Etching My Mind

Midnight embraces, 

   moonlight walks

      twilight kisses

long talks til dawn

you fill my nights with rhapsody

when i hold you up to the sun

your enticing words whisper to me

bewitchingingly beckon,

          til they implode desire

days are hazy until dipped into dark

within the inky black I see you clearly

eyes wide open in anticipation

hearts meshing, bodies thrashing

taste of blood upon my lips,

etching my mind with lusty fingertips

melt your inscription upon my skin

whilst we share poetry of our souls

Reviews

[KAOlmsted]

I liked this a lot, but I have to tell you I can't stop laughing at my silly self because when I just glanced at the title in my RR queue it looked like it was called "Bitching My Mind" and I was like, FTW is she going to write about now?? xD So...very enticing write, but I did giggle my way through it ;-)

[Frieda P]

I can't stop laughing now, funny you should read 'bitching' when you see my name!! lol ;-P

[KAOlmsted]

Don't need to be Freud to figure that one out! xD

[Frieda P]

Bhahaha, that bit got you Featured!

[KAOlmsted]

Holy cats! :-D

[Renée]

Little kiss, little walk, little desire...bite..thrash what the heck happened

[Blue Ivory]

God, I do love reading your poetry! If I haven't told you before, your work is exactly the kind that made me fall in love with poetry in the first place! It's all so dark and deep...

[InsanityWriter]

It flows perfectly. :)

[Frieda P]

Thanks :-)

[Onyia-Ali, Kingsley Chu..]

Oh!, this is good, I appreciate the sequence and language used in the last three line. The imagery is well captured. well done.

[Frieda P]

Thrilled you enjoyed this one...thanks so much.

[Sheila Kline]

It reads to me like the perfect prescription from the doctor of love for what ails any yearning heart.......it starts out gentle and builds until that OH MY GOD!!!!! moment takes them both to the moon and back!
Love it - especially the last 3 lines!!

[Frieda P]

Let me know if you find the right doctor Sheila!

[Sheila Kline]

I promise I will...........lol

[Barbara Walker]

Every line in this is superb! Great write!

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Barbara.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Stimulating the mind and heart can make the heat of the moment all that much hotter. And this is scintillating.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Dale, sorry I missed this one...

[Deuces]

The epitome of reciprocal passion. The complete submission of mind, body and spirit. Loved it.

[Frieda P]

Delighted you did Cyn, thanks.

[redflutterby]

Holy smoke... another incredible piece. When I read your poems it feels like you are giving us a guided tour of your deepest thoughts. And man it is hot in there... };-D

[Frieda P]

Ha that costs extra, and you have to wear protective armor for that trip, thanks A.M.!