It's wrong to judge a book by its cover, but I'm afraid it's a crime we're all guilty of. Although it's excusable from both ends of the situation. It's a grey area kind of thing. Sometimes we actually let our guards down, trusting we've found someone who will actually understand what's going on underneath the surface.
"Do you really want to know me?" I love that line. It has serious impact on the entire stanza, contradicting everything you just said. It raises a feeling of doom, realizing a bit too late that you've already undressed your soul in front of him, before even asking if he wanted to see all of your broken pieces in the first place.
Letting people in almost always leads to disappointment. And nearly everyone's guilty of that crime too. You trust someone, and every time he touches you, he heals you, sometimes without even realizing just how much he means to you. Then he throws it away, because it obviously didn't mean the same to him. And sometimes our crazy is too much for people to handle.
"This boulevard of empty promises will soon find an ending". Another excellent line. It's true.
Your poem reminds me of the song Just Give Me A Reason. Oh and by the way, all of this is what I meant by being able to relate to your poetry ;)
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
I'm so sorry I missed this outstanding review Siren, I love that song, think it was my mantra for a .. read moreI'm so sorry I missed this outstanding review Siren, I love that song, think it was my mantra for a long while...your words touched me, thanks so much.
11 Years Ago
You are welcome C:
11 Years Ago
So sorry about that Siren, my alerts seem to mess up on me...much appreciate your visits always. :-).. read moreSo sorry about that Siren, my alerts seem to mess up on me...much appreciate your visits always. :-)
11 Years Ago
I won't be here 4 a while. My keyboar ist wrkig right :P
11 Years Ago
Hate when that happens, I lost my a and s the other day...are they sticking?
11 Years Ago
I spille water on it -_- So I have 2 cpy paste letters 2 type aythig -_- Till I get a ew cmputer, & .. read moreI spille water on it -_- So I have 2 cpy paste letters 2 type aythig -_- Till I get a ew cmputer, & my exams are over, Im screwe lol
I try not to read poems, maybe because I refrain from rhyme schemes, But your work is exemplary. It borders around the thin line between lust and love. And here we clearly knew what was at stake.
Thanks for sharing , enjoyed it thoroughly.
Keep up the good work :)
I hear you in this piece so strongly, Frieda. This is how a "damaged" person pleads to a significantly less damaged person (none of us will come away from this game we call life unscathed) to trust them...it's like, "Trust me...you WILL get hurt." There is zero ambiguity in this write. This is you, all over the page. Great write.
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11 Years Ago
This so reminds of that quote by Maya Angelou 'when people show you who they are, believe them'...th.. read moreThis so reminds of that quote by Maya Angelou 'when people show you who they are, believe them'...thanks so much kimmer x
11 Years Ago
i love that quote...yes ma'am...believe every word. Always my pleasure. Frieda. xoxo
I really like this one and I can relate to it. Hell, I could have written it. Well not word for word. My version would rhyme, be full of F bombs and vaginas but you know what I mean. I like the first stanza particularly. "I walked you through my untimely history" That's golden. Outstanding work Frieda.
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11 Years Ago
How did I miss this one, omg Mark, sometimes you're such a delight, so funny...you, this made my ni.. read moreHow did I miss this one, omg Mark, sometimes you're such a delight, so funny...you, this made my night, thank you so much!
It's wrong to judge a book by its cover, but I'm afraid it's a crime we're all guilty of. Although it's excusable from both ends of the situation. It's a grey area kind of thing. Sometimes we actually let our guards down, trusting we've found someone who will actually understand what's going on underneath the surface.
"Do you really want to know me?" I love that line. It has serious impact on the entire stanza, contradicting everything you just said. It raises a feeling of doom, realizing a bit too late that you've already undressed your soul in front of him, before even asking if he wanted to see all of your broken pieces in the first place.
Letting people in almost always leads to disappointment. And nearly everyone's guilty of that crime too. You trust someone, and every time he touches you, he heals you, sometimes without even realizing just how much he means to you. Then he throws it away, because it obviously didn't mean the same to him. And sometimes our crazy is too much for people to handle.
"This boulevard of empty promises will soon find an ending". Another excellent line. It's true.
Your poem reminds me of the song Just Give Me A Reason. Oh and by the way, all of this is what I meant by being able to relate to your poetry ;)
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
I'm so sorry I missed this outstanding review Siren, I love that song, think it was my mantra for a .. read moreI'm so sorry I missed this outstanding review Siren, I love that song, think it was my mantra for a long while...your words touched me, thanks so much.
11 Years Ago
You are welcome C:
11 Years Ago
So sorry about that Siren, my alerts seem to mess up on me...much appreciate your visits always. :-).. read moreSo sorry about that Siren, my alerts seem to mess up on me...much appreciate your visits always. :-)
11 Years Ago
I won't be here 4 a while. My keyboar ist wrkig right :P
11 Years Ago
Hate when that happens, I lost my a and s the other day...are they sticking?
11 Years Ago
I spille water on it -_- So I have 2 cpy paste letters 2 type aythig -_- Till I get a ew cmputer, & .. read moreI spille water on it -_- So I have 2 cpy paste letters 2 type aythig -_- Till I get a ew cmputer, & my exams are over, Im screwe lol
A powerful and honest poem. I like the tone of the poem. Felt like thoughts falling together and understanding what is real or not. I like the flow of thoughts and the very good ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Thanks Coyote, sorry so late with this...much appreciated.
Still, it could be a long, grand boulevard with much to see and do. Not to mention two other vital things. Where the boulevard final destination is and all the interesting side streets and shops along the way. There can be so much more to this story.
The first line drew me in and I love (when you trace my tears) which is usually impossible to do...beautiful beginning, middle and ending to a great poem.
SyberRose
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
Thanks so much SyberRose, much appreciate the visit & review.
Simply settling for a lover is truly a horrendous thing, both torturing and unfortunate. Lust is, though it upsets me, the bases of our human survival.
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Lust can be a good thing too, I think, thanks for your comments Tai, always enjoy your reviews.
If you want to know me, read my poetry, it's all in there. I am a mother of three sons (my finest moments) a sister, a survivor and a little bit crazy. I lost my beloved sister to suicide, so you'll.. more..