Stage Fright

voices in my head,

 a familiar twist

strangling vocal chords 

in my eyes

old movies, instant replay mode

take 33/act twelve/quiet on the set

from the top again....let's roll it

tonight we'll play lovers

more passion/less acting

I don't care anymore

    about your lines

i see your lips moving on cue, 

there's nothing happening

silent movies rarely get awards

merely going through the actions,

 you don't get paid

dress rehearsal on a reel

 spinning off reality

break out another old script,

 shot this rerun in technicolor

you're breathing, but expired

this scene is dead

sweeping exit

cut/

Reviews

[khalid]

oh woww i love this dear...why do many lovers become deaf when they are supposed to talk? it really sucks then to be waiting for one single word from those locked lips..
is it shyness then? i think love teaches lovers to be brave not to be shy..
we need to hear what we feel, a sweet word can remove years stress..if you love, express it..

[Frieda P]

I could not agree more khalid, fear I suppose...thanks so much for your insightful review as always...

[khalid]

my pleasure always dear..

[Jamie Cook]

I love how you used stage fright to explain the real situation in the relationship. That was awesome, and yep, both scenarios are well presented in your poem. Well done Frieda, you're awesome sauce! ^^

[Frieda P]

Haha love awesome sauce! Thanks Jamie, this one was much fun to write.

[Jamie Cook]

Welcome and I bet it was ^^

[KAOlmsted]

Just going through the motions never won any awards, either. Great write...I think a lot of relationships have hit this wall...it all depends on whether you have the energy to prop yourself back up and try it again.

[Frieda P]

The name of the game, propping yourself back up, thanks the kimmer.

[KAOlmsted]

Always, Miss P, always ;-)

[Frieda P]

So proper today. ;-P

[KAOlmsted]

*laugh* I have a head full of used up gin ;-) You're lucky I'm even conscious at this point xD

[Frieda P]

Wow, gin makes you proper, must be a special blend! ;-p

[KAOlmsted]

It's London gin, very dry...makes for a stiff upper lip...I won't tell you what it makes stiff on The Brit xD

[Frieda P]

I'm pretty certain it's not his pinky finger. ;-P

[KAOlmsted]

xD Umm...no comment :-p

[Sam Ingram]

This is absolutely incredible. I love your style of writing and use of subtle metaphors.

[Frieda P]

Much appreciated Sam, sorry I didn't see this one earlier.

[InsanityWriter]

Nice! I got stage fright a few times during plays... Thankfully though, after that first initial fright, I got better. ;) Great poem!

[Frieda P]

Thanks Insanity.

[A. V. Madison]

A poignant read, and yes, I agree with Noodlehead, stage fright is not funny! I've worried about it for five years because every year I sing in the school show, and I worry about it constantly!
Perfect, love.

-Mary Alice

[Frieda P]

Thanks for visiting my page Mary Alice and the great review.

[s y e]

Stage fright is not freakin funny! Its the scariest thing ever! ://
Believe it or not, I am sooooooooooooooooooooooooooo shy! :P Im not kidding though, I dont like all the attention.
Nice write, sweets!

[Frieda P]

I can see that, but you'd never know it online...and you know this isn't about actual 'stage fright' right? :-P

[s y e]

I know you wouldnt and of course I know that! I just thought Id let you know that...

[Frieda P]

Ummm is that sexy 'shy' noodles in the new photo?! erhum

[s y e]

Me? Heck no!

[Frieda P]

ha well it could be....

[s y e]

Nope it's not

[Frieda P]

ha mama was almost gonna take the keys away again ;-P

[s y e]

Bummer! Don't take me keys away! xP

[Frieda P]

pfft MY keys young lady!

[s y e]

Awk ya know what I mean jelly bean ;-)

[Emerald Seas]

Very creative! A nice twist on viewing the current scene and articulating about life - well executed.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Sera, wasn't sure if anybody would get where my head was going, glad you enjoyed it.

[beautiful dreamer]

i am an actress/ singer/ dancer so i like the reference. great poem!

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much bd, and I didn't know that. :-)

[beautiful dreamer]

yup just won two grand champions in one day for show choir!

[Frieda P]

Woooo! Go you darling girl....nice!

[beautiful dreamer]

thanks frieda!

[Annabelle Lee]

something makes me thing you arent talking about an on set performance

[Frieda P]

...and you'd be correct! Thanks Annabelle, nice to see you around again.

[Tarry Franck]

This is amazing - Very well done my friend.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Tarry, take care of our girl this weekend! ;-)

[Tarry Franck]

My pleasure and I certainly will. Have a fun weekend planned :)