Fitful Hauntings

Your desperation

           has punctured

 a hole in my soul

              your light is gone, yet

   it lives loudly in my being

only to be turned into

 darkest of night inky blues

hanging in mid air

 with no breathe in sight

last thoughts of decay

           and torment left behind

 You are now my affliction

 for which I abide

   departed vivacity crashes 

              and settle in life's crevices

residing in the torment

 of spirit's anguish

no comforts to bear 

            the cross of sorrow's woe

melancholy eyes penetrate

 my sleep at darkest hour

cursed with the nightmares

 of your final hours

Reviews

[quinfinn]

i fear this hearkens back to a loss of yours with which i am painfully familiar. frieda, darling, i hate this for you. like my Jeanine, this is something you will never get out of your heart. it does help to write and emote to others....this is both endearing and sad. and it makes me want to extend my heart and hugs to you across the miles. awesome and very personal write, my dear one.

[Frieda P]

You're most gracious quin and I really appreciate it, you have no idea what that means to me...thanks so much.

[quinfinn]

i'm your huckleberry

[Frieda P]

Huckleberry quin..has a ring to it.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

There are some people that use their misery to suck the life out of those who are happy.

You do have a special way with words young lady.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Dale.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

My pleasure young lady.

[Frieda P]

You keep calling me 'young lady' and you're gonna knock my socks off, not to...forget it ;-)

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

:p

[kelvin]

Some have ways of putting words of expression on paper and you can see it come to life to where most or at least some of the readers are snapped back to a memory of a mishap or experience that happened to them relating highly to what they are reading for this is life within reading from a talented writer putting their experiences to a fitted puzzle piece creating a clear viewed picture and you have truly done this here. I hate that we all have issues of loss and pain among other things that likes to linger in our minds and hearts. As always keep writing fellow writer

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much for this insightful and thoughtful review kelvin, much appreciated.

[kelvin]

You are very welcome

[Debbie_Philly]

of spirit's anguish
no comforts to bear
the cross of sorrow's woe
melancholy eyes penetrate
my sleep at darkest hour
cursed with the nightmares
of your final hours



I felt this very deeply.... I know this feeling... Great work !!

[Frieda P]

Sorry if you know this one personally....it really blows, thanks for the review.

[Debbie_Philly]

Yea I was thinking about my brother ... we were very close... its a great piece and your welcome !!

[justjenn_2u]

Excellent word choice, showing wisdom. Word flow is superb and subject matter leaves reader in question. The true quest of a poem.

[Frieda P]

Thanks justjenn, much appreciated.

[rubie]

wow. just wow. this one hit me like a punch to the gut and shook me to my core. you see, it struck a chord deep within me. a very special person in my life is a cancer survivor of 5 years now, and nothing frightens me more than the thought of losing him.
this is a poignant and beautiful reminder that we need to tell the people we love how much they mean to us, before it's too late.

[Frieda P]

If that's what it did for you then I'm very grateful it had that effect on you....we just never know. Thanks so much.

[Lover Of Words]

I understand how you are feeling... Seems like this may have been a tough one for you to write and i can feel your pain so easily... Thank you for sharing this with me Lovely words

[Frieda P]

I know you do sweetie, and yes very difficult one, but I needed to get it out...thanks so much Kelsey.

[Lover Of Words]

Yes i know you needed to get it out and you did a great job doing so!

[Androglossia]

You really don't like sleeping, do you? We've had small talks about nightmares and I remember you said about it depending on how retarded you are, well I thought about it I think you have a point. It's actually how you receive the occurence and how we achieve understanding of it. Well anyway, I think this poem is about reoccuring thoughts of of loss which you have decided to withstand and embrace. Emotion is not directly expressed but is implied throughout the poem.

[Frieda P]

Therein lies the problem, there IS no understanding of it, and that's where my stupid mind takes me, it's not something I can control. Thanks for your kind thoughts Maryanne.

[Jack...]

Wow, this one blew me away. Talk about powerful, like it had some sort of explosive, it jump off the screen and into my soul. Frieda, friend, thank you for sharing.

[Frieda P]

Thanks for reading and being so kind Jack.