Unveiled

Gauzy film upon the heart, like faded graffiti on brick

not enough to remove the haze of irreverence

give me a full steam gag of passion or bygones

your cheek is not the respect I desire

mockery of sinful equations that lie at my feet

Sanctify the means of this just defilement 

ridicule my lust and fervor and praise to the dust

succumb to crimson emoting boundless floodlights

you violate my sensibilities with so little trust and emotion

sat me upon a pedestal only to be thrust again the wall of pedestrian

foray into unknown dense jungles of cannibalistic gods 

Worship at the altar of blood's sacrifice and sweaty acquiescence

agreement to sanction is but a mere concurrence of beastly traits

desire the flood gates to unfurl strip your soul naked to the world

slice the vein which mingles scarlet with mine to adorn a sacred oath

roar the untamed brute of labyrinth with intent and my claws will be yielded 

Reviews

[quinfinn]

you been listening to bob dylan again? this is truly well worded and just confuzzled enough to piss off poe, keats and byron. i love it! (what the f**k does it mean?) JK , i get it, it is very cryptic yet readable....you are in a sassy and intelligent mood. great write!

[Frieda P]

As a rule I don't listen to Bob Dylan, I love a few of his songs, otherwise he depresses the fook out of me. Ha if you said that again, I was going to freak out! ;-) Thanks quin dear.

[quinfinn]

dylan can't sing a note. and he stole most of his best writes from the wastebaskets and trash cans of other writers....or so i have read. we don't need you freaking out, my dear. fine write....

[Frieda P]

Ha I scared ya huh? ;-P

Mwah!

[quinfinn]

concern, not fear

[Frieda P]

;-P

[KAOlmsted]

Ouch...hey! Stop throwing the dictionary...it hurts when it lands xD I saw a mutual friend in this ;-) Very intelli-rant. You do the genre justice.

[Angel of Heart's]

This reaches from the dark with a profound lesson and message in reality!
this poem is so incredibly powerful....emotional abuse can be as hurtful as physical....:(

[Annabelle Lee]

I have NO idea what this means, but the words fit well, I like how they danced and flirted across the page and in my head

[SHEEMA HUQ]

firstly the title image was very curious and I can imagine an 'other worldy' blood sucking high priestess, ruthlessly acting out her vigorous passions, quite scary and very well written, thanks

[Frieda P]

I love where your mind goes SHEEMA, thanks so much for this insightful review.

[Jibey]

So emotionally raw... a kind of reluctant submission to heartless abuse, told in searing verbiage and piercing imagery

[Frieda P]

Exactly, thanks!

[AYVID N]

A very suitable tirade for an uncaring lover. How we wish they could come out with some real feeling rather than just sit throughout the day mean, and cold and unresponsive.

Loved it Frieda!

[Frieda P]

You hit the nail on the cold, hard head Divya! Thanks so much....I love when you read me like that sister! ;-)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Like Quin, I thought this to be intelligent disconnections in a rant against the injustices life has to offer.

[Frieda P]

Interesting, thanks John.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

I think we all too often put the one we love on a pedestal and when they make a mistake we feel like we fall from grace... coarse i believe you are talking bout a big screw up here... your technique and creativity are undeniable.

[Frieda P]

True Dale, why does it always have to be so complicated? Thanks....
will miss you bugging me all day. ;-)

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Oh i will still be around, don't you worry... why does it have to be complicated, to make life interesting.

[Rob Santana]

What's irreverence

[Frieda P]

Hmm disrespect....I meant it like a flippant attitude, I'm sure you can relate. ;-P

[Rob Santana]

Most def, haha. I was to lazy to look it up.

[Frieda P]

Do I have to do everything around here? ;-P

[Kaylor Mason]

Good God that is so brutal in its beauty and raw in its hunger! I was left breathing hard at the end of this! Nice!

[Frieda P]

Breathe.... ;-)

Thanks, that's a great review!