Time Makes Love Pass

Time weary, blurred heaviness of dark denial

like breathing in heavy stench of stale cigarette smoke

exhaling the songs of lost love and no forever after

stuck in a breached tug of war, fight or flight

broken promises unravel fated defeats approach

how cruel life, to take us from a place of ultimate bliss

to be plunged at the chasm of mundane and prosaic

point of no return and syndrome of slippery ledges

death's  breathing no guarantees of reverence

falling into the abyss of impertinence and technicalities 

days drag like slow motion's madness in reverse

conversations in the head, that never touch the lips

pressures of neglect, repetitious nights of no silver linings

where light once shone in the cracks and on the face

now we drown, we sink...sleeping with eyes open

dark shadows appear to caste  on this sad house

past life's enchantment but a memory in photo books

finalizing dissolution contracts til death do us part

foundations once solid give way to legalities pen

time makes love pass seemingly in a sigh of minutes 

Reviews

[s y e]

Wow, this is so deep and emotional. Some amazing powerful lines and the whole poem itself is very well written. I can feel the trust an betrayal in it.

"days drag like slow motion's madness in reverse
conversations in the head, that never touch the lips"

Amazing lines! Wow, you speak so much truth, it was amazing! Loved it.

[Frieda P]

That's exactly what it feels lie slow motion madness in truth, watching my son dealing with it, is worse than when I went through it myself I think. Thanks so much for your sweet words Sye, much appreciated.

[s y e]

I think its always worse when you're watching a loved one go through it, but you're there for him and thats all he needs right now.

No problem hun, always. Btw, featured review :)

[Frieda P]

Ha what he needs is the better divorce lawyer!

[s y e]

Yeah well that too! Ill send my uncle over ;-P

[Frieda P]

Oh please do!

[s y e]

I will! Hes in Disneyland right now

[Frieda P]

Having fun or suing Mickey? ;-)

[s y e]

Haha, we'll find out!

[kublakhan27]

As I now try to catch up to your work, I've started with a doozie ;P This is full of despondency and poetry and resignation...it's so easy, natural even, to fall into this mindset, but considerably more difficult to articulate it with this kind of precision...you've found words here for feelings I'm not able to explain myself...well done Frieda :)

[Sir Joseph]

I love the feeling and emotion that you conveyed in this! Bravo

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

"...love pass seemingly in a sigh of minutes"--great line and great ending. I can feel this one, the emotion, the deadened fury, everything is right there. You've crafted a piece that begs attention, and you deserve prasie for it. Well done.

[Frieda P]

I love when someone tells me they 'feel' it, thanks so much Girl Friday.

[Dream Weaver]

If this got any deeper, it would almost be enough to fill a black hole...
Loved it!

[Frieda P]

Wow, thanks Dream Weaver, much appreciated!

[Dream Weaver]

You're quite welcome!

[KAOlmsted]

"conversations in the head, that never touch the lips"...I f*****g love that line.

Ah divorce...what a b***h. For some. Fortunately, mine was quite amicable, but believe me, I've seen the toll it takes when it's not. And, I know, so have you, which is where this piece came from, I feel. Dark place, but great write.

[Frieda P]

And I always fookin love your reviews! Grazie tanto...

[KAOlmsted]

il mio piacere!

[Androglossia]

Yes, time makes everything pass I think, but never makes anything reaches its destination. It is a one shot experiment and it forgets but does not forgive. I can feel the emotion on here.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Maryanne, sometime neither.

[Faffy]

Frieda, you killed me slowly with that one. It made me Hurt all over and well I guess that was what it was designed to do. But I can see the feeling of trust an betrayal as ifI did a google search and it came
Up with 10M hits. It was a heart wrenching piece freida And its worked like this that remind me I still have a lot to learn but also that I'm not the only one with a past, so thank you

-roshan

[Frieda P]

Ouch Roshan, didn't mean to do that, just reality in motion at the moment....you are much too kind, I'm humbled by your review, and so good to see you again!

[quinfinn]

utterly depressing and morose. i can't think of anything worse than the rigors of a strained and failing relationship. i would rather have a ground glass enema than go through this ever again. i ain't pickin' fights or namin' names but i hope those two get their mess together and work it out before that downslide becomes irreversible. you and i both know that there is a point of no return. nicely penned, posy.

[Frieda P]

Holy, that sounds painful but you're right, this situation just continues to keep on giving for the longest time, thanks quin.

[David Scott]

I think your poem was well written to express the loss and the fading of love over time. Yet if it ever really was love, time can do nothing but allow the loss to be insulated by new thoughts and new experiences. Love will ever be the perl trapped in the shell of time. Pure. True. Forever...
A lovely write. I am inspired to discuss the thoughts that come to mind in my musings over this read.

[Frieda P]

That's always where love starts out David, most times it doesn't end there though, thanks so much for your thoughts.