Sad Violin Tears

awarded 1st runner up in the Almost Anything writing contest... thanks!

...i vividly recall,

like sad violins

  i heard you cry

but a mere child 

      what could i do?

 you danced 

         with the devil,

we all paid the price

you kept us

      in harm's way

how could it be

         i needed to act

 the stronger of us

nevertheless,

   it taught me strength

each blow

 like a dagger to the heart,

blood pooled 

        around my feet

whilst you begged

for mercy

                    prayers 

 were never answered,

screams

 were never heard

          only the echoes 

         of violin tears

                   whilst I grew strong

Author's Note

Reviews

[kublakhan27]

There is little left for me to say by way of comments as you know me so well now and vice-versa...I can only send you notes to let you know that I've read your work and offer my ear (or eyes if you will) should it ever be needed...likewise, your writing is vivid and powerful enough that it does not require technical input...your voice is a breath of fresh air when positive, and a lightning rod of poignancy when negative, but both states transcend the page and penetrate the mind...you're the total package, to put it one way...I know you've had a rough few days and I hope that Frieda the dancing sensualist will return soon ;)

[Frieda P]

Ha, I just went from the deep psychotic to the dancing sensualist, gotta love this place! Thanks so much Steve, you give good review! ;-) xo

[kublakhan27]

My pleasure Frieda ;) xo

[Frieda P]

He lives!! ;-) xo

[kublakhan27]

Haha barely...real long week, and I still have another weekend to get through here ;P But I'm glad you remembered me while I was gone ;) xox

[Frieda P]

pfft as if! ;-P xo

[kublakhan27]

;) xox

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this just ripped me apart.

oozing with the pain of living in a house of abuse...i see a child growing stronger while watching her mother suffer...

jacob

[Frieda P]

Exactly, thanks jacob.

[A. V. Madison]

Very beautiful, so very beautiful, Frieda. I feel as though it's connected to your sister, perhaps...? Nevertheless, fantastic work Frieda.

Love always, mi bella,
Maddie

[Frieda P]

Most everything is connected to my sister Maddie, this one's mostly about my mother and 'him'...thanks sweetie. xo

[Barbara Walker]

These words flow with the sadness of how strength can be learned through no adverse intention on our part. Sad to have to begin lessons at a young age.

[Frieda P]

Very sad indeed, but it give me the strength I needed to get through it, thanks so much for your review Barbara.

[Coyote Poetry]

"you danced
with the devil
we all paid the price"
The violin is my favorite kind of music. Thank you for the video and the powerful poetry. Some people dance on a dangerous line and leave us with sadness. No weakness in the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Frieda P]

Some people are too afraid to stand up for themselves, dancing on that fine line is not a good place for a parent. Thanks for your insightful review John.

[s y e]

four words: super duper truper good!

[Frieda P]

ha, that's a new one! Thanks so much farfalle xo

[s y e]

No problemo deary xox

[VintageOtaku]

I love sad violin i don't cry or anything but it brings me joy, i'm strange. Lovely poem people are going to be depress when they hear and read sad violin

[Frieda P]

It's really about the emotion it evokes, not all violin music is sad, thanks so much for your review VO.

[VintageOtaku]

you're welcome

[Frieda P]

Thanks for pausing on my page, much appreciated.

[Muse]

I've always had a soft spot for the violin. Maybe it's because the sound it creates...seems to resonate with human suffering. Stunning work Frieda...stunning...

[Frieda P]

I so agree Muse, nothing moves me quite like the sound of violins...thanks so much for this great review!

[Androglossia]

There is always something that lies beneath all things which is considered as the ultimate root of everything. This is once again a quick peek to your past Frieda but only to your foundation of facts and knowledge. Haunting words expressed in retaliatory fashion.

[Frieda P]

'Ultimate root', I'm going to steal that one from you...sounds better than what I call it, thanks so much Maryanne.

[Androglossia]

Go right ahead:) You're welcome!

[Annabelle Lee]

I'm always repeating myself as I'm reviewing you, good job, very dreamy, nice write, bravo. So I'm saying all of them all over again after reading and trying to find something else to say, well done.

[Frieda P]

That's what I like, a review with attitude! ;-)

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

A powerful write. This is one of those "there's a lot beneath the surface" pieces, and I like that. I think that all readers can relate to this in their own way, even though it is qutie literal in its intensity. I enjoyed the read, well done.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Girl Friday, much appreciate you stopping by my page, and the lovely review...