BLEURGH

aka Broken Spirit

The feeling when you can't breathe, 

or perhaps you just don't want to...

the gnashing of the soul...

it's raw to the bone, ripping the lifeforce into shreds

it gnaws its way into the psyche, perplexed

asking questions with no answers

it grates and crushes, until the mind is just a grind

broken, fallen down in crevices between pain and regret

half dead, half alive in festering remorse, false hope

a mere whisper of a spirit remains

the ghost of you haunts me...

is it an aberration or finely designed

I  feel I'm going insane, yet I never want it to stop

Reviews

[redflutterby]

a mere whisper of a spirit remains
the ghost of you haunts me...
is it an aberration or finely designed
I feel I'm going insane, yet I never want it to stop

A small part of us does remain in the lives of loved ones. What it is i can't say...maybe energy...maybe ghost...maybe angelic host. While we assume this should be comforting some times its not. Or in your case its a mixed response...both repelling and drawing you. You've released the kraken with this poem. It's fierce honesty can't be ignored, its brutal poignancy is undeniable. You always give of yourself in your poetry...this one was came from the deepest part of you. Thank you for sharing it...much love...

[Frieda P]

Yes exactly Red, it has both effects, which is maddening at best. Yes, this is the kraken, you know it well, seems after our talks there's always a poem to wrestle with too. Much appreciate your friendship and support, you were a rock last night, thanks again my dear friend. Much love...x

[Deuces]

One word: Masochism. Something I can relate to and something we all unconsciously are a slave to at one point or another. Beautifully conveyed and articulately written.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Cyn, I guess it is to some extent....conscious or not, it's always a challenge to be there.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

"i feel I am going insane, yet I never want it to stop"--so true. I have been to this place, as a matter of fact, i seem to visit it often. You have described this scenario in a beautifully emotional and stringently plausible way. An excellent write, my friend.

[Frieda P]

It's funny how many people can relate to this, when we think we're the only ones that go through it. Thanks Friday.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

I feel that way all the time! :)

[Frieda P]

Oh geez, that's not good! You need a break or you really loose it....

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

I meant that I often am amazed how we can be "in" something we think is super personal and then find that others "relate" to it. Yeah, I've been in your poem before, but if I were in it all the time I think I'd jump out a window. You do need a reprieve from time to time! :)

[Frieda P]

So true, whenever the subject comes up, you'd be amazed...we're not as unique as we think, we all have the same hang ups and problems...

[quinfinn]

knowing that the very idea of what is torturing your soul is also giving you your heart and courage to continue is a blessing and a curse. but, you don't need this explained to you. it is through your writing that you release this pain and anxiety so that you may continue to concentrate on the normal business of getting on with your life. you do it admirably and with great finesse....pen on, dear posy.

[Frieda P]

Hmm, that double edged sword alright...thanks quin, you always give the best reviews!

[quinfinn]

yeh, i started to use that analogy but it just seemed over done by my hand....you're welcome, always, dear posy

[Sami Khalil]

Even broken spirits are looking for forsaken selves and lost whispers of life and love. Some go insane and some wither with the wind .
It is a pleasure to visit and charge my soul...:)

[Frieda P]

So sweet of you to say Sami...I like 'wither with the wind'...so poetic.

[Sami Khalil]

Thank you too lady poetic...:)

[An owl on the moon]

What a powerful, overwhelming glimpse of the dark shadows of the mind.. the place we fall into and only slide down deeper. Pain and yet somehow a place of remembrance in the pleasure.

[Frieda P]

Exactly Craig...I guess this place is recognizable by so many of us, thanks so much.

[Androglossia]

It is the realization that the love of the person you care most for is drifting far from where it had always been that alleviates emotional defeat. But this thing happens, and it changes who we are for the better and so will it be for the rest of our lives and next. Once again, you have shared fragments of cherished memories skillfully crafted into painfully beautiful words.

[Frieda P]

Always appreciate your insightful comments Maryanne, thanks so much.

[Androglossia]

You're most welcome:)

[AYVID N]

We try our best to stay afloat and yet the darkness sometimes seems to close over us in huge waves....

This poetry expresses a pain and anguish so raw, so total, the reader takes that journey along with you to the depths, the bottomless pits where the spirit has fallen...

All I would say is that you are a survivor, a fighter, a winner. Just try to push the feeling away with all your life force.

After all, this is life and We have to go on...

[Frieda P]

We do go on, although sometimes we feel as though this is our last battle, I know you understand where I'm coming from...thanks Divya. x

[s y e]

More 'big words' from my favorite pickles xP Hahaha, Keep it coming!

[Frieda P]

Just think of the education you're getting there noodles!

[s y e]

-.- I don't like it!

[Frieda P]

C'mon, how can you not love words, you're a poet!

[s y e]

I do love words! NOT education ;-P

[Rogue]

Between the old ghosts and the skeletons locked in the closet, it is a wonder anyone ever visits our veritable "haunted house". It's like Halloween everyday in that place, no? :)

I am not making light of the feelings in this piece. They speak for themselves.
Another great work from you. :)

[Frieda P]

That's fine by me, I try to find humor in most everything, if not I'd go mad for sure! I just might send my ghost to give you a tiny kick though! lol

Thanks, always much appreciated Rogue

[Jack...]

The more it happens, the more I ask...when will it happen again? Very cool Frieda

[Frieda P]

Thanks Jack...sometimes it just works out that way, doesn't it?