Silent Echoes

My deepest voice

 is swirling round my head

trying to connect the dots

            of the puzzle you presented

i wanted to lay down and die

who's the one still breathing,

         only the soft whispers saved me

standing arms extended

          at the edge of this cliff,

setting fire to the reflection

         would it be a welcome flight

         or could it start this trip all over again

should i meet you halfway

would your wings catch my fall

           does splendor in the grass lie below

or is it hiding in a falling star

beyond a blackened cloud,

spinning back to earthly reminisces

 all that's left is  

dark silence that beckons

Reviews

[Ayvid N]

Sometimes you are magical. You are...here!

"or could it start this trip all over again
should i meet you halfway
would your wings catch my fall" - No words for this unbelievable poetry.

"does splendor in the grass lie below
or is it hiding in a falling star
beyond a blackened cloud,
spinning back to earthly reminisces"

You made the contemplation so incredibly magical. Shimmering poetry Frieda! Hats off!

[Frieda P]

I knew you'd relate to this one on a personal level, thanks from the bottom of my heart dear friend....you rock! x

[Renée]

beautiful piece of writing....

[KAOlmsted]

I'm digging up some real gems way back here on page 15 of my RR queue. This, absolutely, is a diamond.

[InsanityWriter]

Wow. :) Really good (as always ;) .

[Frieda P]

Wow, thank you. :-)

[KeeD]

Dark silence that beckons.. murky thoughts that consume... to take a leap of faith or to be haunted by what if's

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Kee...

[Claire Twinn]

Standing on the precipice, a very scary place to be. You captured the feeling perfectly.

[Frieda P]

Thank you muchly Claire, you got it in one.

[Michael G.]

We each have steps we can take. They are still our choice to make, no matter the outside influences upon them. Some may be giant, and even final leaps (not always "of faith). Other steps can be to silently change what we are thinking at the moment... and it being just as important as anything grander.

[Frieda P]

I consider this to be a tiny step, thanks so much for your kind words Mike, always appreciated.

[Carolann Dowsett]

I love the fact that all your poems make me 'feel' something. Another beautiful write Frieda.

[Frieda P]

Can't ask for anything more than that Carolann, thank you kindly dear friend.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Welcome :)

[Tai Ryens]

I'm not quite sure what exactly the poem conjures up.. Hmn.. Displeasure? Dissatisfaction? Discontent?
Nonetheless, I say, lovely poem. Keep penning.

[Frieda P]

Probably a bit of all of the above Tai, mostly a dark void. Thank you kindly for your review.

[beautiful dreamer]

nicely done miss maragarita! :)

[Frieda P]

thank you kindly miss jen ;-)