Broken Ring Dings

Floating through

 triangles

                              fluttering by

 herded chaos

ring ding's of 

life's existence

it treads on,

 permeable 

                          viscous centers

extreme pressures

 blending oozes

                         of crimson and burnt umber

slipping down the canvas 

      in stokes of 

loquacious garble 

unsettling 

delusive testimony

carousels of

 deception

                               spin my heady ground

Hallelujah 

the unnerving

 utterances of

                    desolation

boogie street lost it's grip

the masterpiece

 a puzzle 

                              absent pieces link

confined to the stern

nauseated by bobbing

 apple seas

debilitated without

 a belladonna

salvation a flotation device

 palmy ring tarnished

head line 

to the heart line

Reviews

[quinfinn]

one of your more provocative writes indeed. i love some of your word choices (almost looks like a creative writing exercise) but i know better than to think they were contrived. isnt it wonderful to see Thomas back, with his wit and honesty? writerscafe gets better every day!

[Frieda P]

Yes it's indeed a writing exercise, it's called 'keep Frieda semi-sane' at least until the next write. ;-) thanks quin!

[Tarry Franck]

Amazing Frieda :)

[Frieda P]

ha you should be in my head ;-)
Thanks Tarry!

[Tarry Franck]

Wish I was

[Frieda P]

ha I like you a lot, I'd never let you near that thang! ;-P

[Tarry Franck]

I'll take your word for it. I appreciate that bec/as my friend there are some things I couldn't let you close to. You can read about them but that would be all. Love ya girl!!!!!

[Jess]

wonderful stuff Madam:)

[Frieda P]

Thank you muchly khicks.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Its like a work of art that you can't stop looking at. Amazing stuff Frieda :)

[Frieda P]

Ooo, I'm jazzing on this review, thanks Carolann! ;-)

[Carolann Dowsett]

Welcome Frieda :)

[khalid]

very nicely penned..what have you ever penned and wasnt nice?

[Frieda P]

You're ever so kind khalid, thank you.

[John Patrick Robbins AK..]

Its original and that to me is a great the this also had alotta big words but once i looked em all up then it really made sense to me.
All jokes aside my friend really really good write and i just liked the flow of it.

dam fine work keep posting and stay crazy gonzo

[Frieda P]

ha that's too funny, one of the minions calls me 'gonzo pickles'!
glad you enjoyed it, I think ;-)

[LA Lorena]

you need me to throw you a life preserver??? I can throw pretty damn good for a chick! Maybe not all the way from here to jersey, but I can try!

[Frieda P]

Ha, I bet you can, does it come with matching shoes? ;-)

[LA Lorena]

Everything must have the appropriate and coordinating footwear.

[Frieda P]

That's what I figured, throw me the reds of course!

[Dalia]

wow, this is one of your most interesting poems I've ever read for you, excellent choice of words, the whole structure is attractive , well done.

[Frieda P]

Wow, I really love your review, thanks so much!

[Dalia]

your welcome :)

[Frieda P]

;-)

[Deron Alexis]

sounds like someone was born had a tough life and got Alzheimer's disease or amnesia or something
great read really thought provoking love it

[Frieda P]

LMAO!!! hahahaha, thanks for that one Deron! ;-)

[Frieda P]

I'd love to get amnesia by the way....

[Deron Alexis]

na i think i would be more confused and probably disappointed when i come back to my actual life

[Frieda P]

Who's talking about coming back?! ;-)

[Deron Alexis]

lol yes maybe it would be good to forget all this and stay deluded :)

[Frieda P]

I used to love living in denial! It was a safe warm cozy place....

[Deron Alexis]

yeh its a place where nothing gets done too

[Frieda P]

Not much getting done on Reality Road either

[Deron Alexis]

sad but true lol crazy slightly awesome idea lets collab a poem about a fantasy world

[Frieda P]

ha sounds like a plan but I can't do it tonight, the minions will be here any minute...

[Richard John Davis]

brr

[Frieda P]

hmm not all of us have been happily married for 21 years ;-)

[Larry Dyson]

realted to diddiums I beleive?

[Frieda P]

Perceptive, related but not bound.