Hardly Roses

Rose petals...

      strewn upon the floorboards

falling through

         the cracks of abstruse

    lackluster like

            useless dirty dishwater,

thorns made their way

     to our medley,

esoteric attempts

    reaped no flower gardens,

obscure synonyms 

     fester cryptic mind

 whilst staring at the ceiling

     of harsh reality,

'too little, too late...' 

written on the tombstone

inscription upon the head

 of our shared bed

    I always did love wildflowers

               you see...

Reviews

[KAOlmsted]

Can you believe it's taken me this damn long to get to this?? March 26?? O.O

I love the imagery in this, and anything in which the word abstruse appears is aces in my book ;-) That last line brought me to a pretty cool place, which was probably so not your intention...there was a movie, ages ago, with Harvey Kietel and Bridgette Fonda where they had to dispose of a body with acid and Fonda's character (who loved Nina Simone) said "I never did mind the little things..." God, what was that called? Something along the lines of the Cleaner, maybe? Meh, my memory sucks.

Anyway. Nice write.

[Frieda P]

You've been hard at work tonight, that's for sure. I don't think I know that movie, let me know if you ever think of it, or finally get a sweater on. *laugh* thanks so much!

[KAOlmsted]

*laugh* I am terrified to take the damn sweater off for fear I'll never find the fooking thing again xD

I'll let you know if I think of it...it was really good, and I am so not a movie person.

Always my pleasure, ma'am.

[Frieda P]

Ma'am?...erhum your hubby calls me 'young lady' I'll have you know. *laugh* yeah, I couldn't even hold a straight face xD

[KAOlmsted]

Sorry, I am entirely too sober...must have lost my head...I should have called you Mrs. R a.k.a. Sexy-Frieda-Pants xD

[Frieda P]

Hahah, have I told you lately I love you with my whole heart? ;-P

[KAOlmsted]

I never tire of hearing it ;-) And straight back atcha...ma'am :-p

[Frieda P]

See what happens when you're sober? Mwah!

[KAOlmsted]

Sober is for people who have jobs xD

[Frieda P]

xD Not always....

[KAOlmsted]

HA!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Why is it some people think an expensive gesture makes up for an emotional mistake. You feisty attitude is awesome.

[Frieda P]

Good question Dale, have no good answers, thanks hun.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Well then why did I ask you? LOL

[Frieda P]

Hey I'm a bit off already tonight, don't confuzzle me anymore! ;-P

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Okay I will just canoodle you, LOL

[Frieda P]

Sorry I have a headache ;-P

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

I got aspirin :)

[Frieda P]

Ha you have all the answers, what was the question again? ;-)

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Ummmmm, darn I forgot.

[Frieda P]

xD

[Barbara Walker]

A sad epitaph.

[Frieda P]

All too often yes, thanks Barbara.

[Baby Ricochet]

I like the last line quite a bit. Nice touch

[Frieda P]

Thanks Baby, glad you enjoyed it.

[Claire Twinn]

Wild and free is the way to be! Who would want to be romanced with fake words and thorny flowers? Love your spirit and your way of expressing it Frieda!

[Frieda P]

Love your review Claire! Thanks.

[icelandicblue]

There is no contest between the hothouse flower and those wild flowers that grow freely. I like the metaphor a lot Frieda; we should all feel that free and wild during our lives.

[Frieda P]

You're so right, hothouse roses don't even have a scent for crying out loud, thanks icelandicblue.

[Pete Langley]

This piece I like a lot. I love the lace of ironic phrasing....cracks of abstruse lacklustre ...obscure synonyms fester cryptic mind..... Yes, this is my sort of poem, Frieda. P.

[Frieda P]

So glad you like my rantings Pete!

[Pete Langley]

Some of them make me blush so red!

[Frieda P]

Awh how cute, you're like a big teddy bear, come over here and give me a squishy bear hug!

[Pete Langley]

You got it, you got it!

[Frieda P]

;-)

[N!LoC]

artsy as always :-)

[Frieda P]

Thanks N!LoC!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

I love the words play and the story progression is insanely amazing. Brilliant work Frie. :)

[Frieda P]

Did you call me insane? *laugh* :-P

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

:) it is just a crazy words I used to describe if I found the works so perfect :) It is insanely amazing heheh :)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Sorry, I did not mean anything aside from you are being great :)

[Frieda P]

Don't be silly, I was only teasing you, all my friends are crazy ;-P

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

:) hehehe

[Junert]

Wow! And I love reading about wild flowers.

[Frieda P]

Me too Junert, thanks.

[David Scott]

I guess you told him? Ha. What sweet justice to think his attempts to make up were not even born from a heart that knew your desires. He wasted his time and money, but you wasted time not getting what you needed as well. May you find the lover who knows the flower you desire most!

[Frieda P]

Pfft, can you even imagine David? ...and in my dreams, I wish, thanks hun.

[David Scott]

I can most certainly imagine! the question then would be, "Can you?". I bet you can... I've read too much to think otherwise of you.