~Last Breath

For Lee with Love...

Last thought, 

         last breath,

   last moments

drowning my mind

          in a tsunami of grief

    what thoughts of desperation

         devoured your soul

was your heart broken,

 your mind irreparable 

your spirit severed

     from your force of being?

You took your life,

in an instant...

         other's went along for the ride

suicide kills more than one,

 in your release,

there is no peace

 for those left behind

you wrote your last chapter

        scribbled note tells naught

  your book of life never finished

you will always remain

a brilliant butterfly

   fluttering freely

          in my heart of heart's memory

Reviews

[Deuces]

Wow. This definitely hit hard. My best friend took this life at the age of 23 and I was the one to discover this. Your words feel like they came straight my brain to this page.

Suicide surely kills more than one. It creates a coldness in those around you that really never leaves.

Deep, real piece. Thanks for this.

[Frieda P]

So sorry to hear that Cyntax, 23 is so young, just on the brink of really living life, a real tragedy. And no, it never leaves the heart...if only people would realize this & ask for help...I get the desperation but it's so very difficult in the aftermath of this kind of loss. Thanks for your kind words. My heart goes out to you.

[KAOlmsted]

Another touching tribute to that beautiful, troubled soul...my heart always aches.

[Frieda P]

Thanks for your kindness always kimmer.

[KAOlmsted]

...no thanks necessary. But you're welcome < 3

[InsanityWriter]

Beautiful and sad. "suicide kills more than one," too true. :/

[Frieda P]

Fact, I can only take away from this that you know this feeling firsthand....sorry Skittles, thanks for your kindness.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Such pain and grief in a life stolen and a death come too soon at the hands of a broken soul. I can feel your pain on this Frieda. Your words cut deep into the heart.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Carolann for your kind words.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Welcome Frieda.

[Barbara Walker]

Beautiful! Describes in strong imagery your emotions. "drowning my mind in a tsunami of grief. ...suicide kills more than one. ...there is no peace for those left behind. Thank you for the read request.

[Frieda P]

Thanks for the review Barbara, much appreciated.

[s y e]

Such a sweet, loving tribute as always, hun. I can feel your pain sweets, this was so raw and it honestly made me speechless.

[Frieda P]

Speechless again, wow. :-) xo

[s y e]

Oooooft, flip flops! You gotta stop doing that to me! xo

[Frieda P]

ha! then you'd never shut up! ;-P

[s y e]

-.- Exactly my point!

[Frieda P]

:-D

[Annabelle Lee]

the lyricl flow of your work always manages to captivate me though it rarely rhymes. bravo!

[Frieda P]

I'm not so hot as rhyming, and I can only go on what falls out of my head, thanks Annabelle Lee!

[...Relic...]

I know the feeling. I like the line "suicide kills more than one." My friend didn't even leave a suicide note. It would have helped some if he did. It would have cleared up some questions that are now unanswered. Good poem Frieda.

[Frieda P]

Not sure that would have made a difference Relic, mostly said 'I'm sorry', nothing you can get out of that...sorry to hear about your friend, thanks for the review.

[...Relic...]

:)

[Claire Twinn]

Such hurt is so hard to bear.

[Frieda P]

...and it keeps on giving, thanks so much Claire.

[Michael G.]

A loving tribute, Frieda. I am really touched by your last line.

[Frieda P]

Thank you Michael.