Read Between the Lines

If you won't read my lips

read between the lines

If all you see is the motion of my hips 

I've got news for you and a little tip 

Instant gratification is not my game

so you have nothing to gain

if you don't understand my plea

 maybe it's you,and not me

Take a step back into reality

you're no longer my cup of tea

Let's cut our losses before it's too late

you've always had one foot out the gate

Reviews

[KeeD]

What John said, can read them as individual poems and they still stand out as really good pieces and combined together they form something beyond great. Very well thought off, the context, the form in which you've written and presented it.. shows an experienced pen. Excellent!

[Frieda P]

Thanks, glad you appreciate it Kee.

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Oh, creative genius! Excellent :)

[InsanityWriter]

Nice job. ^_^ I enjoyed!

[Baby Ricochet]

HA!

[Robin]

poetry, woven from the threads of an unravelling relationship

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy..]

God !!! Frieda so amazing and beautiful and expressive !!
you are a glowing star
of the sky of poetry :*

[Emma Ruth]

I love the structure! Refreshingly different and a pleasure to read; thank you for sharing! :)

[Frieda P]

Thanks Emma, very appreciative of your read and lovely review.

[Jess]

your statistically a brilliant writer Madam F;)

[Frieda P]

woo you flatter me so khicks, thanks so much! ;-)

[Deron Alexis]

very witty always keep me guessing what next Frieda

[Frieda P]

ha, you never know what'll come out of my crazy head, so happy you enjoyed it!

[C.C. Marx]

Clever and sarcastically brilliant, I expected nothing less :)

[Frieda P]

Oooo, love this, 'sarcastically brilliant' killing me softly with your words! :-)

[creativequill]

i very much loved the way you structured this, as several below me I read through a few times, it works as a whole, it works in the bold, and in the grey. I believe the bold portion is my favorite, but as always every bit is wonderful frieda :)

[Frieda P]

Thanks it took me a while to get them to work independently, glad you enjoyed it, thanks!
read moreThanks it took me a while to get them to work independently, glad you enjoyed it, thanks!

You feeling better? ;-)

[creativequill]

ah yes, I have calmed down :) the delete button is an easy one to press ;)