Suspended Prose

You breathe me lifeblood,

               evoke me from my slumber

My destiny was in the

                 artlessness of love

    I surrendered myself to peace

          of lucidity's aesthetic

        mine own inanity bore itself 

                 No kisses to wake

 the enchantment of winter

tucked away smugly wrapped

 in fusion of titanium

thoughts never to venture

                      flight again

I inhaled the magic elixir

                so that my  being could soar

      above perpetual weeping sleep's

 dying adulation of

      earthly amour without prose

                      Ecstasy & rapture

on the winds of passion

 I found my freedom

     locked away where pain and hurt

                         do not dare render

          neatly tucked on communion's

                 cloud nine surrender

Your veneration roused

  inert savages

cavorting blissfully

                    that dance of spirit reborn

    moonbeam wishes caught

 my piquancy

                    in naked wantonness 

i live in this banality of insanity 

        within this shuffle

~suspended~

 in this dreamlike stanza

         my breath transcends

wakefulness in arousal 

essence of poetry

Author's Note

Reviews

[Devanshu Rajput]

greatly fantastic...remained me speechles...one of the best work read on this land of writers...nicely designed...thanks for sending me rr regarding this to me...really enjoyable and wonderful read... Great piece of writting by a great writer...lovely piece...keep writing like this more...really appreciable...
gorgeous work...

[Frieda P]

Wow, it is I who am speechless now, thank you for that glowing review, very much appreciated!

[InsanityWriter]

Very well written. (; Great job!!

[Coyote Poetry]

Your poetry is getting better. You need to be published. Your words flow with purpose and have no mistakes to confuse the reader. Thank you for the good music and the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Frieda P]

WOOO you just blew me over with that one John, I'm humbled by your words, and have a huge silly smile on my face too! Thanks so much.....................

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

You certainly know how to free verse your feelings with style... from beginning to end I was enthralled with in your verse.

[Frieda P]

Oooo, doing the happy dance Dale, thanks so much!..........talk to kimmer will ya, she's been picking on me all day. ;-)

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Like I am gonna get in the middle of that... it would be like getting between to tigers fighting for territory rights :)

[Frieda P]

ha when did you get so smart? ;-P

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Experience is the best teacher :)

[Frieda P]

Some people never learn, you're smarter than the average bear Yogi ;-)

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Oh I learn, but I also forget sometimes, that is when I repeat mistakes :)

[Frieda P]

I've been President of the I Never Learn Club since forever now...ha

[KAOlmsted]

"...thoughts never to venture flight again..." I assume it was intentional that you used this line twice, I scarcely believe you write anything unintentionally, but I wonder if it would seem more deliberate if you wrote it a third time, to sort of bring the point home, as opposed to it looking a bit samey...like maybe you forgot you used it then used it again *laugh* Other than that small little silly insignificant thing that I am probably the only person it bugged ;-) this was really beautiful. You're so good at this type of poetry, Frieda. I just love it.

[Frieda P]

Hmmm I'm gonna have to think on that one, I thought 3x's would be overkill and I was hoping you'd get the idea that 'flight' was okay after the 5th stanza....glad you liked it, you pain in the tush! ;-)

[KAOlmsted]

xD Always!

[Frieda P]

ha ;-P

[Frieda P]

Done ;-P

[KAOlmsted]

And done well. Awesome, lady. Except in the first line, should that be 'my' instead of 'me'? Couldn't really tell, it works either way...I'll stop being a pain in the tush now ;-)

[Frieda P]

OMG you're freaking killing me here! Did you not get laid last night or what? lol ;-P

[KAOlmsted]

xD

[Frieda P]

I can hardly tell if that's a yes or no!

[KAOlmsted]

It is an emphatic yes...twice...in the hot tub ;-)

[Frieda P]

Okay now I'm just downright depressed! ;-P

[KAOlmsted]

Then I'm not even going to tell you the Brit just came home for *ahem* lunch ;-)

[Frieda P]

*rolling my eyes* @ afternoon delight, and starts drinking early!

[Dalia]

this was another charming piece of write
thank you for sharing it, it gave me some peace while reading :)

[Frieda P]

Thanks Dalia, I'm so happy you enjoyed it. :-)

[Dalia]

I did c: your welcome

[Carolann Dowsett]

Your talent shines through with every stoke of the pen Frieda, you truly are an amazing artist. Your passion and longing, coupled with your desire to escape from pain is so evident here. Love it!

[Frieda P]

Woo, I just got a contact high from reading this great review, you're too kind Carolann, thanks so much! :-)

[Carolann Dowsett]

Welcome :)

[critic h]

there has been a charm in your art and will always be. I am gaping at the poem as i was skimming thru it. its like reading world contest winning poem. out topping knowledge yet fantastic.

[Frieda P]

Wow, such sweet words critic h, thank you so much.

[AYVID N]

Very beautifully and articulately written Frieda...I appreciate it a lot, though I am afraid I am never going to wake from my slumber again :)

[Frieda P]

As long as you're dreaming of poetry it's all good Divya, thanks hon ;-)

[icelandicblue]

There is a mystical property to the entire piece. It has an ethereal quality to it. I enjoyed this very much.

[Frieda P]

Ooooo, 'ethereal' I like that...thanks!!

[Annabelle Lee]

Another good one... Bravo

[Frieda P]

Thanks Annabelle.