Heedful Caution

I implore you

please don't impart

 your heart to me,

 your essence

         is the lovely warmth of potpourri

There are damages broken 

beyond repair

          exposed in me

you'd not survive 

 the depth of inky waters

There are no flutterby kisses

     on the fiery horizon

death's door captured my head

   and hung it out to dry

you fall on me,

you're sure to get burnt

What you've captured is a facade

 covering ravaged afflictions

to foray onto these grounds

         would be like quick sand eruptions

  Eaten alive, a chain reaction

           plunging descent into Hades

 ask the bodies strewn

                  along the way

               In my lovely plot of the dead

                  my twisted garden

                    cultivated methodically, 

    dark debris marks it doom

Reviews

[quinfinn]

as i read this, my heart cries for your tortured psyche...my eyes tear up for your bleeding soul and i would impart to you only the gentlest wishes for happiness, only the truest of all empathy and loving understanding. it seems the best and brightest of us sometimes have too many demons to quell their fears and anxieties and are richly deserving of so much better. this is a straight to the heart and deeply moving warning of your own idiosyncratic proclivities, self destructive and yet, all for self preservation. i love your gentle heart, frieda...it truly shines through in all your writes.

[Frieda P]

'Idiosyncratic proclivities'....nice way to put it huckleberry quin...thanks so much for your lovely response, it truly touches my heart.

[quinfinn]

always

[Frieda P]

xo

[KAOlmsted]

They never listen, nor do they ever learn...you say "Hey, I'm damaged, I will damage anyone foolish enough to tangle with me" and they say "Yes, but not ME" and you're like "Yes, even you" and they say "I'll take my chances"...then, later, you shrug and say to the fiery wreckage "Told you so"...

Great write.

[Frieda P]

Exactly. Thanks kimmer.

[KAOlmsted]

But of course...

[Barbara Walker]

Dark past alluded to, yet you have the warmth and love in your heart to impart this warning. The words should be taken seriously, but I am afraid many would take it as a challenge to be the one to overcome and when they get burnt, wonder what happened!

[Frieda P]

Ha food for thought right there, thanks for your insightful review Barbara!

[beautiful dreamer]

what a haunting poem but beautiful all the same you have a way with words

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much bd, you're so sweet to say.

[beautiful dreamer]

just being honest Frieda

[Frieda P]

Like I said, you're sweet :-)

[beautiful dreamer]

thanks :)

[Annabelle Lee]

your vast vocabulary never fails to astound me. I nearly need to pull out the dictionary before reading one of yours.

[Frieda P]

Ha, I do that too, that's where I got mine! Thanks Annabelle Lee.

[Blue Ivory]

I can relate to this. This is a heartfelt piece.

[Frieda P]

Always an extra bonus when someone can relate, thanks Siren.

[Michael G.]

This reads like a huge mental "No Trespassing" sign, or
"Enter at Your Own Risk."
A warning to innocents that not all is as they may see and think. A keeping at arm's length, so to speak.
Well written as always.

[Frieda P]

Yep, there are signs everywhere, thanks Michael...

[Emerald Seas]

Sometimes those with the greatest pain have the largest smiles to hide the sorrow from the world. Such a deeply moving piece, Frieda.

[Frieda P]

So true Sera, so true, thanks for your insightful review.

[KeelyJane]

Excellent! I love your word selection. The imagery was beautiful and the flow was flawless. Great job on this piece.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Keely.

[CS]

Thank God for poetry. It is the best way I have found to donkey kick skeletons from the closet.

Your warning has been noted. Thanks for the heads up! I enjoy your little flower cemetary though. Thank you for letting me visit.

[Frieda P]

Seriously, was there a time before poetry, and how did people exist, if so. You're welcome to my humble abode anytime, will serve wine after noon if you care to imbibe. Thanks for the lovely review Courtney.

[khalid]

very nicely penned...i love how you expressed such feelings in such a nice way..as usual..

[Frieda P]

Ha this is just poetry, that's not how I usually say it. ;-)

[khalid]

thats how you usually say poetry..in a very nice way..lol