~I Take You in...

Follow me

              into this haven

       of serenity

feel my soul

           upon your lips

touch the breath

        of my fervor 

escape with me 

            to  surrender

       intoxicate my euphoria

             to release

       smother my exhilaration

            in exaltation

submit to the longing

          in my loins

       enter into my soft lightness

I take you in

             as a deep inhale

you splay the nape of

sweet gasping whispers 

               the world has moved

  anointed with nirvana's

                          

 sweet death

whilst entangled

                 in rapturous

                       pause

Reviews

[KAOlmsted]

I did that in the hot tub last night...amazing how I can still get my feet up that high with the help of bubbling water ;-) I kneed myself in the nose a couple of times, hurt like hell...and one of the jets left an imprint on my left butt cheek...all in all, not my favorite position...at least doggy style I can still drink my drink...

Oh...did you write a poem? Hm...yes...it's quite lovely...quite lovely indeed...

[quinfinn]

damnit kimmers! i just spewed beer all over my keyboard!!!!!

[KAOlmsted]

xD

[Frieda P]

Holy cats!! ha, this has got to down in history as a review on the WC..and it's Featured!! You're a nutter, love you to pieces, thanks!

[KAOlmsted]

;-) Always my pleasure, ma'am...

[Frieda P]

Ha they didn't kick you out of AL yet? ;-)

[KAOlmsted]

Morgan and I decided to skip it...he left before 7 this morning. I slept until 9:30 ;-)

[Frieda P]

Oh sweet, you're having a mother/daughter day, is she drinking too? ;-P

[KAOlmsted]

She may as well be, I bought her a Mountain Dew this morning...the child is insane on Mountain Dew. I should just skip the middle man and mainline sugar and caffeine straight into her veins xD

[Frieda P]

Hahaha my poor little kimmer, she has no chance, no chance at all! Lol

[Blue Ivory]

This is so sensual and sexy! I love what you did

[lee von cleef]

How to teach your toes to curl in three , no four easy steps.

[Sheila Kline]

Just "out of breath" passion, but expressed in such a way that one seems more to float along on the ripples of the pond to a point as this rather than in a motor boat, and that is such a dreamy way to arrive to such a place! Delightfully naughty but more like behind the locked door of erotica!
Beautiful..........while entangled in rapturous pause.......love that thought!

[Frieda P]

Always love reading what you have to say Shelia, thanks so much!

[Frieda P]

Nice...you're featured :-)

[Emerald Seas]

A very tastefully written dream (or reality) of unbridled sensuality. You have quite a writing range, Frieda. I wonder, do you realize how talented you are?
Bravo, dear!

[Frieda P]

I think I love you Sera, you humble me with your review, thanks so much!

[Lover Of Words]

This is so detailed is breathingly amazing and you step out of your box everytime i come to read your work you inspire me... You really do...

[Frieda P]

Woo, great review there Kels... :-)

[Lover Of Words]

LOL thanks your great

[Barbara Walker]

Excellent piece! I love the line- "I take you, in as a deep inhale"

[Frieda P]

So happy you enjoyed this one Barbara. Thank you.

[kublakhan27]

I love how the intangible things become tangible here...a soul is felt, breath is touched, the world moves in ecstasy and comes to a post-coital pause...the imagery is in perfect sync with the pace of the activity it evokes...well done Miss R ;)

[Frieda P]

Oh I love your review Benji, it's poetry in and of itself...thanks so much! :-)

[kublakhan27]

Always a pleasure :)

[Frieda P]

“Poetry is just the evidence of life. If your life is burning well, poetry is just the ash.” LC ;-)

[kublakhan27]

Well done, you sprung an unfamiliar line on me ;) I don't know how I missed it but it's one of my new favourites now...he doesn't make many general statements on poetry ;P

[Frieda P]

Wow that shocked me, I thought you knew it all! ;-P

[kublakhan27]

Haha Well I'd like to think I know the lion's share, but it's hard to catch them all when he's been writing for over sixty years...I may not even live that long let alone write ;P

[Frieda P]

ha geez I hope so! Keep getting hit in the head with hockey pucks and we'll see ................

[kublakhan27]

Haha too many hits and I may start having delusions of being him...you'll know if that happens if my face grows red from the slaps in the face that accumulate with every woman I preposition...

[Frieda P]

If you can convince them of your delusion I hardly doubt you'll get a smack from any of them....maybe you can take over when he goes...omg i just made myself cry ;-(

[kublakhan27]

That is now my ideal afterlife: the reincarnation of your choice haha If it happens, I'll be sure to make a stop in Jersey ;) Don't cry though, I'll be forced to dredge up more Looney Tune quotes ;P

[Frieda P]

Ha anything but that! ;-P

[kublakhan27]

;P

[Frieda P]

Give me Leonard or give me death ;-P

[kublakhan27]

Haha yes no doubt ;P

[Frieda P]

xD

[Frieda P]

Do you know this one I wonder? “Never make a decision when you need to pee.” ;-P

[kublakhan27]

Sounds familiar haha ;P

[Frieda P]

That one shocked even me...

[kublakhan27]

Haha not me...I've read Beautiful Losers, nothing shocks me o_o

[Frieda P]

'I don't remember lighting this cigarette....' :-P

[kublakhan27]

"I cleared my famous throat, I chose a swollen book..."

[Frieda P]

“Here's to the few who forgive what you do, and the fewer who don't even care..." I think I really said that one.... ;-)

[kublakhan27]

Thou hast said it ;)

[Frieda P]

“And I'll dance with you in Vienna,
I'll be wearing a river's disguise....' ;-)

[kublakhan27]

Now that one I knew ;)

[Frieda P]

I figured, I just wanted to say it! ;-P

[kublakhan27]

;P

[Frieda P]

It's fukitol friday, dancing is required ;-)

[kublakhan27]

Haha no doubt ;)

[Frieda P]

“After awhile part of the reason you write is because you like the way you feel when you write. You’re not so much concerned with the product as the state of mind when you write. I like to feel that I’m being kissed sadly by the world when I write.”

[kublakhan27]

I think I heard that one too. or part of it :)

[Frieda P]

I give the fook up! ;-P

[kublakhan27]

Haha you do stump me on occasion ;P

[Umbra]

Ahhh, this was a breath of fresh air. :)
Great write, Miss. Frieda P.

[Frieda P]

So pleased you felt that way, thanks Umbra. :-)

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

A very interesting mix of sensuality and spirituality. It is like cleansing the soul while stimulating the heart.

[Frieda P]

I love the way you put that Dale, thanks muchly.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

You are welcome mucho... and thank you :)