Stage Fright

voices in my head,

 a familiar twist

strangling vocal chords 

in my eyes

old movies, instant replay mode

take 33/act twelve/quiet on the set

from the top again....let's roll it

tonight we'll play lovers

more passion/less acting

I don't care anymore

    about your lines

i see your lips moving on cue, 

there's nothing happening

silent movies rarely get awards

merely going through the actions,

 you don't get paid

dress rehearsal on a reel

 spinning off reality

break out another old script,

 shot this rerun in technicolor

you're breathing, but expired

this scene is dead

sweeping exit

cut/

Reviews

[khalid]

oh woww i love this dear...why do many lovers become deaf when they are supposed to talk? it really sucks then to be waiting for one single word from those locked lips..
is it shyness then? i think love teaches lovers to be brave not to be shy..
we need to hear what we feel, a sweet word can remove years stress..if you love, express it..

[Frieda P]

I could not agree more khalid, fear I suppose...thanks so much for your insightful review as always...

[khalid]

my pleasure always dear..

[kublakhan27]

Wow, this is a popular one...six libraries already ;) I could never write something like this, I'm hardly a movie buff and it would never even occur to me to use this metaphor haha As usual, you've worked your metaphor of choice to perfection...well done :)

[Frieda P]

Wow, thanks for telling me, I almost scraped this one...weird, thought it didn't make much sense except to me, what do I know? ;-)

[kublakhan27]

Artists are always their own harshest critics ;)

[Frieda P]

ha you should know! ;-P

[kublakhan27]

haha yeah I know ;)

[jamal]

WOW this is Great writing Frieda......wow, well made, i love it!

a relationship in form of a movie,

Great job once again!

[Frieda P]

Thanks jamal, sweet review!

[Blue Lotus]

Such a exquisite piece frieda..
take 33/act twelve/quiet on the set
break out another old script
dress rehearsal on a reel
spinning off reality
shot this rerun in technicolor
you're breathing, but expired
this scene is dead
sweeping exit
cut/

a poetess after my own heart... big thumbs up

[Frieda P]

I know you're trying to confuzzle me by changing your name now...thanks Hanah!

[quinfinn]

if life were rehearsed it would be the same play over and over again. gone are the days of the silent movies...where the expression "read between the lines" originated. life can be somewhat as a Nickelodeon if you allow it to...with the forced smiles, the gentle and unspoken nuances of romance and the breakneck speed action sequences which get no extra takes because they are wrought with danger. best to advance frame to your favorite scene and replay it until you know it by heart and no words are needed. excellent piece here , frieda posies!

[Blue Lotus]

lol advance frame to your favorite scene

[quinfinn]

;)

[Blue Lotus]

Quinf yesterday you lost your smiles....
I see we have you back again :) enjoy

[quinfinn]

what can i say? i am Cancer/moon child....moody and sensitive...guess i wear my soul on my sleeve....maybe i'll become a poet and share all my moods with the world someday....hmmmm

[Blue Lotus]

"i am Cancer/moon child....moody and sensitive...guess i wear my soul on my sleeve" we wouldn't have you any other way quin

[Blue Lotus]

:)

[quinfinn]

:)

[Frieda P]

We're exchanging signs here I see, also I just figured out you're Hanah....ha give me the head's up will ya/ ;-P

[Frieda P]

What I meant to say was thanks heaps quin! ;-)

[quinfinn]

love your poet's heart frieda.....did i mean to say that?.......yes

[Blue Lotus]

hear hear! and ups yeah it is me hana.. promise no hide and seek..
it is all there out in the poem. i think you where ill when i send out rr ;(

[Frieda P]

Tis okay, now I know...it's a nice pen name btw. :-)

[ms. barrie]

more passion/less acting
I don't care anymore
about your lines
i see your lips moving on cue,
there's nothing happening
silent movies rarely get awards
merely going through the actions,
you don't get paid
dress rehearsal on a reel
spinning off reality
break out another old script,
shot this rerun in technicolor
you're breathing, but expired
this scene is dead
sweeping exit
cut/

--- Your Writings/Poems never fail to astound me, Frieda! This poem is eloquently powerful and profound, an incredible write! I agree with khalid...I also love this!
Amazing poem, unique in both imagery, your words capturing fluidity. Always Pen On, and Thanks for Sharing! 100 to 100! *favs.* :)

[Frieda P]

Wow Barrie, thanks so much for this review...!

[Holly Mason]

very creative way of saying we are not just in a movie we are the movie pay attention to us the most important thing we have....love the ending*)
thank you for sharing

[Frieda P]

Thanks Holly.

[Louise-Charlotte]

Oh I love the rhythm of your poem! Very interesting theme, wonderful representation and perfect title.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Louise, I want you to call you Maryann, since you look so much like my niece! ;-)

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Actions speak louder then words. that goes for love making as well... but when you slip into the same routine then the show will get cancelled due to lack of interest, that is why you got to spice it up with roll playing, doing the act in public... ect.

[Frieda P]

Ha seriously Dale, in public! ;-)

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Yes... I have done it :)

[Frieda P]

On stage? ;-)

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

In public silly.

[Frieda P]

I knew that. ;-P

[lee von cleef]

Good job , good luck,never ending story to find,to hold authenticity,the real illogical fuel expanding each other even once , Then I can't get Time Warp, or Meatloaf out of my mind..... and looking for that Christmas morning kid digging through the pile "exclaiming with all this poop there has got to be a pony here someplace" Some people make us blush,even a guy who needs a shave and a shower,and this poem is a good reminder to us to step out and do a unexpected kindness ,before we get cut.

[Frieda P]

Meatloaf, not sure how you go there, but thanks lee!

[lee von cleef]

Song "Waiting for the end of time" Bat out of hell" album

[Frieda P]

Oh i love that one...yeah makes sense.

[lee von cleef]

Captivating song, loved his lace and sleeves,

[Frieda P]

That was my least favorite part....the lyrics are fabulous though.

[lee von cleef]

least favorite, boiled okra,next.....

[Frieda P]

just the thought of that made me sick...

[lee von cleef]

There you go primer for a poem,

[Lover Of Words]

Okay seriously lady where do you get all of this stuff! You leave me amazed all the time wow wow wow oh yeah and WOW!!

[Frieda P]

Oh seriously lady, thanks ;-)

[Lover Of Words]

your welcome