Time Makes Love Pass

Time weary, blurred heaviness of dark denial

like breathing in heavy stench of stale cigarette smoke

exhaling the songs of lost love and no forever after

stuck in a breached tug of war, fight or flight

broken promises unravel fated defeats approach

how cruel life, to take us from a place of ultimate bliss

to be plunged at the chasm of mundane and prosaic

point of no return and syndrome of slippery ledges

death's  breathing no guarantees of reverence

falling into the abyss of impertinence and technicalities 

days drag like slow motion's madness in reverse

conversations in the head, that never touch the lips

pressures of neglect, repetitious nights of no silver linings

where light once shone in the cracks and on the face

now we drown, we sink...sleeping with eyes open

dark shadows appear to caste  on this sad house

past life's enchantment but a memory in photo books

finalizing dissolution contracts til death do us part

foundations once solid give way to legalities pen

time makes love pass seemingly in a sigh of minutes 

Reviews

[s y e]

Wow, this is so deep and emotional. Some amazing powerful lines and the whole poem itself is very well written. I can feel the trust an betrayal in it.

"days drag like slow motion's madness in reverse
conversations in the head, that never touch the lips"

Amazing lines! Wow, you speak so much truth, it was amazing! Loved it.

[Frieda P]

That's exactly what it feels lie slow motion madness in truth, watching my son dealing with it, is worse than when I went through it myself I think. Thanks so much for your sweet words Sye, much appreciated.

[s y e]

I think its always worse when you're watching a loved one go through it, but you're there for him and thats all he needs right now.

No problem hun, always. Btw, featured review :)

[Frieda P]

Ha what he needs is the better divorce lawyer!

[s y e]

Yeah well that too! Ill send my uncle over ;-P

[Frieda P]

Oh please do!

[s y e]

I will! Hes in Disneyland right now

[Frieda P]

Having fun or suing Mickey? ;-)

[s y e]

Haha, we'll find out!

[Ed Hart]

we call it love, but it's not (and wasn't) love...it's Nature's call to duty (with a little reward thrown in, like nectar for the honey bee)..."love does not alter when it alteration finds" (Shakespeare)...but that 'alteration' makes for much poetry, and lots of cowboy songs, and all that way-back-in-the-ally blues...good mourning, Frieda

[Frieda P]

Plenty of cowboys song yes, ha. I supposed we should give it another name then. Thanks Ed.

[Ed Hart]

i thought the title was right clever

[Frieda P]

Thanks again, I meant for 'love' itself....

[Ed Hart]

there's love, there's passion...lots of confusion about that

[Frieda P]

If you figure it out, let me know please....

[Rhianne Ney]

Time is a great piece for healing and for loving at the same time. this is one of the great masterpieces that I've read (:

[Frieda P]

Woo, nice review Rhianne, thanks!

[Rhianne Ney]

You're welcome and I should probably thank you for writing something amazing too

[Corset]

time makes love pass seemingly in a sigh of minutes

Best line in the whole wonderfully written thing, but this one my fav line.

[Frieda P]

So true right? Thanks Corset.

[Pete Langley]

Your poem is all in the last line. With love, time changes, doesn`t it? It seems to fly. When love is gone time moves at a much slower pace - much like the rest of the poem. A sad eloquent stream of melocholia . P.

[Frieda P]

Exactly right Pete...time changes love whilst love changes time, you just can't win, can you? ;-)

[Rogue]

I do believe time is the culprit. Over time, people change and some relationships where once there was compatibility can no longer function. Others may flourish under the changes and the love grow deeper. It is a matter of perception perhaps. Has the partner changed for the worse? Have their changes come in conflict with your own? Or is it simply that changes in you now notice things that may have been there from the beginning, but overlooked?
Forever is a lovely word. But for two people who have become strangers to one another and are trapped in it, it is a fancy euphemism for hell.

This is quite a deep and thought provoking piece. Very well done.

[Frieda P]

I wonder how my grandparents stayed married for an eternity, but then again, people didn't live as long either! Thanks for your thoughts Rogue.

[A. H. Pinley]

A relationship built on high expectation will always fail, because it's so hard to live up to the unrealistic. Great work!

[Frieda P]

Ah but we always have expectations going into love, that's why they say 'love is blind'...thanks A.H.

[Jack...]

This is great...it brings to light many things, of life, of love, of desperation and fear. The wide eyed openess of a child cowering the corner asking why. Very powerful and insightful, deep and reverent, slightly tilted in every direction with only one end in sight. Very nice Frieda.

[Frieda P]

I love your insightful review Jack...thanks for your thoughts here.

[redflutterby]

Wow... this speaks to the sad dissolution of marriage perfectly. All the pain, rending bitterness, legal hoop jumping and inevitable grief are present here. It takes little effort to bind your lives but a mind numbing battle to cut the tie. Hopefully the couple come out on the other side with the knowledge to prevent another divorce if they ever dare to try again. Fantastic write Frieda!!

[Frieda P]

Having gone through it myself, and now watching my son deal with this, it just brought it all up again, thanks so much Red!