Read Between the Lines

If you won't read my lips

read between the lines

If all you see is the motion of my hips 

I've got news for you and a little tip 

Instant gratification is not my game

so you have nothing to gain

if you don't understand my plea

 maybe it's you,and not me

Take a step back into reality

you're no longer my cup of tea

Let's cut our losses before it's too late

you've always had one foot out the gate

Reviews

[KeeD]

What John said, can read them as individual poems and they still stand out as really good pieces and combined together they form something beyond great. Very well thought off, the context, the form in which you've written and presented it.. shows an experienced pen. Excellent!

[Frieda P]

Thanks, glad you appreciate it Kee.

[KAOlmsted]

How f*****g clever! :-D I like this one a lot...could not even imagine how it would look in a book, though...thank god for technology ;-) Well done, lady. And I bet he got the point.

[Frieda P]

That never even crossed my mind, always thinking kimmer. The point, do they ever get the point? ha.... Thanks.

[KAOlmsted]

Ha! Right?? My pleasure, of course.

[kublakhan27]

Instant gratification is somewhat of an oxymoron when applied to this topic haha I always hear jokes and things about the women's ability to pace themselves while guys are already asleep by the time the woman is ready for the main event...the first thing that came to mind reading this was Robin Williams warning guys to "learn yourself some foreplay...bring a lunch, stay for the day" Not much else I can add to that ;P

[Frieda P]

ha, if I didn't like you so much, I'd smack you. ;-)

[kublakhan27]

Haha hey I'm speaking in admiration for the women here ;)

[Dalia]

very creative indeed, we need to read between the lines to see the whole picture.

[Frieda P]

Agreed, especially when people talk in riddles, thanks Dalia.

[quinfinn]

all i can say is, if this was written with an individual in mind he must be one thick slice of bread! but yes, i love the way you dissected this piece without really dissecting it, that was brilliant. oi, veh! when are men gonna learn that women aren't just pieces of meat? i love this write, frieda!

[Frieda P]

Hmm seems there's a lot of thick sliced bread on the market, sorry to say.

Woooo... Really jazzing on this review, made my heart skip a beat! x

[quinfinn]

i never met a woman yet who didn't jazz on respect

[Frieda P]

Very profound observation quin! xo

[quinfinn]

i have my moments

[Frieda P]

More than moments hon...

[David Scott]

I liked this. Read it three times. First every line, then just the bold, then the light lines in between.
The point was clear in bold, but the explanation was found reading between those lines.
Great write here.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much David, I was hoping it'd come across as such.

[Annabelle Lee]

Aha! The not so subtle message wearing its subtle mask. Bravo

[Frieda P]

Thanks Annabelle, like this review. ;-)

[Lover Of Words]

This is one of the best ones i have read from you sometimes you have too read between the lines too get the point of what the writer is trying too say... Nicely done :)

[Frieda P]

Woo, thanks Kelsey!

[Lover Of Words]

Its my pleasure!

[khalid]

you are really creative as well as talented poetess. i think few people read what is between the lines. not because they cant, it is because they dont want

[Frieda P]

Thanks khalid, some people wouldn't be able to read flashing neon, I agree.

[khalid]

yes, flashing neon illitrate people..

[junaid altaf]

lips are silent yet they move.........!!!!!!!!!
but without them ...............u can't imagine...............

[Frieda P]

Weird thought, thanks!

[junaid altaf]

well weird is something beautiful un-noticed.......

[Frieda P]

i will agree with you, I just had a wierd flash of a woman with no lips whilst I read it, ha.

[junaid altaf]

thatz tantalizing...........and moreover flashing is something obnoxious at times...........hahahah

[Frieda P]

hahahaha...tantalizing in what way, we'd keep our big traps shut? lol

[junaid altaf]

heheheheh.....u try to formulate a lot of humor and the tumor of humor well it is only a rumor .....................

[Frieda P]

It formulates itself, that's my brain.........................

[junaid altaf]

your brain a rain or a migrane.........whateva itz .........u got words!!!!!!!!!!!!

[Robbie~xoxo~]

YOU GO GIRL!!!
This reminds me of Beyonce' song, "To the Left". This is Sassy!... You have voiced a strong heart...a Lioness indeed! Love it!

[Frieda P]

So happy you enjoyed it Robbie!