Feast On

You want to feast of me,

         rip my flesh from the bone

overflow my cup with

                 crimson wine and plumage

Submerge into my engorgement

       of swollen flood banks,

plethora of salty seas

 scalding my burning release

Lay me down,

  I will deluge your appetite,

drown in the salaciousness

 of ravenous Eros

your devotion to  gluttony

is my hunger replete 

Reviews

[KAOlmsted]

Is it weird that I do this sort of affectation of my inner voice when I read pieces like this from you that sounds rather much like a lustful Victorian heaving bosom and breathless shouting woman on the verge of multiple O? Yeah, I didn't think so, either ;-)

Quick note...maybe "of" wants to be "on" in the first line? Or perhaps throw a "make" in there?

Breathlessly heaving my bosom here...just saying ;-)

[Frieda P]

You don't know hoe it thrills me that I could so move that awesome rack of yours! Just saying. ;-)

[KAOlmsted]

xD You are my whole entire heart...





...just saying ;-)

[Frieda P]

Holy cats, I love you! ;-)

[KAOlmsted]

Holy cats! I love you, too...so...you wanna hug it out or...are we good. xD

[Frieda P]

Consider yourself squishy hugged xD

[KAOlmsted]

;-)

[Frieda P]

Btw, holy cats is my new catch phrase, thank you very much ;-)

[KAOlmsted]

YES!!!! *fist pump*

[James William Dyer]

I like the contrasting of agony / ecstasy and control / submission. I think some of the larger words employed, like salaciousness, although they have a time and place, are somewhat distracting in certain places, but aside from that, good work.

[Frieda P]

Thanks James... salaciousness, one of my favorite words.

[Andie]

Ohhh. I love this! ^^

[Frieda P]

Thanks Amanda! :-)

[Andie]

Noooo problem. XP

[Silent Kim aka mizmetap..]

Dark and forbidden. I enjoyed the rawness of this write.

[Frieda P]

Thanks for the read and review Silent Kim.

[Silent Kim aka mizmetaphysicallady]

YW

[s y e]

Well wow! You got a way with words hun! That's for sure!
Nicely written, sorry I'm behind on your writes. School has me jam packed.

Loved it!

[Frieda P]

Nice to see you back farfalle!! thanks hon x

[s y e]

No problemo darlin'

[Annabelle Lee]

I've told you before, but when I read you it's like I'm having a dream, a nightmare in some cases, but thanks for taking me away, bravo

[Frieda P]

Ha you're not the first one to call me a nightmare, thanks Annabelle ;-)

[Coyote Poetry]

Amazing use of words. I had to read again. I like the use of appetite to give life to your statements. I like how the ended the poem. The situation can be changed. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Frieda P]

Must have something to do with being Italiano, food is life! ;-)

[Jibey]

You've got into 'If music be the food of love' mode.. or in your case, 'If food be the music of love'.. There is such an agony and ecstasy feel about this... and a longing for mutual release... 'drowning' - filling, scalding... Sometimes a wild, tearing f**k is the only way...

[Frieda P]

ha you slay me with your review Jibey, thanks....

[Carolann Dowsett]

Passion and pain, submerged in hopeless longing. Awesome Frieda.

[Frieda P]

You read me :-) thanks Carolann

[Carolann Dowsett]

Welcome :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

This feels like a mixed emotional piece. Hurt yet longing.

[Frieda P]

Thanks John, that's how I was feeling when I wrote this.