Sad Violin Tears

awarded 1st runner up in the Almost Anything writing contest... thanks!

...i vividly recall,

like sad violins

  i heard you cry

but a mere child 

      what could i do?

 you danced 

         with the devil,

we all paid the price

you kept us

      in harm's way

how could it be

         i needed to act

 the stronger of us

nevertheless,

   it taught me strength

each blow

 like a dagger to the heart,

blood pooled 

        around my feet

whilst you begged

for mercy

                    prayers 

 were never answered,

screams

 were never heard

          only the echoes 

         of violin tears

                   whilst I grew strong

Author's Note

Reviews

[kublakhan27]

There is little left for me to say by way of comments as you know me so well now and vice-versa...I can only send you notes to let you know that I've read your work and offer my ear (or eyes if you will) should it ever be needed...likewise, your writing is vivid and powerful enough that it does not require technical input...your voice is a breath of fresh air when positive, and a lightning rod of poignancy when negative, but both states transcend the page and penetrate the mind...you're the total package, to put it one way...I know you've had a rough few days and I hope that Frieda the dancing sensualist will return soon ;)

[Frieda P]

Ha, I just went from the deep psychotic to the dancing sensualist, gotta love this place! Thanks so much Steve, you give good review! ;-) xo

[kublakhan27]

My pleasure Frieda ;) xo

[Frieda P]

He lives!! ;-) xo

[kublakhan27]

Haha barely...real long week, and I still have another weekend to get through here ;P But I'm glad you remembered me while I was gone ;) xox

[Frieda P]

pfft as if! ;-P xo

[kublakhan27]

;) xox

[Brianna Brie]

This is a powerful piece. I saw it as the voice of the unborn taken through abortion. However, I know that other people process it totally different. You are thinking outside of the box. Excellent!

[rnuff]

simply wonderful, i enjoyed this write.

[KAOlmsted]

Sounds like she had it pretty rough, too...no excuse, though...just saying. Good, powerful, cathartic write. Well done.

[InsanityWriter]

The violin can carry such powerful emotions, as did your poem. Well played. ;)

[Sheila Kline]

As the notes of the violin filled the night air, a little girl would too often cry
While another one prayed and prayed that horrific pain would die
yet it was not to be
the horror continued
the pain was unbearable
one was able to endure - if only barely able to do so
the other not
and yet the stronger one must still hear the notes of the violin play as tears fall and a heart bleeds with remorse that shall surely last a lifetime.
It isn't fair. God no, it's so, so dreadfully unfair!! I am sorry you have to live with the memory of it.........not only of this horrific abuse, but of the loss that rips you apart!
Your words are descriptive enough to never forget. The sound of the sad violin accentuates the powerful emotions you feel!!!
Hugs and Loves............an unending abundance of them for you!!

[stephen dillon]

beatiful

[Frieda P]

Thanks for reading stephen.

[Renée]

Powerful.... Powerful Images reflected in this piece & in my mind...Life is not for the faint of heart and it is incredible what one survives to become an adult..
Horrific & Powerful Piece ..keep holding that little girl within close & give her a kiss for me..

[Frieda P]

Awh so sweet Renee, you made me misty eyed.

[Renée]

xo

[Frieda P]

♥♥

[Linda J. Harris]

Very strong emotions expressed. Gives for great visuals.
Very much enjoyed.
Just joined and getting started.
Linda

[Frieda P]

Welcome and nice to meet you Linda, thanks for reading and reviewing...much appreciated.

[Linda J. Harris]

As, I said, just joining and exploring the site. I have a lot to learn about getting around the site. So excited.
Thank you

[Frieda P]

I'm still learning and I've been here for months...enjoy, it's a really good place.

[Linda J. Harris]

Thank you for the encouragement.

[Gerald Parker]

Ah, 'les sanglots longs blessent mon coeur.....'

[Frieda P]

Anything in French sounds good, thanks for stopping by GP.

[Gerald Parker]

Thought you got your inspiration from Verlaine's poem, if not, have a read. There are translations online if your French is not up to it.

[Frieda P]

I googled it, wasn't sure if you were being sarcastic or not, since I don't know you...no, my inspiration came from living it...I'll check that out though, thanks again...

[Gerald Parker]

Not sarcastic, no.

[Deron Alexis]

very nicely expressed Frieda the violin is a very emotional instrument very suitable use

[Frieda P]

It definitely evokes something in most people, thanks Deron.