Fitful Hauntings

Your desperation

           has punctured

 a hole in my soul

              your light is gone, yet

   it lives loudly in my being

only to be turned into

 darkest of night inky blues

hanging in mid air

 with no breathe in sight

last thoughts of decay

           and torment left behind

 You are now my affliction

 for which I abide

   departed vivacity crashes 

              and settle in life's crevices

residing in the torment

 of spirit's anguish

no comforts to bear 

            the cross of sorrow's woe

melancholy eyes penetrate

 my sleep at darkest hour

cursed with the nightmares

 of your final hours

Reviews

[quinfinn]

i fear this hearkens back to a loss of yours with which i am painfully familiar. frieda, darling, i hate this for you. like my Jeanine, this is something you will never get out of your heart. it does help to write and emote to others....this is both endearing and sad. and it makes me want to extend my heart and hugs to you across the miles. awesome and very personal write, my dear one.

[Frieda P]

You're most gracious quin and I really appreciate it, you have no idea what that means to me...thanks so much.

[quinfinn]

i'm your huckleberry

[Frieda P]

Huckleberry quin..has a ring to it.

[KAOlmsted]

That must have been some final act of desperation, and it pains me so much to read these pieces of yours, but on the other hand, they are so hauntingly beautiful to read...thank you for sharing them with us.

[Angel of Heart's]

Such a deep and abiding sense of loss in this piece, dearest Frieda...such whispers of ache captured in these deeply moving brushstrokes....so powerfully touching...((hugs))

[creativequill]

melancholy eyes penetrate
my sleep at darkest hour
cursed with the nightmares
of your final hours

painful truth spoken with the most feared honesty
we can move on
we can try to forget
but we can never be the same

[Michael G.]

No review, though technically and every other way the poem is good.

Just a quiet hug.

[Frieda P]

Awh thanks Michael, you are a sweetheart.

[Annabelle Lee]

so mystical. you never give us the story straight, rather dance around the plot and flirt with each chapter. I love that about your work. bravo

[Frieda P]

If I gave you the story straight, you might never sleep again...............
thanks Annabelle.

[s y e]

Wowsers! So powerful, sad and painful all at once!
Blew me away!

[Frieda P]

Thanks farfalle, it is haunting.

[s y e]

It is very haunting!

[Frieda P]

Now you know why I hardly sleep...

[s y e]

LOOOL

[Kaylor Mason]

Nice poem, but what really struck me was the avatar photo--for some reason it reminds me of a Myrdraal from the Wheel of Time saga

[Frieda P]

Have no clue what that is...but I'm sure it's some type of creepy creature. Thanks for the review Kailor.

[Night]

My love always to you Frieda...=)

[Frieda P]

Awh you're sweet David, thanks so much! ;-)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Frieda, like Quin I immediately recognised this story. For her sake you have to break free of the torment and cellebrate your life in her honour.

[Frieda P]

Yes John, thanks.

[Daegal]

Love this! Great words, nice flow.

[Frieda P]

Thanks for the read and review Daegal, much appreciated.