You Cried Blood Tears

Could I have saved you,

 I'd jump that ledge myself

       were it the soul abductor,

        I'd have gladly taken it

               upon my own sword...

Last leap before insanity

the light so blinding

   you lost the flight

            fatality of all dreams

        plunging to the dark abyss

     without a safety catch net

Familial scarlet tears 

     rushed into the wind

                and stung my cheeks 

    scorching blood left a scar

            that drifted unto my heart

Author's Note

Awarded Tragically Beautiful in the Needles in the Eye contest.

Reviews

[luviva]

i always feel your emptiness wherever you write about this subject. i know the " am so sorry for you" wouldnt do a thing but probably trigger memories.... but i admire your courage and you are the most brave person i know, and i know you would go all the way to have protected her, but you did what you could so stop blaming your self atleast you tried. and those responsible, will still die because i know no one livces to inherit this world.

[Frieda P]

Thanks for your support and kind words luviva, always appreciated.

[Deuces]

As I've mentioned to you in the past, I relate too much to this scenario, as I lost my best friend to suicide 10 years ago.

Your writing has such a range, Frieda. You can jump from comical to sultry to a subject as painful as this piece. Plus, you tackle each topic perfectly.

Lines like "were it the soul abductor" and "fatality of all dreams" paint this poem with an almost eery/spooky vibe.

It definitely can penetrate the reader, as it did to me. Intense greatness as usual.

[Frieda P]

Very much appreciate your kind words always Cyntax. I know we feel this same pain very deeply, thank you for your support and also this great review....x

[Michael Thrower]

I like the way your poems always seem to be written. And I mean that as in how they are sort of zig-zag'd down the page. I don't know how you do it without spending a lot of time doing it, but it makes it very cool. I'd also say it sort of buffs the content of the poem. And I am a bit surprised reading a suicide-type poem coming from you. It's sort of a break off from the usual erotica ;p Which I do read. I just haven't been reviewing as much as I should. You know you did a good job with this, so there's no need of me telling you.

[Frieda P]

I never really thought about it Michael, I kind of write them the way it comes out of my head, I guess it's not very uniform...thanks for saying. You're reading this coming from me because I lost my sister in this way.

[kublakhan27]

*hugs* I wish I had more words to console you on this matter...I'm just not sure what to say anymore except that some of your best writing has been borne of this tragedy...just as you wish you could take her pain away, I wish I could take yours away in turn...the others who have commented have offered such eloquent condolences and I sit here struggling to find words beyond the comfort I offer...it almost makes me feel guilty...but you know you have my support always and I do share your pain.

[Frieda P]

Words really aren't necessary, your care comes through, thanks so much Steve, you know how much I appreciate you. xo

[kublakhan27]

And you know that appreciation is mutual :) xox

[Frieda P]

You're too good to me :-) xo

[kublakhan27]

You deserve it :) xo

[quinfinn]

you know my history and i have talked with you at length about how many of my family and friends have chosen an "early departure" from this world. it rocks a person to their very core and removes so much of importance from the equation of life. we can never know what these gentle and pained souls were going through to make them decide upon that fate, but we can honor their memories and give them the respect of filling our own lives with as much joy and passion as possible, so that they may, vicariously, continue to bless our lives and feel our love for them. we owe them the debt of gratitude for having moved us so deeply and touching our lives with that brief spark of their own. you rock my world with these emotional and personal writes, posy. i love your beautiful heart.

[Frieda P]

This touches me deeply quin, you've about said it all here. Thanks for being a good friend to me. xo

[quinfinn]

ever and ever....scout's honor

[Frieda P]

Alright, you know I'm going to ask if you were ever a scout? x

[KAOlmsted]

This one cuts to the quick...as these pieces of yours so often do. As hard as it is to read them, knowing their origin, I know if you did not write them you would go bat s**t insane...keep them coming. xoxo

[Frieda P]

Go? ha...you're very sweet the kimmer...& thanks for being so accepting of my lunacy. I try to stay away but they pull me in every so often. xo

[KAOlmsted]

I embrace your lunacy ;-) xoxo

[Frieda P]

ha, somehow 'takes one to know one' came to mind *laugh*!! xo

[KAOlmsted]

Hey, if the Manolo Blahnik fits ;-)

[Frieda P]

hahaha wooooo! ;-P

[Pete Langley]

Sudden death of any kind is harrowing for anyone close, but suicide scorches souls. Well written, Frieda love. P.

[Frieda P]

It certainly does Pete, a good way to put it...thanks so much.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i've lost friends to suicide...hard for those left behind..and so may questions...terrific write here...really emotional for the reader...

jacob

[Frieda P]

The questions never cease...I'm till amazed at how many can relate to my words when I write of suicide, it's not all that uncommon...sad truth. Thanks jacob.

[Holly Mason]

soul abductor what a heart felt piece
it is laced with such anguish
so sad suicide you have expressed it I am so upset I can't even write
thank you for sharing

[Frieda P]

Thanks for your kind words Holly...much appreciated.

[s y e]

Omfg, you had me crying at this one. This was such an emotional, heartfelt piece. The death of someone you love so much is hard and will always have a piece of your heart, there is no one that could fill that gap, that empty space you feel when you lose them. There will always be loads of questions running through your mind, questioning yourself, could you have seen it coming, what could you have done.... But just know that all they needed (and got) was your love and that's all they asked for.

" scorching blood left a scar
that drifted unto my heart"

Powerful lines, this was really well written and the emotion was raw. Stay strong hun xox

[Frieda P]

You're too sweet Sye, this one was a very emotional write, there are so many questions that plague the ones left behind after you lose someone to suicide, thanks for your support always. xo

[s y e]

No problem at all, it was an emotional read for me xox