Frozen Wedding Cake

We tripped over that fine line,

     fell from gracious love 

           to stark indifference

my shoes from another life,

    couldn't take it in stride

all the words turned upside down

   feelings of kind regard expired

playing games with new rules

   no stop signs in sight

do not pass go,

 collect as much as you can

 perfect wedding cake

 never even had a chance to thaw

drunk on toasts of cruel resentment

we said no matter what, 

       "always remain friends"

pop goes the weasel 

             and  f*****g fairy tales

pay with blood signed

 _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _on the dotted line

Reviews

[redflutterby]

Marriage takes hard work which directly conflicts with the romantic ideal we've been sold by fairy tales. You're right it doesnt take much to go from gracious love to stark indifference especially when people don't put in the effort. Then comes the inevitable resentment! Your way with words always amazes me and i cant think of one single thing that would make this poem more striking. *clapping wildly* :-D

[Frieda P]

As you know Red, I was writing this one whilst we were discussing all this 'divorce' drama...so glad it covered that feeling & thank you..
takes a bow. ;-P

[redflutterby]

;-D

[Frieda P]

Sorry can't reply here, I'm still laughing from your last statement! ;-P

[redflutterby]

Hahahaha...

[Emily Feret]

I recently just went through a divorce, and it seemed to go something like this. Thank you for putting feelings that are sometimes hard to comprehend in themselves, into some beautiful words!

[Frieda P]

So you know exactly where these words are coming from unfortunately...thanks for the visit and your kind words Emily.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"someone left the cake out in the rain, I don't think that i can take it, cause it took so long to bake it"

sometimes we invest so much of our life and energy into a relationship...and then the icing melts and what's underneath isn't worth eating.

good poem but yes, the content leaves a bad taste in the mouth.

jacob

[Frieda P]

Ha I forgot about that old song, never could understand it at the time, now it makes much more sense, thanks jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i really liked your poem...but that song? it is number one on my all-time hate list...:)

[zainul]

The wearer best knows where the shoe pinches.
Can't explain how this old saying relates with your amazing write.
But,I have planted it purposely in the hope of some feedback from you.

[Frieda P]

I suppose it means that our pain is personal and only we know how it hurts, thanks for the visit zainul.

[zainul]

Thanks for the wonderful feedback,Frieda :)

[Deuces]

Hmmm... I know this alllllllllll too well.

Perfectly put. Stark indifference. Best friends to worst enemies.

And we do pay with blood, don't we?

[Frieda P]

Yep, blood it is...unfortunately too many of us know this all too well.

[Michael Kevin Spencer]

Babe that was a bad marriage, straight up Fri.

Very cool 2nd stanza!

[Frieda P]

Ha you noticed? Thanks MKS.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

pay with blood - indeed thats the image one gets when we see our loved ones not to mention ourseleves in the horror that can be seperation, indeed a great piece.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Thomas, blood & pain does seem to be the common denominator in the aftermath of love...

[gabrielle]

i know nothing about married life. but sometimes i wonder how come two people are so perfectly well before marriage and end up sort ofdistressed or miserable after marriage. a very interesting and well-executed piece, frieda.

[Frieda P]

I wish I had the answers to that one too, That would solve a multitude of so many spousal problems. I think it does all come down to 'unconditional'...we put our best foot forward in the beginning, then as time moves on, we show our pink underbelly which isn't always pretty, now you're dealing with more than love, you're dealing with individual's psyche. Ha, I'm blabbering here, what I meant to say was thanks for your thoughts gabrielle.

[Blue Ivory]

Yeah it really sucks how marriage isn't all that it's cut out to be. Of course, I wouldn't know what I'm talking about so I don't wanna sound like I think I do :P The last stanza was the best part! Couldn't have found a better way to put it myself

[Frieda P]

I think it's all in freezing the cake that's the culprit, who ever started that anyway... I mean how hard can it be to stay married for 50-60 years?

[Blue Ivory]

Lol I guess some people don't look into compatibility enough before tying the knot. But like I said, I don't have any first hand knowledge.

[Frieda P]

You know all that talk about guns & roses, and war of roses, yeah, that's what it's like Lol! Ha, kidding, no I''m not! Don't let dissuade you, we should all suffer mercilessly... ;-P

[Blue Ivory]

hahha yes we should since it's the natural way of life :P