~Toxic~

I injected you

                 into my veins, 

immediately 

                  started to convulse

   molten fire, heated

                blood to the core

penetrated fluidic

      beneath my skin

i needed a high,

           your prick was hot

 my addiction was out of control

              danger warning flashes burn

 your toxicity spun me turbulent

            i felt you fracture in my bones

intoxicated~

 by the staggering hit

a blinded frenzy

                 of deadly poison

           mournful when i come down

 i felt the death of my essence

                  still i want to take flight again

    yearning death by your blade

Author's Note

Reviews

[Tai Ryens]

I suspect you tried to write of a little erotica here as well? If so, you've done a remarkably good job portraying so. Feeling as if that space was made only for that one, certain person. At first I envisioned, say, a heroine addiction; but that does not seem to be, you. I suppose. Nonetheless, I liked this.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Tai, I wanted that addictive feel to it, but no, not heroin!

[Leigh]

I like the subtle duality of this and the way you yield to your cravings, quite erotic and sad at the same time

[Onyia-Ali, Kingsley Chu..]

In such a case, there are days we become addicted to something, then we are siezed by it, sometime we may choose not to be addicted. It depends on ability of your self control. abosoulty self control in needed in our life, if not "Death" might be settle the case. well done

[Michael G.]

We all become addicted... to one thing or another. Some survive... some learn to deal with it... some don't. Mental addictions can be the worst kind... or the greatest?!!?
Good write.

[Frieda P]

If you're one of the lucky ones Mike yep, thanks!

[N!LoC]

oh my !

[Frieda P]

Ha in a good way I hope!

[Pranav Malhotra]

Its feels like the writer was the muse here. I love the interpretation and the amalgam of genres with a subtle touch of sensuality midst want.

Very neatly portrayed.

[Frieda P]

Thrilled you got that feel from it, thanks Pranav.

[Claire Twinn]

Sounds like a dangerous addiction, hope the ride is worth the comedown!

[Frieda P]

Aren't all the best things in life dangerous, or bad for you...?

[kublakhan27]

You know me, I'm your friend,
Your main boy, thick and thin.
I'm your pusherman.
-Curtis Mayfield

[Frieda P]

Woo, you sure can pick em...two bags please. :-)

[kublakhan27]

;)

[Frieda P]

Good one....your head must be reeling with this stuff! ;-P

[kublakhan27]

Haha I've got a quote for everything, if that's what you mean ;P

[Frieda P]

That's part of what I mean.... ;-)

[kublakhan27]

I think the other part stems more from sleep-deprived giddiness than anything ;P

[Frieda P]

Now you're talking my language... ;-P

[kublakhan27]

I know ;P

[Brianna Brie]

Great metaphor! Love what you did with this poem.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Brianna, appreciate the visit & review.

[Ayvid N]

:( Me too!
You hit right on target and I am back where I was.
Wanting, yearning!

" still i want to take flight again
yearning death by your blade"

You are so right!

[Frieda P]

I swear Divya, we were separated at birth! Thanks so much....& sorry.

[Ayvid N]

:( wish we could meet up and cry over a drink each :(

[Frieda P]

If that would drown our sorrows, I'd certainly fly there in an instant, but you know that hardly helps, although I keep trying!

[Ayvid N]

I know...seems sometimes we are surfacing and underwater again!
Keep trying Frieda...I am keeping you company from here! :(

[Frieda P]

Same here Divya...how long can this addiction last? Perhaps we need rehab.

[Ayvid N]

I agree Frieda! Some form of rehab or counselling would do us good for sure...
But I doubt even that...
I think we could be done for life!
Seems hopeless! :(

[Frieda P]

OMG Divya...a fate worst than death, don't say that!

[Ayvid N]

I am sorry...din't mean to scare you Frieda :(
But at least my fate looks sealed for now!
read moreI am sorry...din't mean to scare you Frieda :(
But at least my fate looks sealed for now!
Some manufacturing defect in us women. We are wired all wrong! :@
However, I hope you can overcome it.

[Frieda P]

Yes I agree, defective in that we care too profoundly...! Now I'll get hell from the men...and you know that you're so much stronger than you give yourself credit for, it's just all too raw right now.

[Ayvid N]

Well, it's a year already.
And i still stand in exactly the very spot I was left standing. :@ (Tapping my feet with impatience and irritation)

Oh, I hope you dont get hell from the men.. :(
But I'm here if you need help. :)
Just SOS! Will try my best!

Hugs! Mwaah!

[Frieda P]

*sigh* life is difficult...xo

[Pankaj Lohia]

life is hard.. but only because you made it that way... just sayin :) this poem reminds me of the "i am crystal meth" poem really

[Frieda P]

I don't recall inviting the peanut gallery, you have no clue what 'our' life consists of...before you make an ignorant, cheeky statement, you should know facts...

[Pankaj Lohia]

Your life consists of things that you invited to your own life.. Nothing happens on its own right? Anyways I'm sorry for interrupting.

[Frieda P]

If you had a comment on my poetry that's different, I have no idea who you even are, don't presume to know or judge so quickly...

[Ayvid N]

Very well said Frieda...Sorry, I was distracted for a moment the came back to this exchange. I second you on your statements to the gentleman. And I just wish people were not so forthcoming with their unwanted views. Because they may have not even lived half the pain we have been through. Applause to you Frieda!

[Frieda P]

I am certainly open to honest critiques about my poetry, but not for a 'stranger' to impose their opinion upon my life...thanks Divya.