Missing Chroma

If you excavate my heart,

 you'll still find me

if you dig deeper into the soul 

there's a clue

a faint resemblance

 of what it used to be

Nonetheless it breathes

 all living things

my eyes have died

 a thousand deaths it seems

colors blur into oddities

 of alien shapes

hues of no depth

 or shadings of sentience

no butterflies to soothe

            the breast or enlighten

Essence of vitality,

 is stipend to a minimum

essential nature of momentum

conforming ghostly vapors

 is fleeting, still

             I cling to hope

 whispering for resolve

Reviews

[Angel of Heart's]

I felt like I was being pulled into a kaleidoscope with an extra dimension....embraced in your beautiful artistry to enthrall the senses....perception echoes throughout your writing.....you never fail to amaze me with your wise meanderings of thoughts so eloquently penned.... your vast skills are harmonious with your spirit as always....:)

[Frieda P]

Wow, I'm overwhelmed by your kind words and review Angel, thanks so much.

[KAOlmsted]

I see you RRed this to me like three weeks ago, so that probably gives you an idea of how behind I am *laugh* I'm going to get through as many today as I can, and you just happened to be first up...lucky kimmer!

I love these scenic trips through your psyche; I never tire of making the journey with you, because I always see something new with each passage. Superior write, this. Sorry it's taking me so long to get caught up...

[Michael G.]

This does have the feel of only black, white, and grey.
Good write. Strong "Frieda" write.

[Frieda P]

Hmmm, are there other colors perhaps Michael? Thanks so much...

[writing mojo]

you leave the ending tied up in a big red blood warm bow
present to the skin anticipating
unwrapping a fail safe easy
unboxed to the heart left
to the page like a gift...great piece

[Frieda P]

Always a pleasure seeing you on my page mojo, your reviews are so intense, love it!

[s y e]

Wow, you had me hooked by the first line!

"If you excavate my heart,"

That is a powerful line there Mama F! Woah!

[Frieda P]

Thanks farfalle...I kind of like that line too ;-)

[s y e]

Kind of? Kind of? Are you being an eejit? Its amazing!

[Frieda P]

Not really, you know how it is with your own poetry.

[s y e]

I do but you are amazing!

[Frieda P]

So are you, but you're never satisfied with your work either...I have a few I like a lot...

[s y e]

Yeah I'm not haha.
There is only one I really like of mine, but yours to me are great!

[Frieda P]

That's the curse of the frustrated poet I think, always trying to get one that's perfect, of course there is no such thing....we're hopeless lol

[s y e]

Hahaha, it's our imperfections that make us perfect

[Butch Decatoria]

nice...

whispering for resolve (that's me right now)

[Frieda P]

thanks PF, and sorry to hear that.

[Night]

I could feel this one...deeply penetrating to the very marrow of the soul...Still, life finds a way to help us smile again I believe...=)

[Frieda P]

I know you're a BIG believer David...thanks for the review. x

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Frieda break free!

[Frieda P]

John, are you critiquing my poetry or giving me free therapy? ;-P

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Free f*****g therapy!

[Frieda P]

Can you hear me rolling my eyes at you out loud?! Good thing I like you....! ;-P

[Daegal]

Wow nice! I hope to achieve this level of writing. Thank you for sharing.

[Frieda P]

Wow, what a sweet thing to say, thanks so much for your review! :-)

[Baby Ricochet]

Ghostly vapors. I like it

[Frieda P]

Thanks Baby.