Read Between the Lines

If you won't read my lips

read between the lines

If all you see is the motion of my hips 

I've got news for you and a little tip 

Instant gratification is not my game

so you have nothing to gain

if you don't understand my plea

 maybe it's you,and not me

Take a step back into reality

you're no longer my cup of tea

Let's cut our losses before it's too late

you've always had one foot out the gate

Reviews

[KeeD]

What John said, can read them as individual poems and they still stand out as really good pieces and combined together they form something beyond great. Very well thought off, the context, the form in which you've written and presented it.. shows an experienced pen. Excellent!

[Frieda P]

Thanks, glad you appreciate it Kee.

[Distant horizons]

Clever. Methinks it is them :-)

[Frieda P]

Methinks I'm glad you read it. ;-)

[Distant horizons]

:-)

[LA Lorena]

Oh, I like this! Nothing like spelling it all out in the fine print.

[Frieda P]

Thanks LA

[Jack...]

My word, my eyesight is bad enough as it is...it took me a while, but I found it. Very clever, Miss.
Unique and creative is what you have brought to us today.
This is pretty cool.
Sort of like holding up 3 fingers and saying the same thing.

[Frieda P]

Ha, did you just flip me the bird Jack? ;-P

Sorry about that, it wasn't easy on mine either, but it needed to be done. ;-)

[Jack...]

I can not confirm or deny that accusation.

[Frieda P]

LOL!

[catofjade]

I believe you could have done three or eight lines each! Yay! Originality! With no banality! Just cold reality filled with practicality minus the theatricality....so yeah, I like it!!

[Frieda P]

Thanks for your origninal answer. ;-)

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

and out you go...
"allez ala porte! pronto!

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

u tell him

[Frieda P]

Is that like don't let the door hit you on the way out?

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

heheheh

[Margarette]

This is a unique poem that is really worth reading. Although it does not utilize the use of logic, the style you've made compensates for it. Well done!

[Frieda P]

What does logic have to do with poetry? Thanks for your review.

[Margarette]

Because when I saw your title, I thought the subject matter would have something to do with using one;s logic but instead, when I read through your poem, it seems that your title literally meant it. Hey, some poetry can also have logic and I think that's cool also.

[Frieda P]

Ahh, now I get it, that makes now...nonetheless don't expect 'logical' from me ;-)

[Margarette]

Ok love your poem though:)

[writing mojo]

this is very intelligent design, very creative in the telling of two sides of the story; a perceptual masterpiece..way to challenge yourself

[Frieda P]

I'm humbled by your kind words, thanks mojo!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like the two poems side by side...and i love the idea of "it IS you"

because i have always wanted to be able to say that...instead of the usual..."it isn't you, it's me"

cool piece.

[Frieda P]

Ha, funny jacob...thanks!

[s y e]

On my! Sugar plums! This was reallyyyyyyyyyy good doll. Your amazeballs!!!!!
Waaaaaah xD Loved it!!!!!!

[Frieda P]

So Sugar Plums replace ooooft ;-)

[s y e]

HELL NO GIRL! Dont EVA replace my words! Ya hear me! ;-P

[Frieda P]

ha I didn't, you did....silly noodles. ;-)

[s y e]

NO no no no!!!! I did NOTTT!!! I am giving you MORE noodle vocab ;-P

[Frieda P]

ha is there an actual dictionary of noodle speak?

[s y e]

Well DOH!

[Aidz]

I did and all I saw was unicorns n pixies eating mushrooms

No that was me eating shrooms

[Frieda P]

You and those freaking unicorns!

[Aidz]

yup

[Frieda P]

Blahblahblah

[Aidz]

shhh Im screaming

[Frieda P]

Did you just shush me? ;-P

[Aidz]

yup shushhhh or shhh Im slurpin me cider

[Frieda P]

I assume cider has alohol in it...

[Aidz]

yup 8% : burp
passionfruit infused with Pink Lady apple mmmmmm nice

[Frieda P]

ha sounds like a girlie drink tough guy!

[Aidz]

mm do I say fukkkk off lmao no I wont swear ill be a fuken gentleman n not fukrn swear as saying FUK is a low call its an ye oldie English drink
:P

[Frieda P]

Read my lips........................

Hope you're sleeping it off. ;-P

[Aidz]

Yup I slept now wot??? Oh reading your lips, but they are covered in chocolate n cream