Gum Relish

You hold me between your teeth 

and gnash 

never really chomping down to enjoy

release not an option 

         Am i sustenance

 or just a piece of snappy gum

to keep you busy whilst you fancy

all the nuances of savor,

be sure to taste your words before

 eventually spitting me out

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Sheila Kline]

Just hope you don't get popped in a big bubble....chew that gum, chomp, chomp, blow a bubble, and then you pop it before someone else can.....lol I hope he has gum left all over his face!! Take the pepper out of his peppermint, the juicy out of his fruit!!
Give it to him!!

[Frieda P]

Ha leave it to you Sheila, thanks dear.

[s y e]

Well, this is different.
Ya do know that gum soon gets tasteless.......?! Im gonna zip me lips now!

Toodles!

[Frieda P]

Hmm I'll get back to you on that one.

[s y e]

Haha, you do that buuuut noodles knows the answer ;-P hahahaha

[Androglossia]

If you're a gum Frieda, you will eventually be spat out for sure. But be assured that by then he is already suffering from temporomandibular joint disorder because you are not just an ordinary gum. Very sassy this is and very much enjoyed.

[Frieda P]

Ha, what are a dentist!? Good one, one can only hope! Thanks Maryanne.

[Androglossia]

No, I'm tooth decay.

[Frieda P]

Why so serious? ;-P

[Androglossia]

How did you know I was? You a sibyl? :D

[Frieda P]

I can tell, I've been told I'm a witch, or was that a b***h, either way, i have special powers, ;-)

[Androglossia]

Hahaha! I always have special affinitiy with witches but I think I would take the b***h :D

[Androglossia]

affinity *

[Frieda P]

I think b'witch would be a good combo. ;-)

[Androglossia]

Lol, is it? Where the helI can I make a purchase?

[Frieda P]

I think you have to go to one of those All Natural wonder stores, and get ripped off but it's worth it. ha

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

very interesting metaphoric use... some people do not learn to appreciate what they have, they are too busy looking for something mysterious.

[Frieda P]

Amen to that.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Not just a man, plenty of men... and women for that matter.

[quinfinn]

i would never spit you out, my love. you are simply too delicious. well written!

[Frieda P]

I was going to say....never mind. Thanks. ;-)

[Claire Twinn]

I disagree with John on gnash- its a great word and doesn't necessarily denote anger- we could also gnash on a juicy steak or perhaps a poor girl's feelings.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Claire, I'll be sure to let JOHN know. ;-)

[Priscilla Sayers]

Cleverly written as the truth is spun with your crafty mind. The acceptance of the truth shows no bitterness but knowing and that is a hard thing to accomplish as our hearts when torn can be very bitter, yours my friend portrays wisdom above all.

[Frieda P]

Wow, 'wisdom' I'm floored to say the least, thanks so much, no one ever puts me and that word in one sentence! ;-)

[Priscilla Sayers]

You are very wise silly lady;)

[Frieda P]

See? Now that makes more sense. ;-P

[Priscilla Sayers]

Hey now! You know silliness can make the wise wiser! I love you for it! Crazy knows crazy my love and I am getting nuttier by the moment:)!!!

[Frieda P]

Ha! Gawd I love you to pieces! ;-)

[sithlordjp]

this is most original! A funny read, and yet, a statement of something deeper? Is the gum keeping us away of words we should say? To chew gum is to have a quiet conversation with one self, peut-être....

[Frieda P]

Ha I love it, French comedy!

[AYVID N]

They must be sadistic who do that. Slash that tongue, do maximum damage before before they spit you out!

I loved it Frieda! Dont change it. It conveys everything to me.

[Frieda P]

You blow me away sis, thanks! ;-)

[AYVID N]

I do? Not a bad thing! :)

[Frieda P]

Never a bad thing ;-)

[AYVID N]

;)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Interesting but not your best poetic work.

You hold me between your teeth
and gnash
I didn't quite relate to this metaphor as gnashing represents anger or dismay and is related generally to a description of the torments of the damned in Hell. Maybe now I get it lol!

[Frieda P]

I just have gone with 'masticate' my original plan, would that have done it for you?

[Frieda P]

*should have* sorry...

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I think it would have better represented what you were trying to convey. Of course in poetry it is for the poet to choose their words for effect. What were you trying to portray because masticate could also represent chewing things over?

[Frieda P]

A person keeping you on the hook until something better comes along basically.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

You suck my flavours.

[Frieda P]

Sorry...what?

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Hold me on your tongue, melting my tastes for your satisfaction.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Never really swallowing, unsure you are ready to digest this feast

[Frieda P]

Yes, I thought that was an invitation at first. Lol

[John Alexander McFadyen]

It seems I am the entree you were never sure you cared for and here you are ready to simply spit me out.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

The main course awaits your salivation.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Something like that lol

[Frieda P]

Ha you wrote a whole other poem....

[Frieda P]

Yeah you got it, all I asked was about masticate...ha ;-P

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Ok will work it onto the page.

[Frieda P]

I thought this could apply to poets too, you ever get people that read you and then their review is one word, like 'fine' . What is that about? ;-)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Shallow platitudes. Scared of inviting critical appraisal of their own work?

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Posted 'Ready Meal'

[LA Lorena]

this conversation and the duelling gum wars reminds me of 8th grade. We used to buy packages of this horrid purple gum and compete to see who could stuff their mouths with the most. The record was 3 packs, and I'll not let on who the winner was. My lips are sealed.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Rumour is you have a big gob!

[LA Lorena]

Never believe in rumours John.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Good advice so shall I suck on it?

[Frieda P]

Please do. ;-)

[quinfinn]

gnashing denotes really enjoying a good meal to me, just sayin'

[Frieda P]

hmm to me it's more like a grinding....not pleasant, like you'd enjoy a meal.

[quinfinn]

oh, you mean like a wolf gnashing it's fangs at an enemy? that makes sense, if you use it in that context. i think it is all about context, my dear.

[Frieda P]

Hmm well the context was some a-hole who uses woman until he's through with them, does that fit? ;-P