Tree of Hearts

How could my heart be lonely

when you've dealt me

      the tree of hearts

I'm alone,

      even when here with you

old rain clouds burst

      over my soul

your skies are still sunny overhead

My tree of life

 comes with baggage

from another

         time and place

       how many hearts need fall & shatter

till that tree is bare

 In the midst of winter

  you showered me lavishly 

       with attention to grow

damaged roots could not

     lap up your affections

you recoiled from pain

   within my fray~

that's why I say,

 'it's not you, it's me'

                                 an old cliche - -

                                           yes, I know, 

 exactly how,

                           

                           it was first unearthed

Reviews

[Horizon K.]

More brokeness and brokenheartedness... And truly felt here.

I'm alone,
even when here with you

damaged roots could not
lap up your affections

Such tragic thoughts, how damaged the soul can become, that even the sun cannot penetrate... How can this winter devastated tree awaken to spring and bear its fruit again...

[Frieda P]

Thanks Horizon, love this review!

[KAOlmsted]

Beautiful pen strokes here, Frieda. Even through the pain, that shows through. You are exactly that gifted, my love.

[Deron Alexis]

well used metaphor Frieda very good

[Michael G.]

Even in the middle of Time Square, you can be absolutely alone... and no one is to blame... even yourself.

[Frieda P]

So true Mike, so true.

[Pranav Malhotra]

I like the way it unfolds :) nice work

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Pranav, glad you enjoyed it. :-)

[Ruth]

Pristine ending! I admire your talent of wrapping up the poem, always done in a clever manner...this is brilliant! I can feel the tangible energy within your work, always xoxo

[Frieda P]

Doing the happy dance...lovely coming from one who's poetry I adore, thanks so much x

[Ruth]

Always love xoxo

[Firestone Feinberg]

Profound -- I know it, even tho' I don't fully understand it: it's me not you! Your writing is a friend, Frieda. Always welcome. --David

[Frieda P]

Ha yes exactly! Thanks David.

[Monster ^.^]

To compare a tree and love... is so classic I want to cry why i didn't write it before you! One phrase, YOU wrapped my heart with the roots of your poetry :)

[Frieda P]

Ha *passes a tissue* You're a nutter, thanks!

[Leslie Philibert]

Like this, the strong central image, the playful tree of hearts, the clever enjambement and the use of a quote in the last lines, loads to like here...

[Frieda P]

Loads to like about your review, thank's so much Leslie, much appreciated!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

I wish the Tree of Hearts is a bonsai tree :) I put it in my room and watered it everyday with care. I love this piece, life is meaningless if we don't experience hurts and pain, I really like the thoughts flowing here. One of the powerful lines here is the acceptance of reality that life will never be fair as we have wished. Good write always Frie, Best of the best heartfel write of yours. Keep writing and kicking :)

[Frieda P]

I love Bonsai, I have one right here at my desk. Everyday, I only water mine once a week....hmmm, let's see who's freaks out first? lol...thanks for the lovely review Marc.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

:) really so only once a week? Cool. Welcome Frie.

[Frieda P]

That's what they told me when I made the purchase, also says the same online...yours must like you or water a lot! :-)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Yeah I watered a lot to my bonsai but seems the plant growing little :) hahahah anyway I will adapt your way. Thanks Frie.

[Frieda P]

Ha it's probably drowning slowly...it says to let the soil dry out before watering again, a week is usually sufficient time....

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

:) Thanks I will note down your advise.

[Frieda P]

I won't be held accountable if your plant should not agree ;-)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Hahahah :) don't worry.

[Frieda P]

Deal. ;-)