frieda P]

never know what to expect, thanks marie, much appreciated. :-)

[marie]

no problem:)

[beautiful dreamer]

nicely done frieda peta!

[Frieda P]

Thanks jenpen!

[Baby Ricochet]

I love that song. Good one frieda

[Frieda P]

Thanks Mark, me too....

[Jack...]

Sounds to me like the wrong guy pulled the trigger. He insinuated he was loaded with everything to make you happy but in the end just shot blanks. Very cool Freida. I really liked how this felt, you take a theme and present the most amazing work from it.

[Frieda P]

So happy you did, and right on Jack, you got it in one!

[Faffy]

hah! i love your visuals from the very first lines and the strength of the mood you create!
it was complete literary ecstasy =)

-roshan

[Frieda P]

Wow Roshan, I love that word, don't you? 'ecstasy'....hmmm

[kublakhan27]

A very serious change of tune from the previous work, but again it is a tune that fuels the engine...the way you use music as a poetic device is really something to behold ;) I saw this poem get written on a nightly basis in my academic years...

[Frieda P]

Ha why doesn't that surprise me Steve? You know music is the be all & end all!

[kublakhan27]

Haha I knew it wouldn't...I'm still longing for a day when I'll meet an Elton John looking for a Bernie Taupin, that's my dream job ;)