Crash Unto Me

“I want to gather your darkness in my hands, to cup it like water and drink.”  

Jane Hirshfield

The siren song is playing,

 will my persuasion tempt you

sway with me

 in the silvery strands of moonlight

let's do the dance of allure's enticement,

 I want to drink you til dawn

folded backbone into one another,

 let our essence mingle

you touch

 my natural woman's quintessence 

i'll embrace

 your manhood with divine release 

twirling, swirling delirium

feverish pitch

 in frenzied tempo's heat

swept away by you,

 my feet never touched the ground

extract from me what you need,

 my warmed silken glow,

i'll embrace

 your bold machismo till i'm worn

dance with tenancy and resolution

 till your guts are plucked raw

heart and soul's mettle will conquer our bodies,

 grab the spirit

sip gossamer fluids that from me freely flows,

 i'll inhale your madness

fractured blaze until the collapse,

 ruptured thunder within

lay me down next to your crash

 till our next interlude

Reviews

[Jibey]

A heady cocktail (lol) of sweat and sensuality, of quintessence flowing juicily and feverish grabbing and groping... The mad spirit was there all right (gin?) and I take it the guts plucked raw meant there were multiple orgasms lol

Sensational... to say the least... f*****g sensational :-)

[Frieda P]

If you say so Jibey ;-)

["writing by" KS]

Sexy, sweet and sensual.. perfect read as well as write. X

[KAOlmsted]

This is about sex, right? No flies on me ;-)

Very hot. Steamy, even. Love it.

[Frieda P]

Lol that or some really macho vodka! ;-P

[KAOlmsted]

Mister Belvedere I presume? xD

[InsanityWriter]

Amazing write. :) Great usage of words! ^_^

[Frieda P]

Grazie Skittles ;-)

[Jamie Cook]

*gets fan and speedily fans red face* Wow.....that was wicked! like like I can sound all professional or just you know apt for reviewing but nah let me say that was very passionate and lovely ;) great job! ^-^

[Frieda P]

Ha I like that reaction, thanks!

[Jamie Cook]

Welcome ^-^

[Baby Ricochet]

I like reading this kind of thing from you with all the metaphors flying everywhere cause whenever I write on the same theme there's no metaphors. It's an interesting contrast to me.

[Frieda P]

Oh thanks Baby, I thought you'd hate the metaphors.

[Mia]

Now this is worthy of an OH LA LA! MMMMMMMM...WOW! This is incredibly sexy and beautiful!

[Frieda P]

Your words have crashed unto me, sweet, thanks so much!

[Forest Green]

Nicely fractured, your poem illustrates the many visions of a challenging theme...

Excellent...!

[Frieda P]

What a great review Steel, thanks so much.

[writing mojo]

I love the ending the best," lay me down next to your crash till our next interlude" it whips the essence across the devilish/ sexy background, where you concur to mention each of your senses sight, smell, sound, and taste, it's all presented on this written faction mapped
The middle portion of this piece "you touch my natural woman's quintessence
i'll embrace your manhood with divine release twirling, swirling delirium
feverish pitch in frenzied tempo's heat" is a tender portion lapped into a caress of opposite forces, they attract the (taking), that moves through each silhouette emblem of meeting your match....great job

[Frieda P]

I'm bronzing your review, I love it! Thanks so much mojo...

[writing mojo]

welcome

[Emerald Seas]

Stunning poem, Frieda. A very well crafted verse of sensual delight with eroticism that entices, excites, without vulgarity or reduction of the moment. The intensity is perfectly pitched throughout. I don't favorite much erotic writing (if ever), but this is beyond being "very good."

[Frieda P]

I'm honored Sera, this is not my genre for the most part but I've been having fun with it, my first one was a mess, so glad you like it.

[Emerald Seas]

I have to be quite inspired to write erotica or anything close to that genre that would be worth reading! Best not to let my head go there while I still have such a long wait! Lol

[Frieda P]

Yes, true! ha, if i don't try to stretch myself, I'd write dark poetry every day, and then John, my therapist yells at me ;-)

[Emerald Seas]

Oh, I've been dawdling with a poem or two in my head (especially since my weekend had to be cancelled!), but they're not ready to hit the page yet. My writings usually fester for a while then spill forth on their own. Good thoughts so I'm hoping they decide to form into a good writing or two soon!

[Frieda P]

Oh that would drive me insane, if I don't get it edited and out, it'd make me more nutters than I already am...

[Emerald Seas]

Just a hint under the surface right now. Usually it flies out, not much editing as I write and post. I used to write my college papers like this too. I'd do tons of research and then "sit" on it for a few days then I would drop 15-20 pages or more without a thought - go back and throw my quotes, stats, references in where needed, then submit... 3.9 GPA I wasn't going o mess with what obviously worked for me ;)

[Frieda P]

Whatever works, I'm usually frenetic when I write...so I have to get it out right away, so they'll be internal combustion! ;-)

[Emerald Seas]

Sometimes it hits me like that too. Feeling a tide shifting (finally) so my mind is working different stuff these days! All good :)

[Michael G.]

You both write sensual and exotically erotic very well.
While your sitting on it, QSS, write one on Monday on how you captured several strings of beads. (LOL! Teasing, just teasing.) Excellent write, Frieda.

[Emerald Seas]

That's next weekend, Mike! Oh, I'm sure I'm going to have all kinds of material after next weekend! ;) lol

[Michael G.]

Just at some point, pause a tip your wine glass my way... and I'll do the same.

[Frieda P]

I think I missed something here....

[Emerald Seas]

Haha, Mike knows I'm headed to New Orleans next weekend for 4 days! Celebrating my friend's 50th birthday. She lived there for 12 years and is so flipping excited to be going back for a visit. I've never been - so I can't wait! And I need the break :)

[Michael G.]

Perhaps I shouldn't have said anything. But a weekend out in the Big Easy? There's mileage there that I can even write about from here.

[Frieda P]

OMG i love N'awlins! Been there 5 times..I can't wait to go back..ha beads, yes!

[Emerald Seas]

Mike, no worries! I'm so excited about the trip and am just glad that Elena's feeling better so I can still go ;)

[Michael G.]

Good. I'm glad that's working out for you. You are overdue for some fun.

[Emerald Seas]

Yes, I am and not bashful about saying so ;) jeez... I just hope my liver holds up! Lol

[Frieda P]

ha i'd trade my heart for a new liver! Lol

[Emerald Seas]

I shall post a picture or two from our excursions if I can manage the camera ;)

[Frieda P]

Ha take a few before you hit Bourbon Street! ;-)

[Michael G.]

Great.

[Sami Khalil]

swept away by you,

my feet never touched the ground

extract from me what you need,

my warmed silken glow,
It will transport any single man ( mercy on the married ones ) into your magical world and the power of your passions.
Always a pleasure to read your poetry...

[Frieda P]

ha Khalil, maybe it'll give married men an idea what to do with their wives tonight! thanks so much.

[Sami Khalil]

^^~^^ :) You are a smart lady...

[Frieda P]

Only when it comes to other people, never myself lol ;-)

[Sami Khalil]

I understand...:)